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Review of chapter "Father's little dividend" from JonnWolfe
Review:
I really liked this. Crazy, insane, the both of them. Really sweet ending too. Very them.
Review By [JonnWolfe] • Date [5 Jul 12] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Father's little dividend" from Alkeni
Review:
A wonderful read.
Review By [Alkeni] • Date [9 Nov 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Father's little dividend" from cptquinn
Review:
I dont really see Faith as being stupid enough to let a parasite gestate in her when its a simple matter to get it removed.
Other than that, interesting take on the shattering of the Orlon Window, Though Im sure Illyria would disembowel him if 'her guide' tried to leave. =p
Comments from author:
True Faith could easily have had had an abortion but of course no story. At the time I wrote the story I don't think I realised how obsessive Ilyria was over Wesley. A sequel could be Illyria hunting down Faith and killing her. ;)
Review By [cptquinn] • Date [21 Aug 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Father's little dividend" from mithrilandtj
Review:
No problem
More appearance and scenery description. Maybe more of the missing conversations with Angel and Wesley's parents (I'd really like to see THAT meeting w/ Faith & his folks). Definitely more sex. And yeah maybe a little more motivation inner thought description from the duo. But that's just my opiinion.
I hope that helps. ;-)
Comments from author:
Appearance and scenery tried to do before. Might retackle in a month.

Put in conversation with Wesleys parents. Also office conversation with the L.A. gang. But I liked the original simplicity of no other charcters being described apart from Faith and Wesley. To give it their own world effect.

Put in whopping big sex scene at end with much more inner motivation thought description from main characters. That was a good point. I often have had reviewers pick me up on that in other earleir stories. Must be slipping back into bad habits.

Thank you so much once more, for your helpful suggestions.
Review By [mithrilandtj] • Date [28 Nov 06] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Father's little dividend" from mithrilandtj
Review:
Not long enough in that I think your section were too short.
needed more filler to develop the story. Your entire story was less than 4000 words.
:-)
Comments from author:
You know maybe you are right. I even went back and added a few more sentences after you first reviewed. Do you mean more filler as furniture,costume, appearance and scenery description? Or were you referring to missing conversations with Angel (he was getting on my nerves by season five) and Wesley's parents. More detail in the sex scenes? Should I have described a final reunion sex scene? More motivation inner thought description of hero and heroine?

Sorry to bug you like this.
Review By [mithrilandtj] • Date [28 Nov 06] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Father's little dividend" from angelus
Review:
I agree great job and it would have saved Wesley's life if this had happened
Comments from author:
Yes poor Wesley, what a wrist slitting end he had. I always thought he deserved better. He tried so hard.

Thank you so much for your review.
Review By [angelus] • Date [28 Nov 06] • Rating [7 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Father's little dividend" from mithrilandtj
Review:
Interesting read. Not long enough, but interesting.
Not a bad pairing.
Comments from author:
Thank you so much for your review. I am intrigued by the comment not long enough. But I'm glad you liked it over all.

Faith and Wesley would be the best buffyverse pairing ever. It could warrant it's own miniseries of angst.
Review By [mithrilandtj] • Date [27 Nov 06] • Rating [7 out of 10]
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