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Review of chapter "Chapter 25" from MarcusSLazarus
Review:
Any chance you could continue working on the continuation to this one any time soon; this story is FANTASTIC!

Willow blends into the Atlantis team seamlessly well, and their various reactions to her use of magic are spot-on; McKay thinks there’s another explanation, Teyla’s instantly prepared to accept it, and the rest of the team remain mostly neutral on the subject and just accept that it does the job against the bad guys.

Just one minor point about McKay’s little theory that Willow’s from an alternate reality; that definitely SHOULDN’T be the case. The idea that someone on Earth is capable of accidentally creating a portal to another GALAXY is incredible enough; having that portal be capable of punching through to another UNIVERSE at the same time might just be pushing it a BIT too far.

Willow’s various confrontations with the Wraith are also well-written, which I suppose is only helped by the fact that they even LOOK pretty demonic; she finds it relatively easy to adapt to the news of their existence since she can pretty much regard them as just a more advanced kind of demon.

The Wraith prisoner’s reaction to Willow’s powers is another interesting touch, particularly how he refers to her as his ‘Queen’, which opens up a whole new range of possibilities. Is there some connection between magic and the Wraith Queens (You know, like the Queens attain their position due to them possessing some natural magical abilities themselves), or is it just that Queens are the only authority figures in Wraith hives, so the Wraiths automatically regard anyone more powerful than them as a ‘Queen’ or ‘King’?

Oh, regarding potential sequels, if you’re taking recommendations, I wouldn’t mind seeing how the events of ‘The Siege’ work out this time around, particularly when Ford gets infected with the Wraith enzyme. I mean, would Willow manage to get through to him and convince him to stay and get help, would her magic mange to break through the madness caused by the enzyme, or would he still just go dolally and run away, leaving Willow to stick around with the main expedition?

Whichever outcome you choose (If you write it, of course), it should be interesting to see what happens then.
Comments from author:
What? Huh?

Well, thanks for the compliments-- I am glad you enjoyed the story. I wish I had a mind for writing fanfiction again because I would also like to continue this story. I actually wrote this during a weird period of my life. My dad had died and I had decided not to marry my then fiance.

I lost myself in writing in an attempt to not lose myself in depressive WHY WHY WHY WHY ME! journalling.

These days I am working on my doctorate in Urban Ed. and working full time as a public school teacher. Though I was teaching and working on my masters when I wrote this so it isn't outside the realm of possibility that I find some time to write...

I don't know if I will ever write a sequel. I started one but lost my notes-- then forgot what I was thinking... then got bored... then forgot entirely.

You know, since the ITB (Idiots That Be) canceled SGA I've lost my stargate groove... I also kinda decided that maybe Ford doesn't really need fangirl saving.

I see your point about McKay... I get it. Makes more sense than I made. Hmm. I could fix it... hm.

I really liked how I worked in the Wraith-- did you see that SGA episode this season, "The Queen"? Good stuff.

I really appreciate your comments. You have given me some stuff to think about... maybe in the month break between my fall and spring semester I will write something again as a welcome break from academic writing.

I am a bit irked that I couldn't reasonably commit to Nanowrimo this year.

You and I shall have to wait and see.
Review By [MarcusSLazarus] • Date [16 Nov 08] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 25" from Keshkreature
Review:
Wow, I love the whole twist with Willow as the "Queen." The development of the Willow-Ford relationship was great, as was her eventual acceptance by everyone else. I can't wait to read the sequel you have planned!
Comments from author:
hmmm

You know... nothing is planned.

Don't get your hopes up. I've been writing original fiction these days.

Sorry.

edit: Hmm.... maybe I am lying... an idea is ... percolating. No promises though.
Review By [Keshkreature] • Date [2 Apr 07] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 25" from Iriai
Review:
Is this story really complete? I hope not. I read it on ff.net as well, and it's not marked as complete. Anyways, love the story.
Comments from author:
oh sorry,

yeah it is complete... the truth of the matter is... I am musing about continuing the story... so far-- I got nothing... but 4-5 ideas.

There is a chance I will write something soonish.
Review By [Iriai] • Date [9 Dec 06] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 25" from pezgirl
Review:
that was great!
i would've reviewed sooner but there was something wrong with my internet connection.
i can hardly wait for the next part!!!
Comments from author:
Hey thanks for the review. Glad you liked the conclusion. I am reasonably sure I will continue the series. I am currently committed to some john/teyla SGA ficathon assignments...as soon as I get those out then I will write a short story (5,000-10,000) coda to "Childhood's End" (the next episode in that season). Yep.

Uh--- i'd say about 3-4 week wait , so don't like hold your breath or anything.
Review By [pezgirl] • Date [8 Nov 06] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 25" from Sadie
Review:
I was on again, off again with this fic...and suddenly it's over 20 parts and finished.

So, first off, great job.

I was iffy on the W/Ford pairing...only because I was iffy on Ford...only because he was a rather lacking character...(and really Aiden and Ronon should not have been so interchangeable. Would it have been so hard to give Aiden a personality/background in the beginning before deciding to cast him off because no ones connecting with him? I mean, really! (And a rant, apologies!))

Loved the writing of Radek&Carson. I love getting more of those two.

Wraith-Willow-Queen superb! I've been tossing around some thoughts on the two...and was delighted to see this used. Perhaps someone is on the same wavelength as me?

I look forward to the continuation of this fic/series. Especially if you do follow along with the timeline. Is there a wraith!Ford in the future? Or would Willow be able to talk him into Carson's 'cure'...
Comments from author:
Thanks. I am glad you liked it-- It will be much better in like a month or so (I am going to go back in and do some editing-- get rid of the over use of the 'to be' verb form and cut off character inconsistency and stuff).

I completely agree with you about the w/ford pairing... Poor Aiden-- such a flat-blah-boring character. Originally, I only used him b/c he was close in age to Willow-- you know when she was heterosexual and I figured I could do anything with him since he was a crap character. Poor Ford... I don't know why the writers didn't give him a personality. He definitely was worth developing... He was like Robin in Batman and Robin... He could have been the perfect goofy sidekick. Or maybe that is what didn't work.

I do like Ronon-- (I drool when he comes on the screen-- and I am a happily fiance having woman).

Glad you like Radek and Carson. Such sweet characters.

Oh and about the Willow as Wraith Queen-- I am glad you are thinking like I am-- I hope you write some fic about this.

I am really thinking about continuing this story. Have you seen the fic of Koschka off of fanfiction.net?

http://www.fanfiction.net/u/738014/

I am thinking of continuing the series in that sort of vein... not the slash stuff but episodic codas... I am still thinking about it-- the thing is I'd like to tell the whole story of something and I really don't think romance-in-progress is that interesting... so I can't segue into another long story-- set around the time of the next episode, I think is "Childhood's End" (sidenote-- I am such a GEEK)....

I don't want to rewrite CE with Willow just there... so I have to think of some compelling reason for her to be around... I am tossing around some ideas... I'll see what I come up with, write 5,000-10,000 words and post accordingly.

I am definitely going to write another LONG fic set around Seige P.1, P.2, and P.3-- must save Aiden-- or rather convince him to take the Carson cure... I am thinking of inserting some angst there... maybe changing his personality a bit as an affect of the wraith enzymes... and having the relationship have to 'deal with it'.

Anyway... thanks for the review. I love to hear what others are thinking about the SGA/BTVS universe.
Review By [Sadie] • Date [8 Nov 06] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 25" from RevDorothyL
Review:
Excellent chapter, and I'm fascinated by the Wraith's reaction to Willow (as well as enjoying Aiden's acceptance of it and Sheppard's willigness to use it against the Wraith). Plus, the bit about Carson being a gin-maker . . . ? Priceless!
Comments from author:
Hey thanks-- I am really glad you reviewed. I am not so confidant in my ability to write action sequences (which is why this was mostly a romance...). I wasn't so sure how the end turned out.

I am thinking Sheppard is cool with Willow doing something defensive like the spell around the wraith cell... I can't imagine him *allowing* her to go off world on wraith killing missions-- but the fact that she jumped in and saved McKay's lily white arse-- he's got no complaints.

I am glad you liked my additions to Carson-- usually folks have Dr. Zelenka doing the whole bootlegging.
Review By [RevDorothyL] • Date [7 Nov 06] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 25" from blitzgrl
Review:
This is really neat!! Will you be continueing with the story/series? I really hope so!! I don't get one thing. When Willow turned all 'witchy-like' why did the Wraith said "Do it my queen, do it.."?
Comments from author:
I am considering continuing the story---if I get any ideas-- and if I write something decent I'll post, yep.

hmm... because like--I'm thinking the wraith are all subservient-like to their queens. And he rather die than be captured-- that was his aim.

and willow was surely the 'queen' because she had psychic powers and all that.

edit: one more thing... I just looked, I used the phrase "reverence and menace" b/c the wraith accepted that Willow had psychic powers but HATED her because she was a human-- food...
also if he had to be killed by humans then he would rather be killed by a 'Queen'.
Review By [blitzgrl] • Date [7 Nov 06] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 24" from RevDorothyL
Review:
Good on Willow, protecting Aidan from the Wraith. And if love is an integral part of the spell, I think Rodney will be doomed to disappointment. Thanks for continuing to update this intriguing fic, and for giving me hope that THIS time around, Ford won't end up a Wraith-enzyme junkie.
Comments from author:
Cool. Glad you liked it. You are right-- poor Rodney. I do need to finish this-- too darn tired to review the notes I made during the day and work on the final chapter... I'll get to it in a few days.
Review By [RevDorothyL] • Date [1 Nov 06] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 24" from purrfus
Review:
Flame - mystical due to love or a result of Willow's spell?

Great job with the relationship flow and fitting it around the SGA timeline. I have seen this story listed a few times and have skipped over it because I have never been a big Ford fan. This time it came up as a recommend after I reviewed a different story and I read a few of the reviews and decided to take a chance. I'm glad I did.
Comments from author:
Spell. I am glad you read it-- I can honestly see why you wouldn't be a big Ford fan-- it isn't as if Rainbow Sun Francks was doing oscar calibre acting as Ltd. Ford. It is funny-- and completely unrelated--I am African American... and I always get slightly irked when there aren't people of color represented in starring roles in the media I purchase and love. I wish I lived in a world where a show could just have a good actor and a good storyline and I wouldn't think there is even the slightest amount of racism in the actor or storyline choices... I am an overeducated, intelligent, Black person-- yet-- I am still having this conversation with my friends... I can love a show or series but still critique it--What was up with most of the Jaffa slaves in early seasons of SG-1 being Black? When is Rachel Luttrell going to get a worthwhile storyline? TV producers and writers re-create the world that's housed in their mind-- you create imaginary societies that are white washed and you leave characters of African descent marginalized-- anyway. Stepping off that soapbox.

I think I said it before-- but this was just a personal writing project for me. I like to write-- and I hadn't been writing... somehow it so much easier to use existing characters and an existing story frame and just expand and twist the plot.

Anyway-- last chapter will be up in a few days (I guess).
Review By [purrfus] • Date [31 Oct 06] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 24" from pezgirl
Review:
it'll be intersting to find out what that Wraith meant about the 'flame'
i'm loving the story :)
Comments from author:
Hey,

Glad you continue to like it. I am trying to finish it like-- soon-- I have some ficathon assignments I signed up for and I just can't focus on them until this plot bunny is properly caged!
Review By [pezgirl] • Date [31 Oct 06] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 23" from lexas
Review:
I liked this chapter I think the whole Willow and Radek friendship is good I like Dr. Z and he doesn’t seem to have many good friends in Atlantis and the Willow/Aiden pairing seems to be working out well. I can’t wait to see what happens next update soon and great job. :)
Comments from author:
Hey,

I am glad you liked it and thanks for the compliment. I am kinda sad-- I am almost finished my story. :(
Review By [lexas] • Date [29 Oct 06] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 23" from (Moderator)jrabbit
Review:
Tiny point, but do you really think a hacker of Willow's reputation would use AOL!
Comments from author:
really? sigh. that is a big-ish point. Is aol like anti-hacker or something? I am a hotmail-type-person... I just thought the 'you got mail' sound byte would be cool reverb'ing throughout the infirmary...

So what would she use?
I could change it...
Review By [(Moderator)jrabbit] • Date [29 Oct 06] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 23" from pezgirl
Review:
great chapter!
i'm looking foward to the progress of the Willow/Aiden love :)
and her magic- that should be interesting, especially when she pulverizes some Wraith ass!!!
Comments from author:
Oh thanks for the review. I am fleshing out the next chapter... trying to figure how to set up a workable underlying plot for Willow and end the story...

I rather want to develop some sort of series-- but it has to be sensible and all that.

Glad you like the w/a love-- I changed the category to romance (instead of action/adventure/romance)
Not much action
Not much adventure

She shall pulverize some wraith ass. Yep. It is coming up... I wrote a little... need to edit-edit-edit.
Review By [pezgirl] • Date [29 Oct 06] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 22" from Bobboky
Review:
nice
Comments from author:
hey thanks for the review (reminder) to post
Review By [Bobboky] • Date [22 Oct 06] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 16" from TwistedSlinky
Review:
Oh, I love the way you write for Aiden. You make him very hot--especially nice artsy twist you put on the date. I love it:)
Comments from author:
Thanks! He was SUCH a flat character in the show... soooo one dimensional. Any detail works. I know Sci-fi isn't usually character based-- rather action-- plot driven-- but it makes no sense that there are folks on shows who you don't even get basic character details. So every detail in the story about ford is made up... except his name and the fact he wore lots of hats and was/is afro-canadian--though in the show he was african-american-- well bi-racial.
Review By [TwistedSlinky] • Date [17 Oct 06] • Rating [10 out of 10]
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