*added to respond to author comment* Mainly the jumps in perspective were throwing me off. Not knowing the motivation of the attack (did I miss reading something? just skimmed it just now) and trying to figure out if Jason is going to make a personal appearance are also adding to the confusion.
Comments from author:
Tell me how I can fix that, please?
Review By [Jonathansicari] • Date [6 Mar 07] • Not Rated
Well, I guess it's a good thing Angel and some of the others were out of commission. The fight would have been too fast and you wouldn't have gotten more than a paragraph out of it.
"Soldiers came in through doors and windows. They got dead and deader really fast as Angel, Spike and the others smacked them down like little biotches. They kept one alive for info."
Bwa! This is very good, very fun. I like the premise, especially since it's a Halloween fic, but it's not THAT Halloween. Maybe you should put that in the summary, to attract more readers. I know I would have read it earlier if I had known. I tend to like the post season finale fics the best. Great job, I'll be tracking!
Review By [AnnOfMidnight] • Date [30 Nov 06] • Rating [9 out of 10]
....Tranquilizers? They do realise that will just piss them the hell off. If its not the stuff the council made to remove their powers, aren't they supposed to mtabolise everything else super fast?
Comments from author:
Oh yeah it would just piss them off! ^_^
Review By [FairyQilan] • Date [10 Nov 06] • Rating [10 out of 10]
I really love Halloween fics, and this is extra specially nice. The fact that you are going for a different Halloween event and spicing it up with all the extras, then throw in some good writing - can you do this for 60 or so chapters - because I don't think I am going to want it to end. I can't wait to see how the teeth come into play!
Review By [purrfus] • Date [10 Nov 06] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Xander/Jason?? Slash? If it is...then you forgot rule #1 about Slash fics. YOU PUT SLASH IN THE SUMMARY!!!! Y'know, before the person clicks the link to ur fic?
Comments from author:
I'm sure the picture thingy didn't give you a clue? Did it? *shrugs* Sorry . . . Kinda. ^_^ At least their's nothing EEP worrying in it yet. lucky you huh?
Review By [JaredDrake] • Date [10 Nov 06] • Not Rated