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Review of chapter "Dreams And Visions" from Wise
Review:
Phoebe and Paige having children is indeed canon. I just don't think Phoebe Halliwell should ever be allowed to have children is all. My view of her character tends to fall in line with Obscurus Lupa's. Of the sisters, the ones that I really liked were Prue and Paige. Piper annoyed me at times but wasn't overtly offensive.

Phoebe, on the other hand, was... yeah. Admittedly, part of my dislike for the character is me never forgiving her for the way that her choices destroyed Cole (her actually stopping him from becoming good so she could be the dark queen of all evil, for example, and the way that despite the fact that he had no choice [being possessed by the Source at the time] and she DID have a choice and CHOSE to be evil, everything was his fault afterwards, etc, etc, ad nauseum) with zero consequences to her despite the whole situation and how it went down being far more her fault than his.
Review By [Wise] • Date [22 Feb 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Bloody Noses, Portals & Injuries" from Wise
Review:
Surprisingly decent. The major flaw here is the whole sense of "babies ever after" that is shot through the story, where character after character is added until I'm no longer interested. Vaginas are not clown cars.

I was also really, REALLY surprised that you gave Faith an offspring. I can't picture her as a mother. At all. Paige could go either way, though I tend to see her more as someone's favorite aunt than as a mother. Phoebe, though... I can totally imagine her as a mother, and it scares the hell out of me. I fear for her offspring.

Anyways, I feel like you are getting lost in the weeds a bit. I like what story there is, but the veritable cornucopia of new characters doesn't help it much.
Comments from author:
Yeah, I know. In my defense, this is one of my first stories and I started it 7 1/2 years ago when I was like, 18 and more naïve. Also, no clown cars in this fic; Piper and Leo are the only ones with more than 2 kids. It's just that between the two shows, there's a lot of characters that became parents. And with it being almost 20 years before the two casts meet up, I thought they should both have their own set of Scoobies.

As for Faith, even though I can kinda see her as a mom (granted, not a typical mom, but I can see her with a family), I'm actually going to also blame this on it being one of my first fics and being naïve. Plus, even if she's not really the maternal type, I can't really see Faith as the type to have an abortion, so Andi could have easily been an accident. And I can definitely see Lindsey wanting a family, which I think Faith would take into consideration if Andi had been an accident.

And wasn't Phoebe and Paige having kids canon?

To be completely honest, I kind of want to go back and edit out some of the new characters, but I'm too lazy to do it, so I'll probably just try to work around it. It's part of the reason it's been so long since I updated; I realized I had a bunch of characters that I had no idea what to do with.

Thank you so much for the honest review! Constructive criticism is always appreciated.

~ Kyra
Review By [Wise] • Date [21 Feb 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Dreams And Visions" from bradsan
Review:
could you please try to update this great story. I really want to read more, a lot more.

aww pretty, pretty please. I'll put a cherry on top. Pleaaase
Comments from author:
I am definitely going to try. I'm busy with school at the moment, but I'm going to try to at least get some outlining done so that I will hopefully be able to get an update posted around the end of the semester. If there isn't a new chapter up by mid-May, feel free to pester me until there is. :)
Review By [bradsan] • Date [9 Feb 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Dreams And Visions" from SpacedCadet
Review:
Over a year since the last update!

PLEASE do more.
Comments from author:
I know! I apologize! I'm going to try and at least get some outlining done so that once the semester is over I'll hopefully be able to just get down to work and get some new chapters out. Thank you so much for the reviews, though, it lets me know people are still interested in the story and haven't given up on me, so thank you! :)
Review By [SpacedCadet] • Date [30 Jan 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Dreams And Visions" from locard
Review:
Cool story and I hope you finish and not let it drop like so many others do.
Comments from author:
Definitely not going to let it drop! It's just a matter of finding time in my crazy college schedule to work on it. But there will eventually be more. Hopefully sometime this summer at the latest.
Review By [locard] • Date [6 Dec 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Prologue - Death And Rebirth" from Sirena
Review:
Okay I'm sure its been a while since you've looked at this story but I really (and I mean REALLY) hope you decide to keep working on this story at some point, its a good one and I just love the idea of all the really awesome plot twists and turns you could put in to play with the way you've been working this story so far. I mean this really has the potential to shape up in to a great story that will keep the reader(s) on there toes trying to figure out where you're going with it and excited about the next update and what you might put into play next :D So please please please think about updating at some point.
Comments from author:
Thanks! I have vague ideas for the next couple chapters and I know who/what the big bad is, its just a matter of finding time to sit down and really plan stuff out and get some writing done. Hopefully I can do that soon. If not, I'm really hoping to get a lot of writing done once the semester ends. I promise that I'm always thinking about updating, I just haven't had the time to actually do so. :( Thanks for sticking with me, though, and reminding me that people are still reading my fics and waiting for updates.

~ Kyra
Review By [Sirena] • Date [13 Sep 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Dreams And Visions" from Blackett
Review:
Loved it! Can't wait to see an update when your muse feels the need to share.
Comments from author:
Thanks! :)
Review By [Blackett] • Date [25 Mar 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Dreams And Visions" from Lolaisawesome
Review:
I love this story! Hope you update this!
Comments from author:
Thanks!
Review By [Lolaisawesome] • Date [16 Mar 13] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Prologue - Death And Rebirth" from Dannisteele
Review:
Amazing story please continue !!!!
Comments from author:
Thanks!
Review By [Dannisteele] • Date [14 Feb 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Dreams And Visions" from AmeliaHalliwell
Review:
Please please continue encore encore
Comments from author:
Thanks. I definitely plan to continue this as soon as my muses return and I actually have time. :)
Review By [AmeliaHalliwell] • Date [25 Jan 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Dreams And Visions" from LalaithQuetzalli
Review:
Again...indeed.
It actually gets tyring after a while, you know? At least in concept. The fact that no villain seems capable of thinking of something else to do than 'destroy the world'. And what do they hope to achieve with that? Because, really, if the world is gone so are they!
Anyway, rant time over. I'm glad you're continuing this. Can hardly wait to read more.
I want Buffy and Angel back together already!!!
Comments from author:
I totally agree! I never saw the point in destrying the world. Villains need to get more creative. Why not take over? Or, if they don't want that kind of responsibility, just be super annoying and pull a bunch of pranks?

Anyway, thanks so much for the review! :)

~ Kyra
Review By [LalaithQuetzalli] • Date [22 Oct 12] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Dreams And Visions" from bradsan
Review:
OMG you updated thank you I love it. I hope the next update won't take that long as this one. this is really worth reading and of course updating. So please try to do it quicker this time. Buffy a Slayer and a witch can't wait for the next chapter.
Comments from author:
Thanks! I'm so glad that you liked it so much! I'm hoping the next update won't take as long as this one did, but I'm still super busy with school and struggling with writer's block so I won't make any promises on when it'll be out. I'm just glad everyone hasn't given up on this fic, lol.

Thanks so much for the review!

~ Kyra
Review By [bradsan] • Date [17 Oct 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Dreams And Visions" from AndreaMaine
Review:
You have a very interesting next generation story going here. I would like to see what will happen as this moves along.
Comments from author:
Thanks! I'm glad you like it! :)
Review By [AndreaMaine] • Date [15 Oct 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Dreams And Visions" from ThePureOne
Review:
I am so glad your back to this story! !!!
Comments from author:
Thanks! I'm hoping it won't take as long for the next update.
Review By [ThePureOne] • Date [15 Oct 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Dreams And Visions" from SpacedCadet
Review:
I'm really glad you got back to this.

Please do lots and lots more.

SOON !
Comments from author:
I'm glad I was able to get back to this, too. I'm still busy with school and struggling with writer's block but I'm definitely hoping that the next update won't take nearly as long as this one.
Review By [SpacedCadet] • Date [15 Oct 12] • Not Rated
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