You should mark this complete. I almost skipped it because it wasn't 'finished', but it's done and it's a great read. Not everything gets tied up neatly. Love cheeseman.
Blue
Comments from author:
You're right. I had intended to continue it, but it's been ages since I updated it, and it is at a good stopping point.
Review By [DeepBlueJoy] • Date [18 Dec 11] • Rating [9 out of 10]
You know, pretty much anything that has apppropriate use of the Cheese Man has my approval. He's just so . . . random.
I liked the touch about nightmares, too. Lilly was very much an in-the-moment person. AFter I read that bit, that was something that just clicked and made sense.
Excellent work! I always liked the chemistry between V and L in the flashbacks on the show. I hope we can see the two fight off the rest of the world together. I think V would make a great Watcher. BTW, does V's mom still run off? Just wondering.
Review of chapter "Above the Fold" from littleoldme
Review:
You're jumping around between present and past tense quite a bit. I'm enjoying the plot, but the super short chapters make the story ultra choppy. I think another format would probably serve you better.
Comments from author:
I fixed the verb tenses.
Having each chapter be a 100 word drabble is something I'm trying out, since Marcus started this with a drabble.
Review By [littleoldme] • Date [9 Nov 06] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Above the Fold" from DaveTurner
Review:
Interesting way on writing...short chapters an' such.
I hope you finish this story as it looks as if it could be really good. I will keep a look out for more.
One of these days I'm going to have to buy the first season of Veronica Mars. It's never been on TV or on a channel I've got where I live.
All the Best, DaveT.
Review By [DaveTurner] • Date [9 Nov 06] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Beginning the Investigation" from Mari
Review:
I'm glad you decided to continue the bit MR started. Should be interesting, but tough, maybe? I think Lily is probably one of those characters easier to like when she's dead.
Oops. I'm sorry. My computer and I bickered. It obviously won, and I accidently double-posted. This was not meant as an extra post to emphasize my opinion on how difficult it is to make Lily both entertaining, likeable, and in-character.
Review of chapter "Beginning the Investigation" from Mari
Review:
I'm glad you decided to continue the bit MR started. Should be interesting, but tough, maybe? I think Lily is probably one of those characters easier to like when she's dead.
DeepBlueJoy
DaveTurner