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Review of chapter "Real" from (Current Donor)Shieldage
Review:
Hey, I'm impressed by this story. Strong imagery. Poor girl... Didn't she consider that by putting herself at risk and capturing the guys, rather than letting them loose in the castle, she could make a name for herself nobly?

Your last line is a very good and appropriate question.
Review By [(Current Donor)Shieldage] • Date [14 Dec 07] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Real" from JennyLal
Review:
I think you're on a mission to depress me! Unfortunately after Dawn threw Buffy out of the house I can believe anything of her. This sounds like one of her stupid "Notice me" things that goes horribly horribly wrong. On the plus side she's out of Buffy's hair.
Comments from author:
hi again JennyLal, i really don't mean to depress anyone, I'm just trying out a few styles of writing stories and right now I'm pretty much stuck in the angst mode, Someday soon I might even progress to something less angsty and more drama, and who knows someday in the far future I might even manage fluff.

thanks for the review though, and try a bit of chocolate i hear it helps against depression.
Review By [JennyLal] • Date [27 Oct 06] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Real" from JasonBarnett
Review:
I don't believe Dawn would go to those lengths.
Comments from author:
i can see where you are coming from but this is fanfiction and I wanted to see how Dawn would fare if her character was shown in its negative extreme. she did after all become a kleptomaniac and she did sneak out at night and played at being a bad girl together with spike, stealing things and breaking into the magic shop. these events lead me to think that she does have some darkness in her, coupled with her confusion after finding out that she is the Key, could lead to some bad decisions, and the Dawn in my fic is still very immature and doesn't really understand what she is doing. she does regret it after the fact though, but by then it is too late.
thank you for your review and for offering your opinion.
Review By [JasonBarnett] • Date [27 Oct 06] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Real" from purrfus
Review:
I don't like this. Character deaths are only worthwhile as devices to move a plot forward. As this is a short one-shot there is no need.

That being said - it is believable that a crazy teenager could and would do something really stupid like this, and the story is well put together.
Comments from author:
Thank you, the character deaths in the story are used mainly to drive home the lenghts Dawn went to to feel real, and a way of showing her that the price is sometimes too high. again thank you for your review and for sharing your opinion with me, i always appreciate constructive criticism.
Review By [purrfus] • Date [27 Oct 06] • Not Rated
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