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Review of chapter "Family" from (Current Donor)Katrina
Review:
Now, recognizing this was written a long time ago, is it silly to point out that the clothes issue is a non-issue once the permanent crossing can happen. If they can toss a pillow in or a blanket for picnics, then have them toss in a dress or two. Ta and da. Just saying.

Otherwise, as usual, it's just a fun read. But I think sometimes it's easy to forget the obvious stuff when over-complicating something. *laughs* :)

*good thoughts* *enjoying the story*
Comments from author:
Yeah it was written a while ago. :)

I'm glad that you're enjoying it though.
Review By [(Current Donor)Katrina] • Date [15 Jul 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Family" from SlickRCBD
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I know this is a bit late, but wouldn't Hermione remember the spell petrificus totalus that she used on Neville at the end of her first year at Hogwarts that froze him in place?
That was when they were leaving the common room to stop "Snape" (or so they thought, it turned out to be Quirrel) from stealing the Philosopher's/Sorcerer's Stone.

That seems perfect for the freeze tag game and perfectly safe. Hermione learned it in her first year.
Comments from author:
Who knows what would happen if you cast it wrong, overpower it or what not... or maybe there was another reason... I'm sorry to say it's been a while since I looked at the story... so I can't remember.

It does seem like the perfect freeze spell to use if you want them actually frozen...
Review By [SlickRCBD] • Date [14 Nov 13] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Picking up the broken pieces and life goes on." from deathgeonous
Review:
I almost made it. I read this fic up to chapter 29, then the hogwarts fic, then this fic up to chapter 51, then sleep called me last night. Too bad. I noticed that after chapter 29 of this fic you really started shifting focus to the kids, Gabby especially. I guess that makes sense. Well, thanks for writing this, bye for now.
Comments from author:
People grow up and become characters in their own right... and it was more interesting for me... That story was a learning experience in a lot of ways.
Review By [deathgeonous] • Date [8 Feb 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Picking up the broken pieces and life goes on." from Rune
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Whole story, whole series even review.

This is EPIC.

The shear number of people to keep in mind, the relationships between them, powers, personal history, its beyond big. Epic.

Piers Anthony with his Xanth Series come to mind, that series of books went into the teens in number.

Your sandbox is epic squared or cubed or....

I lost count of the number of crossovers, and you managed to keep them tied in well too!

Its been a while since I've made a rec so I need to figure out how again but I'll rec this series. Or at least rec the first and last fics in it.

Thanks for all you have done.
Comments from author:
Thanks for the recommendation. I've tried hard to keep everything tied together as much as possible. It helps that for the most part I'm not trying to mix all of the worlds into one world. (Having everything work in one series is hard enough.) It's the little mentions that help keep everything tied together. I'm glad you're enjoying the series though.
Review By [Rune] • Date [15 Jun 12] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "The crazy people have the white coats today." from Rune
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You really need to add tags to the story blurb telling which order is best to read them.

It is a nice story, a bit wish fullfillment, things seem rather easy for the Heroines sometimes.

The priests got off too easy!

I am a prophet, I talk to God, He talks to me. He is not happy with the amount of blood shed in His name. He has granted us Free Will, so fixing the mess is up to us. Sadly too many give over their lives to the direction of "men of god" from one religion or another.

EDIT: changed the rating from nine to ten now that its complete.
Comments from author:
I really need to sort out the order and if I can figure it out put everything into a series and such things. That would help a lot.

The priests, well the priests are still human... more or less. As far as them getting off easy, it's a process. People are crazy and at times rather stupid. Not much I can do about it.
Review By [Rune] • Date [15 Jun 12] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Picking up the broken pieces and life goes on." from kdakmmt
Review:
interesting series so far. I must ask, did you read alot of Robert Heinlein?
Comments from author:
I've read one or two things of his I believe. It's been a while though. Thanks for the review.
Review By [kdakmmt] • Date [20 Jan 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Picking up the broken pieces and life goes on." from Drake
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Another good and twisted story comes to an end. Well done.

So next comes a Buffy retell with Gabrielle added to the mix? I can see some potential there, but also a lot of difficulties. Just retelling the show with an extra character won't work, since she will change things and event and that can quickly derail something twenty episodes further down the line. Especially with Buffy's attitude of not wanting to be the Slayer, things could get out of hand quickly. But I'm sure you have plans already. I'll be interested to see how far you keep things the same.

Anyway, thanks for sharing.
Comments from author:
Being that Gabrielle has most of a play book for (major) events that happened, I don't think it will end up the same for very long. The world they're jumping to was scheduled to go to hell with Acathla, that gives them a lot of moral freedom to play around with the world so to speak. Some things will be similar just because it's hard to deal with them ahead of time but other things will be dealt with before they become a problem. At least that's the plan. As for what happens, we'll see.

Thanks for the review.
Review By [Drake] • Date [26 Oct 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Picking up the broken pieces and life goes on." from Mordare
Review:
It was a crazy but fun ride. Looking forward to more of your stories.
Comments from author:
I'm working out the plotting and planning for the next adventure. Thanks for the review and I'm glad you enjoyed the story.
Review By [Mordare] • Date [25 Oct 11] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "New Pets" from Drake
Review:
In the third section you're talking about mood swings. I think you forgot that most of the protagonists are female. Their main point of comparison would be their monthly cycle, or at least that's my take on the situation. Since it, too, is a monthly mood change, it, and especially the interaction of both would be of interest in the situation.

Having never read Wheel of Time, I am a bit lost in the recent chapters, but I am not certain this kidnapping people thing is a good habit to pick up. Dumbledore at his darkest or the Council of Watchers in the most negative light would be comparisons that spring to mind. Even if their life becomes better, not everyone is going to be grateful to become a very tiny part of a gigantic whole and the memory of just how awful things were is going to disappear quickly. I'm not saying that there must be some conflict, but I certainly wouldn't be surprised.

If you have the time, explaining what some of the devices do and what problems exist with them would aid in the understanding of this chapter. Otherwise good work.

Thanks for sharing.
Comments from author:
I think I might have, and yeah I think that depending on when the full moon fell you would get some really grumpy girls.

Kidnapping people probably isn't a good trend to get into. I figure they'll probably show the people what they can offer, cure their insanity (wheel of time thing) and then offer them a ticket back. I'm thinking that some conflict sounds about right. We'll see if it's bad enough to make them want to go back or set up shop in a new place.

A'dams are basically a control leash for girls with magic in the wheel of time. The moral issues with the things is that the girl that wears the wrist band can basically toss a feeling (say boiling alive) at the girl with the collar and until she fixes it that's what they feel. So you can do some serious mental damage with the things. Basically channeling ie using magic without the holder's permission makes you ill... So there are a lot of things wrong with it. But a couple of things that are nice about it. You can help them control things, make sure that they don't push too hard and hurt themselves with magic.. and several other things.

As for the rest of the devices... fancloth is basically cloth that makes things under it semi invisible.
I'll likely be moving away from the wheel of time stuff soon though. Not sure where I'll go next though.

Thanks, I'll try next time to explain things a bit better.
Review By [Drake] • Date [4 Sep 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Cards explode?" from Drake
Review:
Good chapter. Lots of fun. I am surprised that they still run the time dilation device though - I can see the use in emergencies or when you prepare for specific events, but to hurry just for hurries sake? That seems strange. Especially since it creates the disconnect between friends. I could see automated facilities doing lots of statistical analysis in temporally accelerated areas, or even mainframes to improve reaction time; oh well, I guess it's tradition carried on for traditions sake.
It's interesting to see that the Galactic Republic disintegrates even without Sith presence - somehow I have the feeling that the fall will be a lot worse, because for all the evil of the Empire, they kept things together and running somewhat peacefully. Now without strong leaders waiting to take over and ruthless enough to keep things together, it looks like a fall akin to the dark ages looms over the galaxy - possibly followed by centuries of civil war.
Comments from author:
As for the time dilation device you've got a point. I figure this was probably their last run through. They have plenty of ships, and personal now. They've created enough force using mutants to keep the jedi from pressuring them to stop. They might have to move the schools and such things off the station and have it just be a research lab full time now. Or perhaps, much much smaller time dilation fields like you said, say over a lab or two when they need it.

To be fair count Cookoo I mean Dooku is still out there. I can't really see him stopping the spread of evil just because. Thus he's still pushing for separation and without Emp P to pull the factions together the Galactic Republic is crumbling. I can't really see it not. While the watcher's council could send someone in to assassinate the count I can't really see them bothering. It's a human matter, that is outside of their box of influence.

Also nothing says that order 66 isn't still going to happen with the clones. Thus no more Jedi council, it might not be as effective without the unstoppable Anakin Skywalker leading the charge, but I suspect that they will still force the jedi to flee the temple.

I would assume that the fall will be worse as everyone starts fighting over systems now. Trading is going to be a nightmare and piracy will go through the roof. I suspect that civil war will break out as well. :)

And it's all Andrew's fault :)
(okay maybe not but hey.)

I might be being a touch cynical here but I don't think so. Without the Jedi... there isn't really any other groups that have the same status as far as honorable people, I think things will go badly.

Thanks for the review.
Review By [Drake] • Date [12 Jan 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Pocket world" from Drake
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Ring worlds can't be used in unpopulated systems only; they (and sphere worlds or dyson spheres) can in theory be build large enough that the inhabitable planet orbits between the ring/sphere and the sun. For that matter once you can construct such mega structures, do you really need a sun in the center? At least a natural sun (space empires also has techs to create suns or destroy them with fairly little resource expenditure). This provides potentially unlimited living space - of course even a single ring world can probably house several hundred billion people - probably even several trillion people. Spheres would be even larger. So a single construct would solve the population pressure for a long time!

Spice - I know they couldn't use it as is, nor would they like Tiberium as is, but it would be very interesting to study. IIRC spice allowed jumping ships at FTL speeds since that universe didn't have any real FTL drive. What could such a drug do with real FTL tech, magic, and the force thrown in for good measure? I would at least like to know what the stuff does to the body and how it allows those abilities to manifest.

As for David Webers work; the first book is available for free here: http://www.webscription.net/10.1125/Baen/0671720856/0671720856.htm
It explains just about everything tech wise. The later books only refine the introduced tech to a certain degree; the only new tech is a very primitive version of the stargate. The main reason for moon sized ships is the enormous size of the FTL engine. I think it was a quarter of the size of the ship! Still, since their ships are so damn huge, they of course build weapons up to scale. That engineering experience might be useful. Maybe also their education tech.

And since the Slayers and Pokegirls seem so eager to fight, how about opening portals to some worlds with real trouble? D&D Forgotten Realms offers enough bad guys and secret evil organizations that they'd be busy taking them out for a long time. And attacks on Drow cities or equal targets would be great challenges. Maybe even a bit too risky. Still, from the FR to adventures in the Abyss or Nine Hells is a short way; planar travel is fairly easy from there. And the world can provide some interesting magic as well - not much, true, but some interesting applications. And I could see Willow (and maybe Gabrielle) wanting to contact a real and more importantly good goddess of magic.
Are they still in contact with the dragon lady from met early on? A demon or devil invasion on her world would certainly be an interesting way to introduce planar travel to/from hell/abyss and its dangers; and maybe a relatively save training ground for the people that have to deal with the fey in the anti-tech field. ..... anti-tech field. Now could that be an attempt by the Ascended to interfere and maybe an attempt to kill them without obvious involvement? Would explain why they met a troll noble the way they did and the problems they have with figuring out the cause of the field or how to counteract it.

edit:
What's with me and getting a new good idea just after I hit submit review today?
Anyways, I was thinking about other David Weber novels. The Honor Harrington series introduces a sentient species of telepathic cats - that can be extremely lethal. The first two novels of the series 'On Basilisk Station' http://www.webscription.net/10.1125/Baen/0743435710/0743435710.htm and 'Honor of the Queen' http://www.webscription.net/10.1125/Baen/0743435729/0743435729.htm are available for free and give a good overview of the treecats. There's also some side stories from the perspective of the cats: Changer of Worlds http://www.webscription.net/10.1125/Baen/0671319752/0671319752.htm is the only free one, but gives a decent idea of how to write 'cats. At the very least the genetic code of naturally telepathic and empathic sentient 'cats with six lethal claws would be interesting.
The tech of the universe is rather low (basic shields that are overwhelmed by spamming missiles with nuke pumped X-ray lasers as warheads), but their STL drive is fairly interesting. They generate two enormous bands of gravity (above and below) the ship; no known weapon in that world can overcome or penetrate those bands. Might be an interesting addition to conventional shields, especially if you want to turtle.
Comments from author:
I might have to take that suggestion to heart about spice. If nothing else seeing if they can understand how it works would be a good project. The world building tech... not a bad solution for population, really wouldn't matter how fast it grew at that point. I'll give it a look see. As for the ships, I'm sure there is something to learn for building something at that scale.

D&d Forgotten realms could be interesting, and the drow do lend themselves to plundering. Fighting in hell... might be dangerous. As for Willow, maybe.. as for Gabrielle, no thanks. She's perfectly happy, working on her magic and living forever without ever having to deal with a god or goddess.

They haven't really checked up on the dragon lady lately. The anti tech field is the fae, as for finding a troll lord.. it might have been bad luck it might have been interference.

Oh telepathic kitties? I might have to steal one.

That might have some promise for shielding. Though the phased ships the Avalon people have already are pretty good defense. But can never be too careful. I'll check it out.
Review By [Drake] • Date [9 Dec 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Pocket world" from Drake
Review:
Visiting a computer game? Interesting.

How about some specific tech/magic raids?

David Weber's Dahakverse: Moon sized space ships, and fleets of them. Probably a good deal of mega-construction experience. And some implants and skeleton modifications that vastly improve the abilities of humans.
Space Empires: building ring worlds and sphere worlds; and other planet or even system sized construction
Dune: spice
C&C: Tiberium

Or even commissioning games or stories with specific tech or magic so that they can then make the worlds real and visit.

The Star Wars cross didn't mean much to me, since I haven't played the game, but it read well enough.
We don't see enough of Illyria... then again we don't see enough of too many characters. lol

Well, the chapter was a fun read. Thanks for sharing.

Edit:
One question though: Are they still looking for more slayers? Or have they found all of them? Supposedly that was their main mission, but we haven't heard anything about that in a while.
Comments from author:
I haven't read David Weber's work, it seems a bit insane to try to build something on that scale... As for implants and skeleton modifications... I would have to look at it a bit before I considered if they would go that far.

The space empires stuff sounds interesting though, ring worlds... Especially when you could park them in systems that don't have viable planets already. Might help with the population growth expectations.

Dune, Spice is a narcotic... and unless they could figure a way to fix that I can't see them bothering, seems to also have a physical dependency issue as well.

I hadn't thought of them trying to commission games with specific tech or magic because it wouldn't necessarily work... her stealing the starwars (game) stuff was backed up by her mother's creation/use of the "real" starwars world. Might be something they would try though.

I'm glad that the starwars stuff read well enough.

I have to agree on the not seeing enough of Illyria. Sometimes it's hard cycling through the characters in a way that helps the story.

They are still looking for more slayers, I just got distracted and pushed that to the background a bit as I tried to come up with crossover ideas. It was also not time sensitive as Dawn could fix the entry point shortly after they became slayers... I'll try to get back to that.
Review By [Drake] • Date [9 Dec 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Marie" from Drake
Review:
A very nice chapter on the common life of our protagonists. I'm not sure I agree with their fear that the Ascended would interfere, but it is a good base for some future planning - and some serious research into how one can kill Ascended. Because seriously - those guys destroyed a civilization because one of their own shared some tech with them; they are seriously xenophobic and genocidal.

Thanks for sharing.
Comments from author:
They seem rather insane in their code of conduct... they don't wipe out the wraith, they don't just take the tech back... as for how to destroy the Ascended, they do know how... it's in Merlin's cave. They could probably use magic so that Daniel could remember how to make it. Go there and get the notes or simply make a clone husk for Merlin's memories to be dropped into and have him finish it.They would then make a copy and use it in the Pegasus galaxy. The problem comes in trying to figure out the effects and if any of the ascended are worth saving. For example Morgan Lefay... kicked ass in the movie ark of truth. She was trying to do the right thing as much as she could. Orlin despite being a creepy stalker... wait no just a creepy stalker... though sacrificing himself to try to find a cure was noble.. it shouldn't have been needed. It should have fallen under it came from the damn Ori, thus yes we will give you the counter. That might have provoked a war though. Then there is Chanta (sp) in the Pegasus galaxy that protected her people as well as she could. Seems to be the only ancient that ever figured out how to take human form without losing all of her powers...

Long and short of it is that yes they would like to be able to wipe out the ascended if it comes to it... problem is that you need a surprise strike and anyone they told could potentially spill the beans.
Review By [Drake] • Date [9 Dec 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Picnics and Dawn's luck" from Drake
Review:
Well, I have no idea what this crossover is about or what kind of hell you've played with that world, but the chapter itself reads very well.
Comments from author:
Glad to hear it flows well enough.
Review By [Drake] • Date [18 Nov 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "The crazy people have the white coats today." from Drake
Review:
Xander as shrink... interesting. I would however think that someone uninvolved with the family would be better suited. Then again the shrink must be able and willing to defend the information he gains from all who seek it; dangerous business at best. So I guess Xander is a good choice.

The Asgard reactions are interesting, but it sounds almost like they are creating a genetic caste system - everyone optimized as scientist, warrior, or pilot (or anything else needed). This could be fairly dangerous in the long term. A bit more natural selection would probably be more healthy for the population as a whole - the Asgard did kill themselves by relying on their definition of good over natural selection after all. It should be a warning, especially for the Asgard.

Introducing the new people... does that mean you'll move to the next generation?

Talsanra... are we supposed to recognize the name? I don't. A quick search of this story suggests that she's some pokegirl, but too minor for the name to be remembered by most (if any) reader. A short description, even just a " pokegirl" would be helpful. Not to often, but if a minor original character hasn't appeared for several chapters, it would probably be a good idea.
Comments from author:
That has to actually defend the info played a part, and someone she could trust that wouldn't judge her too much.

It's not a genetic caste system it's just a trend. But I should watch for that. Possibly for the next generation.

No, I realized that the chapter they got rescued might... not even be in that story... she's in my notes as Dawn's poekgirl... I'll try to remember that if I have to check a sheet the readers surely do and work on that more. Sorry.

Thanks for the review.
Review By [Drake] • Date [1 Oct 10] • Not Rated
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