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Review of chapter "Day Care" from TouchoftheWind
Review:
So Wes was actually picking up Connor? Very nice!
Review By [TouchoftheWind] • Date [31 Jul 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Day Care" from littleoldme
Review:
This is an interesting idea, but I feel like the old adage "show, don't tell" could apply here. You do a lot of telling us about Wesley's feelings and about what has happened to Angel, but it's more effective to show us through his actions, or through thoughts that are a little less coherent and a little more natural as thoughts. The idea is certainly interesting- though I don't believe for a second that Angel would have given up on finding Connor in this dimension had Wesley kidnapped and kept him.
Review By [littleoldme] • Date [9 Nov 06] • Not Rated
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