Liked the story and the whole idea...very good. Spooks is great, has it really been going that long!?!?
But you need to edit your story. There were missing words, unnecessary words, incorrect tenses and such. Also I found following who was saying what a bit difficult at times.
Keep writing. All the best, Dave T.
Review By [DaveTurner] • Date [2 Oct 06] • Rating [7 out of 10]
This is an interesting story, and I'd love to see more of it, but you need to edit your story for tenses. You switch from the past tense (the normal tense for writing stories) into the present a couple of times, and I found it very distracting.
Review By [SlowMercury] • Date [30 Sep 06] • Not Rated
very nicely done. I used to watch MI-5 (spooks) regularly but then A&E made it so difficult to figure out when it was on I lost track. I miss some of the old characters, esp. Tom Quinn, but glad the new season is airing here.
Nice work with dialogue, and Giles' & Dawn's actions. Loved the ending too. thanks for sharing this.
Review By [kaleecat] • Date [30 Sep 06] • Not Rated