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Review of chapter "The Big Day" from (Current Donor)Listener
Review:
THis was an enjoyable, frequently-funny story that I appreciated more for all the lampshades you hung on things. I do think you should up the rating -- it's fairly explicit, not that I minded. If I had any real area for improvement, it would be that Percy is just a little TOO perfect -- he seems to have relatively few flaws, except for his overuse of British slang in his internal monologue and an annoying habit of being chauvinistic in the way he sometimes talks to women.

Still, in all, a good story. I liked it a lot.
Review By [(Current Donor)Listener] • Date [3 Oct 12] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "The Big Day" from (Current Donor)Katrina
Review:
A thing of beauty. This was a fantastically funny and amazing story; great details, good pacing and wonderful sense of humor. Oh, and sexy to boot. Nicely done.

Thank you.
Review By [(Current Donor)Katrina] • Date [28 Aug 11] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "The Big Day" from rhymneyfaries
Review:
I love this series so much. :)
Review By [rhymneyfaries] • Date [27 Aug 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Seasons Greetings" from (Current Donor)DreamSmith
Review:
Hey, just starting your story, here.
I like it so far; your Faith has a lot of attitude, and is very in touch with her sexiness, as Faith should be.
^_^

The only thing that's really bugging me is your punctuation. A lot of your dialogue reads kind of funky, and not because of the Britspeak (or Kiwispeak, whichever). A few more commas in there, to break things up into more natural-sounding phrases, would make this an easier read. As it is, your people come off sounding a bit odd a lot of the time.

That's only my opinion, of course. Your mileage may vary.

Looking forward to reading more of this when I have time (which is to say, after I get more of my own stuff written).
^_^
Comments from author:
God, just reread first chapter and you are absolutely right regards punctuation.

Sticking correcting this story on my New Year's resolution list.
Review By [(Current Donor)DreamSmith] • Date [29 Dec 07] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "The Big Day" from PrincessTai
Review:
*claps loudly and hard, standing ovation*
Especially for the last two chapters.
They were wonderful. I enjoyed this Slytherin viewed story.
Been a while since I've read one.

Good job!
Comments from author:
Thank you for reading and reviewing so throughly! Always nice to get feedback.

I truly do intend to update this story's sequel sometime this year.
Review By [PrincessTai] • Date [21 Mar 07] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Grow up!" from PrincessTai
Review:
>>Hermione stood up languidly and strolled past her previously best female friend. “Grow up Ginevra, it’s amazing how the different the world looks when you finally do so.” Hermione advised.

YAY!!!!!!!!!!! Go, Mione. Go, Mione!
LMAO!
Snape's making jokes, 'Mione is naughtier than Parkinson and Lavender, and Pince wants students to get laid.
Oh goodness, you lightened my mood a whole lot :-D
Thanks
Comments from author:
I'm glad the story has made you laugh.
Review By [PrincessTai] • Date [21 Mar 07] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "What I did in the holidays: Part Two" from PrincessTai
Review:
>>“I still love Bill even zo ‘e ‘as ‘ideous facial scarring from a loup-garou attack.” Fleur sighed. “I would not recommend et as ze best way to win a mother-in-law over.”


I sooo love how you have Fluer!
She's a riot. A snob but a riot.

On more serious lines ... Oh Theo!!!!!!!!!!!
I love Nott. Always do, even when he's a bad guy (except when he's psycho) and even if I didn't.
That was horrible. Freaking horrible, *sighs* But so realistic.
I'm glad Hermione is his girlfriend. I bet I gave you the feeling that I hated Hermione and Harry.
Truth is I don't, I just can't stand when they act so damn ... grr.
Even my beloved Won-won I can't stand sometimes. But I do ADORE when that girl has a cause and when she wants to do well.
She kicks freaking ass! And NO ONE messes with Granger's man *bg*
Comments from author:
Thank you. Fleur is my favourite character in HP because she's sexy. But you will notice how JK Rowling has to punish her in a way by making Bill ugly. JK Rowling is a bit like C.S.Lewis I fear.
Review By [PrincessTai] • Date [21 Mar 07] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Five letters and an Easter Ball" from PrincessTai
Review:
Ha, I knew something was weird when she wondered if she could plagerize her history homework but I shrugged it off.
Oh but why does Ron have to stay a git and Hermione get Nott!
Comments from author:
Ah yes, the coming out of Pansy.

Ron isn't stupid. But he is jealous.
Review By [PrincessTai] • Date [21 Mar 07] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "The Battle of Grimmauld Square" from PrincessTai
Review:
Ha!!!
I so knew Snape had the hots for Dawn!
Hellooo, he so flirted with her when they walked out from her erm, date with Hagrid.

And I don't usually curse in reviews but ... Granger is a bitch that needs to fall off a cliff!
Comments from author:
You will feel sympathy for Hermione soon.

Snape does have hots for Dawn, but he's emotionally screwed don't forget.
Review By [PrincessTai] • Date [21 Mar 07] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Meet the parents." from PrincessTai
Review:
Yay!
Ron isn't an idiot!
I am sick and TIRED of people having Ron as the uncouth, unwise idiot and Hermione and Harry paragons of virtue.
Sure Ron can be a hasty, and close minded and very black and white, but dude comes around when he has to. And he beat McGonagall's chess pieces. NOT Hermione! So that proves that he's NOT an idiot. And so does your story.
I hope when it blows in their faces he reminds them that he DID warn them.

*Sighs* Sorry. I had to let that out.
Comments from author:
No, Ron isn't an idiot.

But you might not like his, what I consider realistic character development, later on.
Review By [PrincessTai] • Date [21 Mar 07] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Birds and Bees" from PrincessTai
Review:
You don't like Hagrid?
AWW ... *sighs*
But then you write something like >>Percy paid for the bill, helped Faith on with her black fur coat and led her to the fireplace. “Lois Lane time again.” he told her, enfolding Faith in his arms “I looked it up.”

And that makes up for it *bg*
Oh and Percy putting spells on his 'testes' *SnickerS*
Comments from author:
Hagrid is a sweetie, but this story was meant to poke fun at the Gryffindor heroes. And see things if you were a Slytherin.

Percy's spell. Well they must use something.
Review By [PrincessTai] • Date [21 Mar 07] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Surprise!" from PrincessTai
Review:
LOL!
I do like Hermione and Harry, but damn it's nice to have a story that isn't sympathetic to their annoying sides. I mean if people can always down the Slytherins why not down a couple of Gryffindors :-D
This is great!
Really enjoying it so far.
I like How you have it organized feel like I'm getting so much more, I'd I've only read two chapters.
Comments from author:
Thank you very much for your review. I'm glad you like. I'm just going to go back and re-edit this story as Faith says yiz not youse.
Review By [PrincessTai] • Date [21 Mar 07] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "The Big Day" from Ansku
Review:
:D Very entertaining :) You have quite a lot of terms off, however. I mean, it's usually brooms and cauldrons, not sticks and bowls... Made me really confused there at times :) Your Snape was wonderful, pretty original I think, or at least I don't remember reading him portrayed quite like this before :) His POWs were so amusing...

Edit: Sorry, spelled it wrong :D I meant POV, as in Point Of View.
Comments from author:
I suppose I shortened broom sticks to sticks. And I don't know why I said bowls instead of cauldrons actually. it probably made sense to me at the time. I'm sorry I failed you the reader.

Thank you very much for your review, sorry to make those errors. By the way what does POW's mean?
Review By [Ansku] • Date [26 Feb 07] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "The Big Day" from Ansku
Review:
:D Very entertaining :) You have quite a lot of terms off, however. I mean, it's usually brooms and cauldrons, not sticks and bowls... Made me really confused there at times :) Your Snape was wonderful, pretty original I think, or at least I don't remember reading him portrayed quite like this before :) His POWs were so amusing...
Review By [Ansku] • Date [26 Feb 07] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "The Big Day" from littleoldme
Review:
I read the first few chapters of this, but stopped with Faith's first class. You've butchered all of the Harry Potter characters more or less beyond repair. Your Gryffindor bashing took all of the Gryffs completely out of character- Hermione is a know-it-all, but she would never correct a teacher's grammar, or whine about being cursed at. And your Harry is just ridiculous. Beyond that, it's the little things about this fic that got to me- like the fact that everyone in the Harry Potter world is suddenly Pagan, even though that's never been mentioned in the book, and they actually reference Christmas. Or the fact that Mr. Weasley- who is fascinated by Muggle things and has very little experience with actual Muggles- picked "muggle godparents" for his children. Your Faith is the closest of all of your characters to the canon, but you try too hard there- Faith's dialogue isn't nearly as dialect-heavy as you portray it here, and she's got actual nuances, which all of your characters seem to be missing.
Comments from author:
Yes, the whole story was from the Slytherins point of view, and as such, several people complained it was a character assaination of the trio.

I corrected that in later chapters to give them more heroism.

It was out of character I admit, it was my first ever HP crossover.

Faith, yeah I was experimenting and playing with dialog there as well, she is a hard character to write, I feel I'm improving. My first ever Faith fic I had her dialog extremely out of character. "Faith in you" Dean's out of character too. Avoid that story like the plague.

I actually should have her saying yous as 'yis' not 'youse' and always with yis guys to be true Southie In this story, I discovered only two weeks ago. But that is one of the difficulties with neither being American or English and trying to write both worlds. (English is my first language I assure you, I'm just from down under. I wrote about people pashing (snogging) in this story not realising it is an Australaisan term only)


You have read one of my mid process stories. So thank you for your honesty and utterly valid criticisms. I was aiming for it to be funny. Did you find it funny at least?
Review By [littleoldme] • Date [11 Feb 07] • Not Rated
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