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Review of chapter "The Spice of Life" from WebSpyder
Review:
Good chapter but with one major flaw...

“We’ve got an Imperial frigate! Twenty parsecs off the right and closing in fast!”

20 parsecs = 65.23 light years

The millennium falcon can "make point five past light speed" and it's supposed to be a fast ship. Even if you don't take that to be literally 150% light speed which would mean the Kessel run would take 25 years, even using Han's shortcut, there is no way an Imperial frigate is covering that distance in a matter of minutes. The Kessel run, without Han's shortcut is 18 parsecs.
Review By [WebSpyder] • Date [28 Oct 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from WebSpyder
Review:
Pretty good first chapter. I'm hoping the remainder of the story is as good. One question though. How, exactly, do you have a "a loud burst of light?" Light doesn't generally have an aural component.
Review By [WebSpyder] • Date [25 Oct 13] • Rating [7 out of 10]
Review of chapter "A Typical Scoobie Rescue" from DarthTenebrus
Review:
Bit of a spelling thing here during the Tarkin/Vader scene, and it kinda threw me off as to the context. You wrote "condensation", where I think the word you were looking for was "condescension"...am I right here?

Lovely chapter here, with a wild ending. Willow has more raw power here than even I expected. She will make a great Jedi Knight....or a most powerful and terrifying Sith Lord to give even Sidious or Vader a run for their money...I shudder to think which...
Review By [DarthTenebrus] • Date [13 May 13] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "A Not-So-State Dinner" from wswords
Review:
You are better than an average writer on this site. Chapter 2 was good, but the real test is going to be when the story starts overlapping movie.
Review By [wswords] • Date [12 May 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from wswords
Review:
To make this short:

Odds are this story is going to be bad the amount of ways it could turn horrible at the drop of a hat out number the ways it could go well by several orders of magnitude. The type of story you are going to try and write (wrote) is really hard to pull off. You have to make any changes from (SW) cannon interesting and make sense to make it worth reading, while stll staying the same enough to have the flow of events stay mostly the same. Most writers can't pull it off.

That said you didn't mess up in the first chapter. I will be reading more.

Or the short version: "Please don't suck, it probably will, but please don't suck."

Btw this is the first story of yours I have read, so I consider you an average (read: bad) writer who got lucky to make a first chapter worth reading. I hope I am wrong about that.
Review By [wswords] • Date [12 May 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Celebrations...and Dark Arrivals" from Barona
Review:
Interesting take on the Buffy/SW cross. I enjoyed it, even though it followed the original story line a bit more than I would have likedg. Good job.
Review By [Barona] • Date [19 Jul 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Celebrations...and Dark Arrivals" from LetsRandom
Review:
Angelus? Oh my! Now I have to read on to the next one in the series.
Review By [LetsRandom] • Date [25 Nov 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Putting the "Blast" in Blast-Off" from lucyferr
Review:
“I don’t believe in superstition, Junior.”
“Too bad. It believes in you.”

:-)
Review By [lucyferr] • Date [15 Jul 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Celebrations...and Dark Arrivals" from GundumM
Review:
loved it.
Review By [GundumM] • Date [26 Mar 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Detour Into Danger" from TheatricalBarrister
Review:
I tried to grit my teeth and make it through this entire story, hoping that something changes, but I just can't stand any more. All I've seen so far is a complete recap of the movie, with tiny contributions from the Scoobies. No one even reacts to their pop culture references! You've got the Scoobies saying lines that originally belonged to the SW characters.

This story, as it is, might be interesting to me if I hadn't seen the movie twenty times. The original material with the Scoobies arriving and showing them before the start of the movie plot was interesting, and I had hopes that you would have had more original material during the movie plot, too. There may be more coming up, but I'm not going to find out. The main two things that bother me about this are, 1) no one reacts to the pop culture refs, and 2) Scoobies repeating--verbatim--lines from the original movie.
Review By [TheatricalBarrister] • Date [2 Feb 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Celebrations...and Dark Arrivals" from deathgeonous
Review:
Interesting. THanks for writing this, bye for now.
Review By [deathgeonous] • Date [2 Oct 08] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Death to a Star" from darkblade
Review:
Damn, you killed Keyan Farlander!!! At least make strike force do somewhat better than they did in film! If you have problem with shotout y-wings move Keylan to x-wing (I.E. in cannon survived 3 fighters, add 1 or may be 2).
Review By [darkblade] • Date [28 May 08] • Rating [7 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Celebrations...and Dark Arrivals" from Bluejello
Review:
Ooooh, nice end twist! I could have sworn it'd be Spike there...
Review By [Bluejello] • Date [10 Feb 08] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Putting the "Blast" in Blast-Off" from Bluejello
Review:
I was going to wait until the end of the story to review, but the whole "Did Han or Greedo shoot first?" bit was just pure awesome.
Review By [Bluejello] • Date [9 Feb 08] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Celebrations...and Dark Arrivals" from (Past Donor)sopchoppy
Review:
Good Story, thanks for posting it.
Review By [(Past Donor)sopchoppy] • Date [30 Dec 07] • Rating [7 out of 10]
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