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Review of chapter "17" from buggycas
A hem. I am not the world's best beta, but I have some advice, First, is English your first language? Because it doesn't seem that way. Second, you need to take every chapter, then go and find/replace Every "happiest" with "Happiness" You have some major Pluralization and tense issues, and in the last chapter, you need to replace "Selfless" with "Selfish" Grammar Nazi issues aside (And I am one of the world's only Mildly dyslexic Grammar Nazis, spell check is my friend LOL) the story was very good, kind of depressing, but kind of touching. I enjoyed it, and if I weren't the type of person to read and forget to correct when Attempting to beta, I'd offer my help. Thank you for writing this story.
Review By [buggycas] • Date [11 Nov 11] • Rating [7 out of 10]
Review of chapter "17" from darkmagician
I hope that there will be a sequel. Just remember to grab a beta, or spell and grammar check. I think it would be great if Dray was pregnant and survived.
Comments from author:
I did have beta, in fact I had two but they both became very busy. I am sorry for the grammar and spelling mistake, I did try to correct them as much as I could.

As for the sequel, I not allow to think about it yet, I got to finish off my other story first. :)
Review By [darkmagician] • Date [7 Jul 07] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 12" from chajalive
Please, have Draco ditch Harry and get together with Charlie. Harry does the right thing always a little to late, at least in your version of him.
Comments from author:
hehehe........should Draco really ditch Harry? There has been a few people that been asking for that? Don`t worry you will find out what happen soon, there only three more chapter to go.
Review By [chajalive] • Date [4 Jul 07] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Is it really love?" from darkmagician
This has been an interesting story, and I'd love to see how it ends. I hope things clear up enough for you to continue.
Comments from author:
Thanks for the review, sorry for the late relpy. I going to update in a few seconds, I hope that you will still like the story.
Review By [darkmagician] • Date [22 May 07] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Is it really love?" from matealeen
aw, an ultimatum... harry's not bound to react well, but it'd serve him right!
i'm eager to read the 'final battle' and see who's on whose side... especially that bitch of lisa...
keep going !
Comments from author:
Sorry for the late relpy. Thanks for the review.... not a Lisa fan hehehe. I going to update very soon, as in a few seconds. :)
Review By [matealeen] • Date [6 Jan 07] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "10" from matealeen
very good story, and very touching even though completely ooc.
it's a pretty messed up harry that you gave us, but i kinda like it; i hope he will not do anything that will hurt draco beyond repair though...
keep up the good work :)
Comments from author:
I guess I been making Harry hurt him a little..hehehe, but Draco can't never be broken, he's a Malfoy after all.

Thank for the feedback
Review By [matealeen] • Date [16 Dec 06] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "10" from purrfus
As much as I have been enjoying this interesting Draco from his POV, I'm really glad he is becoming aware of the controlling nature of Harry and not just buckling under to either Harry or his housemates.
Comments from author:
Draco is starting to find his way again but will Harry like the changes in Draco? :) I always view Draco as a strong people, just not when it come to love and relationship.
Review By [purrfus] • Date [5 Dec 06] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Out in the open" from tonisimone
great chapter, can't wait to see what draco does to lisa

update soon

Comments from author:
I'm all for the Lisa bashing but.... she safe for the next chapter. :)
Review By [tonisimone] • Date [4 Dec 06] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Out in the open" from banner
I really like this view of Draco - you've made him interesting and consistent. He makes sense.
Comments from author:
Thank you, it make me happy knowing that other people like the Draco I portray.
Review By [banner] • Date [4 Dec 06] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Out in the open" from purrfus
I guess I'm happy for Draco. He has a developing friendship with Ginny, and his relationship (?) with Harry is now public knowledge.

But - I had difficulty focusing Draco because I kept picturing Ron exploding (sorta like in "Big Trouble in Little China").
Comments from author:
LOL, Ron need to suffer more :).
Review By [purrfus] • Date [3 Dec 06] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Out in the open" from Jorrie
::giggles:: I can totally imagine Draco screaming in his head, "I'M A BLOOD MALFOY! HOW DARE THE STUPID BINT TRY TO SLAP MY BEAUTIFUL FACE!" Hahahaha! I can totally imagine that happening.'s sweet and funny, but...Draco has yet again fallen over to the girly side. I don't want to say it's bad and I don't want to say it's good because it's true. It's neither bad or good. Draco...I suppose it's correct that he's more sensitive, but he's taken a feminine turn with it. Otherwise, you're doing good. ^^ Keep it up! Hope to see more from you soon!
Comments from author:
LOL, it nice to know to find it sweet and funny. Sorry for making him girly I will try not to do it again. :)
Review By [Jorrie] • Date [3 Dec 06] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "A new girl...." from Jorrie
*dies of coughing/laughter* I'm sick, but that was pretty fun, in a sad kinda way, but yeah. Still funny. I mean, I know it's killing Draco inside, but seriously, I'm imagining this from an outside view and it's rather hilarious. XD I can't seem to make my mind think up anything more. My brain is barely working, so when I get better, I'll give you a better review. XD TTFN!
Comments from author:
You poor thing, I hope you get better soon ......

It's nice to know that you found Ron scene, I think you were talking about that part, hehehe. I nice to heard from you again, :)
Review By [Jorrie] • Date [9 Nov 06] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "25 December" from purrfus
I wonder if the Wizarding World does sex changes and does it alter the magic? Would Draco be immediately kicked out of the family or Wizarding World, or would it be acceptable? Because I'm getting the feeling Draco just feels he's in the right place/time/body/world?
Comments from author:
I pretty sure that they do...I mean if they can change how they look, they should be able to change their gender. As for their magic I don't think it would change. To me, I view their magic as part of their personality.

I also view the wizarding world more traditional, if his father was alive it possible he would get kick out only because he unable to produce an heir. As for getting kick out of the Wizarding World, I don't believe that would happen. He would more likely be look down upon if anything else.

At the moment Draco, he learning everything again. He stepping out side of his father shallow and like most people he's are uncertain about his place in the world. Should Granger have show him the same affection as Harry, it possible for him to like her instead.

Love should not be base on gender but if you were taugh that lovng your own gender is wrong to will never have look for love there in the first place. To Draco love was never enter his mind until he witness Blaise with other boy. To him loving a boy not wrong....

I believe that next chapter should answers some of the question you have....
Review By [purrfus] • Date [20 Oct 06] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "A kiss" from Wise
In a word, bad.

Draco is totally, utterly out of character. If you want to write a love story between Harry Potter and Draco Malfoy, do so, but don't cheat the characters (or the audience). What you have here isn't Draco so much as it is a female original character in a Draco Malfoy suit. If you want Draco and Harry to get all lovey-dovey with each other, you have to earn it.
Comments from author:

I really don't believe that Draco "utterly out of character". I mean what everyone write in their journal could be completely different to what they portray to other in real live. In the book Draco say “Father say…….” a lot, so it really depend on how you look at it. Draco grew up listening to his father, is it not possible for him to start having his own opinion? Each entry is just about what he wants.

It is also possible that Draco doesn’t understand the meaning of friendship and relationship. Plus I really don’t see Draco growing up in a loving family. However in chapter 5, I do admit that I wrote Draco a bit too girly. I don't think I cheat the character or the audience.......What made Draco, Draco? This is Draco journal entry not Harry.

Draco refused the mark because his doesn’t want to follow order from anyone… possible. Draco is get attack at school because the children of deatheater want to hurt him….is possible. Ron and other student also want to get back at him ……is also possible. Sure Draco is powerful by himself but could he really protect himself against everyone else?
Review By [Wise] • Date [20 Oct 06] • Rating [1 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Hurts" from Jorrie
It's really very adorable, poor Draco, but the thing is...he's starting to sound I don't mean his gushing makes him gay, no. I mean, his voice ACTUALLY is starting to sound kind of like a girl's. I mean...the way he talks, the's too...feminine. The way he feels and all is on the right track and gushing isn't unexpected, it's just...he talks like a girl. He needs to be more manly, his father would have obviously taught him manliness. Give him some more...manliness. Hahaha. He's a difficult guy who has a hard time finding the right words, so don't always use the right words because only us girls know what the right words are. ^^ hahahaha. Good, otherwise. Hope to see the next installment soon!
Comments from author:
That so true....I couldn't help it for this chapter. hehehe Draco in a dress.....hehehe...sorry I try to give back his manliness in the next chapter. :)
Review By [Jorrie] • Date [19 Oct 06] • Rating [9 out of 10]
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