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Review of chapter "Chapter Two" from TharzZzDunN
Cool beans, thanks for sharing!

Review By [TharzZzDunN] • Date [14 Dec 13] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Two" from deathgeonous
I WANT MORE!!! Seriously, this looks like it'll be good, and it's a shame that this has been sidelined for so long. Well, thanks for writing this, bye for now.
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Need to figure out what world they're going to. I thought I had it, then I didn't. -.-
Review By [deathgeonous] • Date [18 Oct 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Two" from Netchka
Interesting. More chapters coming?
Review By [Netchka] • Date [4 Sep 11] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Two" from TachikomasUncle
For the love God, finish this thing or at least write another Oriens Dawn fic! Although, after not updating my fic for two years, I can't really complain, I guess ;)
Review By [TachikomasUncle] • Date [31 May 11] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Two" from Rune
Dawn as an Old One, neat idea, Dawn is somehow more "human" than Illyria though and I like that. I'm not sure you should "humanize" the smurf much though, but a Dawn/Illyria pairing is neat and they both will need someone who will at least live a long time. Looking foward to the next chapter. Thanks.
Review By [Rune] • Date [10 Oct 10] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Two" from Raider
excellent end to a long overdue update.

I remember finding this fic in 2007 before I signed up for an account here, was a good story then, it's still a good story now.

the snake and dawn's ability to talk to said snake, is something I find amusing, and havent really seen like this before.

yes, I've seen talking to snakes, but not to the extent that dawn has one as her pet/familiar.
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I think most of those are either mine outright or inspired by my stuff, too...
Review By [Raider] • Date [4 Apr 10] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Two" from Meneldur
I've read this story before, and it seems to me that you've simply edited and added a bit to the chapters. Fine with me./ I haven't reviewed it until now because there wasn't much to review, and it hadn't been updated in along time.
Interesting story. The idea of Dawn as Oriens is one I've already commented on. It's a nice idea. I like Kit as Dawn's high priestess, and her whole way-of-life is also pretty cool. So who's Galas? And who took him/her and Erycina? I can't wait to see where they end up.
What did Dawn mean by this: 'or that she would have spent the time learning to use her powers while teaching Illyria to be more human as part of a bizarre supernatural lesbian matchmaking scheme'? I assume it's temporary, yes? because otherwise, things might get awkward with Erycina, no?
Last question: will the Scoobies appear some more, or is this solely Dawn and Illyria centered? Because I can't get over the feeling that Willow would support Dawn (this may be simply because I like Willow - but she is a mother-figure to Dawn, and often supported/helped her), and being a powerful witch could truly helped- apparently she's already empowered Illyria.
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Well, Dawn's assuming that Erycina will end up in a female host because she thinks in linear, human terms most of the time... except for when what she's thinking about breaks through those terms, like the time manipulation she mentions to Kit. She's conveniently forgetting about Illyria's own gender-bent state.

Galas is a mythological figure who was the brother of Illyrius; Illyrius went on to father the Illyrian tribes through his offspring while Galas was the father of the Gaulish people.

Willow, she's got her own shit to do. A common failing of readers and authors alike... they sit down and imagine this post-Chosen world with a complex but fair New Council setup and the core Scoobies running it... and either the Scoobies are all still together or just so happen to end up back in the right place as the story starts (or within a chapter) so things can unfold with the Scoobies instead of requiring the post-Chosen Slayers to stand on their own. No, Willow isn't in this picture. She can be in Brazil, Tibet, Antarctica... wherever your mind wants to put her. It doesn't really matter. She's not in Cleveland, which is why Kennedy is.
Review By [Meneldur] • Date [4 Apr 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Two" from laoshi
Forgot to say Dawn’s pet snake is also amusing. Kit’s a good choice for Qwa’ha Xahn but shouldn’t a high priestess be a little more worshipful. Your description of Kit's island home was very well thought out. Can’t wait to see which fandom the theft of Erycina and Galas’s bodies will lead us to.
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The E-Crete is actually a material that Habitat for Humanity uses for the reasons Kit states in Mexico and Latin America. It can be cut with a hand saw, moved easily, arranged, the mortar goes in to secure each row, and then rebar and regular concrete goes down the inner holes to secure the wall. And Dawn and Kit are a completely different kind of setup from Illyria and the two guides we saw her with in canon, just as Dawn and Illyria are completely different.
Review By [laoshi] • Date [4 Apr 10] • Rating [7 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from laoshi
I haven’t read the first chapter in ages and I’m reasonably certain this is a newish version so he we go again.

I like the segue way from watching the slayers to Dawn’s nails to her rocking the fringe benefits of god-kingness. I know you just want to keep your rhythm going with the Dawn’s not really cold, hey she’s not really wearing clothes but because I’m a pedantic bastard who lives for this kind of philosophical thing that’s not entirely true. The clothes, sure no problem, fake clothes vs. real clothes is a perfectly valid distinction to make. But coldness is just a sensation, regardless of the external conditions that produce it, if you feel cold you are cold. But that’s just a minor quibble. I’m mostly still stuck back on Dawn’s not really wearing clothes. Naked Dawn always good.

I love Oriens Dawn anytime she shows up. This whole Illyria Erycina plot line seems very interesting but are you absolutely sure there’s no hanky-panky going on between Dawn and Illyria? Wonderful choice of the name you’ve tied it both into Dawn’s snake goddess status. Also I for one can’t wait to see want you’re going to do with a character whose the patron goddess of prostitutes. Although come to think of it you kinda covered similar territory in Snake Charming. I’m sure it’ll still be interesting though.

I was pleasantly surprised with the way Dawn dealt with Kennedy you’re not usually that harsh unless Buffy’s involved.
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It's going to get worse for Kennedy before it... wait, it doesn't get better.
Review By [laoshi] • Date [4 Apr 10] • Rating [7 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from Ramenth
Huh, I'd forgotten about this. Seems like an interesting spot to jump in any number of directions though.
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Or in a direction.
Review By [Ramenth] • Date [4 Apr 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Two" from deathgeonous
Nice. Thanks for updating this and bye for now.
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Review By [deathgeonous] • Date [4 Apr 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Two" from Markelo
So who's the new Old One? What about using the GOO name of Sara Waite from the Whateley Academy stories? Just have the new one use black as her/his signature color.
Review By [Markelo] • Date [5 Jan 10] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Two" from atz
I like this as a start of a bigger story.

Did you file it as a stargate crossover deliberately or was this just best fit?

Some suggestions (to help the muse stop whimpering in the corner and grow some teeth with which to gnaw at ankles)

For the new host:
Mother of All Darkness (From Anita Blake - more of a reanimation)
Cassie Fraser (From Stargate)
Kathryn Mertuil (From Cruel Intentions - think of the fun of having another SMG character)
Kate Todd from NCIS (pre or post death)

For Crossovers (in addition to the above)
The Pretender
Dark Angel
Review By [atz] • Date [16 May 08] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Two" from Dragonelf
I hope you get inspired to continue this story.
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I might someday soon.
Review By [Dragonelf] • Date [28 Sep 07] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Two" from TonyTheJew
Great story. so are there any more Oriens-Dawn story and what order should I read them in. Are you going to do a Stargate crossover ( I can see Illyria just kill all the goa'uld for saying they were gods ) Or a different crossover. Hope you up- date soon
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So far, I've done only one or two other Oriens stories and they're unrelated to each other. I just like the character concept.
Review By [TonyTheJew] • Date [3 Sep 07] • Rating [9 out of 10]
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