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Review of chapter "Joy to the world" from (Past Donor)MetropolisRising
Review:
Great job. I have wanted to see more "Ensouled Darla" fics, so this was a good one to see, even if it didn't match what I think she'd be like. As far as I'm concerned you could write a whole bunch of Xander/Eve fic too....or maybe I'll write one. :) Great pairings and points for not over using the Mallory's other than for the premise. Fun all around especially with your spectacularly catty characterizations of people. Thanks for this!
Comments from author:
Thank you for such a nice review.

What did you think ensouled Darla would be like? I tried to cross her with dying of syphilis souled Darla and saint mother angel ghost Darla.

Thanks I liked Xander/Eve. I liked Eve full stop and Angel I thought was a jerk from an evil employee at Wolfram and Harts point of view.

Is that what you mean by spectacularly catty characterisations of people? I hope I didn't Fred bash too much.

Thank you very much for your review.
Review By [(Past Donor)MetropolisRising] • Date [4 Mar 07] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Joy to the world" from Ansku
Review:
Good one :)
Comments from author:
Thank you, reading through my stories I see. That makes one feel all warm and glowy inside.
Review By [Ansku] • Date [26 Feb 07] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Joy to the world" from KarlStahl
Review:
Very good story, very happy ending. I enjoyed reading it. The use of characters from different worlds was a great concept. I think there's even more potential in there. Most of the time I like my stories a little darker, therefore I don't think it's necessary to pair most of the characters off. But it is a nice end.
Comments from author:
Thank you so much for such a useful review, you're right I did pair too many couples off. I almost had Cordelia not be with anyone. Because grief can take awhile.

It would have been better to not have Gunn hook up penultimate chapter and definitely not Cordy.

I was thinking this universe could be revisited later on. I want Dawn to go sliding with Colin Mallory. I want more Kromagg adventures to happen.
Review By [KarlStahl] • Date [16 Jan 07] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Fugitives" from heathenseyes
Review:
And Cordy got her happy ending. That was great. He was a cutie, don't blame her a bit. ::smirk::
Comments from author:
Well why should Cordelia be blamed for anything?

I knew from the beginning of writing this sad excuse for a Wes/Faith ship frenzy*, that Cordelia was never going to get with Xander or Doyle. I was going to put her with Colin Mallory but decided halfway through that his character was too drippy and not good enough for our Cordy.

*(although the concept of doubles and sliding genuinely fascinates me)
Review By [heathenseyes] • Date [10 Jan 07] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "And they all lived happily ever after" from Cutiepie
Review:
Yay, a happy ending! I enjoyed the story a whole lot, and don't think that you need have changed anything. Some more sliding could have been fun (seeing all the wacky things that could have gone different and all that, and I would have loved for them to have encountered a world where perhaps Joyce needed rescue and her daughter(s) had died? Dawn getting her 'mommy' back would have been a perfect bit of sugary goodness to me.) Someone else mentioned a few of the "plot threads" that didn't get tied off, so I'll just say, "yeah, what about that?" and add in a question of whether Faith lost her slayer strength because of something Fred did or because of the flu strain that she caught. I kind of assumed it was tied into the hair growth spell, but you never made it clear. Um, all in all, I am very satisfied with this story and the way you ended it. Thank you for writing it!
Comments from author:
"Dawn getting her 'mommy' back would have been a perfect bit of sugary goodness to me." Ooh I don't know Cutiepie I've been feeling angst ridden recently, I don't think I could pull that off without chundering.

could be a sequel "Not without my mom"

Thank you so much for that review as always Cutiepie, you have no idea how bloody helpful you are, at pointing out things that are not immediately obvious for the innocent reader who can not telepathically read my mind. Yes, I think I'm going to have to do a fluffy epilogue to explain these questions.

Gives me an opportunity to write a Cordelia/Miller pash session. (pash=Australasian for mack/snog)

Thank you sincerely once more.
Review By [Cutiepie] • Date [9 Jan 07] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "And they all lived happily ever after" from heathenseyes
Review:
I would love more sliding, and as for the sex...mmm, well you had a nice amount. I wouldn't mind a little more as long as it doesn't become all smut. Although if you wanted to do an all smut, I would so read it. But for the story, you had just the right amount, the only ones that were really jumping bones were Faith and Wes. I loved the story, it's definitely one of my favs.
Comments from author:
You wouldn't want to read it if I did all smut believe me, as I tend to be completely clinical about sex and have great difficulties making things seem romantic, or erotic.

Thank you so much for reviewing those comments were extremely helpful.
Review By [heathenseyes] • Date [9 Jan 07] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "And they all lived happily ever after" from (Current Donor)Shieldage
Review:
Hey thanks!

First, your reply to another review, that's the Season 5 Willow reference I was looking for! Awesome! Awesome!

Second, great story. Sliding was awesome.

Two dangling plot threads though: ya perked my interest but didn't exactly follow through on what happens to a world when the First Evil takes over and ya hinted at some sort of vampire conspiracy attracting homeless people to the town, but didn't resolve it one way or the other (at least as far as I can remember). Huh, did Illyria disengrate completely? When Doyle breathed in the mummy dust and sneezed, oh well... I guess 'she' was just to weak to infect anyone else :)

Description-Good. The pairings were cute. Fred as a bad girl was neat. Poor Darla and the very reasonable and understandable clause on her curse. Good luck to Connor and Caridad. Miler popping in at the end was neat, though I prefer Gates myself.

I hope that Eve-in-love working there will help Cordy get over her Xander-fear. They make good friends ;)

Excellent story, thanks for following through with it :)
Comments from author:
You prefer Gates, really? Golly. I think bailey chase who played Miller is a god. The character of Miller as cool calm best friend who doesn't think girlfriends should get in the way of the mission is interesting. I wouldn't have minded a spin off series of Riley, Sam and Miller actually demon hunting in South America. Would have been interesting. Oh my god I could cross it with Anaconda.

Anyway I am writing to say thank you so much for all your useful feedback. Above and beyond really all that you wrote down. I have decided to do an epilogue to explain it rather than tell you and the other two megakind people who have reviewed and pointed out I left story lines dangling the same thing in a dull way three times.

So watch out for it. In the next thirty hours.

Thank you again.
Review By [(Current Donor)Shieldage] • Date [9 Jan 07] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Stuck in the basement" from (Past Donor)morgyair
Review:
Nicely done and yes I'm still looking forward to the next part....
Comments from author:
Why thank you, next part is last part. Yay, yay.
Review By [(Past Donor)morgyair] • Date [6 Jan 07] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Fugitives" from heathenseyes
Review:
So, are you going to try and resoul her then? Hmmm, the thought of that possibility never even popped up. I was more, yay, what are they going to do to her now? ::insert evil laughter:: Still lovin the pairings, I was kinda hopin' that Doyle and Cordy would get together, but oh well. Just happy that Faith and Wes are still workin' at it. But, I loved it, and can't wait for the next chapter. Looks like you got your writers block taken care of, ehh? ;-)
Comments from author:
Doyle and Cordy. After six years she only saw him as a friend. Besides he has drinking and gambling problems.

Resouling Fred. Angel was going to get Willow to resoul her. but Giles told him on the phone she was in a heavenly dimension and the watchers council wouldn't help him. Then some one (knox?) came into the office saying not to bother, her soul had been consumed.

Yes my writers block finally ended. It was how to kill the vampire that had me stuck!

Thank you for your review.
Review By [heathenseyes] • Date [6 Jan 07] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Fugitives" from heathenseyes
Review:
I'm liking it, totally addicted. Can't wait for he next chapter. Have to say though, I never really did like Fred, she was always so wishy-washy, and funny enough, I like her in your story, she may be morally bankrupt, but at least she has some balls. Love your pairings.
Comments from author:
Thank you so much for your review.

I like Fred but she was a natural two timer I felt. And what the hell was up with everyone loving her in season 5?

Being a rabid Faith/Wes shipper I have been able to do it two times in this story!

Always thought Gunn and Anne would be good.

Darla and Lindsey soulmates, Darla just got turned before she could realize it.

The other pairings well, I'm not sure if I can refer to them as they are meant to be a surprise.

Better get over my writers block with how to to get the heroines out of the nightclub and finish the story. I only have two chapters to go, but I can't work out how they're going to get out of the wretched nightclub.
Review By [heathenseyes] • Date [4 Jan 07] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Virus" from (Past Donor)morgyair
Review:
Nice addition, espeically Eve's part at the end...in answer to your question...Eve was a great character and everyone is redeemable...'sides she made a cute couple with Lindsey. Of course there is the question of who was using who there
Comments from author:
Thank you, so you are one of the few people in the universe that don't hate Eve eh?
Review By [(Past Donor)morgyair] • Date [1 Jan 07] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Fred's evil, Faith's ill, Cordy's pissed" from (Past Donor)morgyair
Review:
Finally they all grabbed a clue....and how about a stray twig....hey evil know it all minds sometimes miss the little details....
Comments from author:
It might come to a spare twig because I'm stuck, stuck. Thank you as always for your review.
Review By [(Past Donor)morgyair] • Date [1 Jan 07] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Office Politics" from Cutiepie
Review:
Wow, Fred sure has become unlikable. And though she doesn't have a soul anymore, it still doesn't excuse her actions. I always kind of felt that was a cop-out, even for the vampires. She knows that what she is doing isn't "right", and that it isn't something that the former "her" would have done. She just doesn't care. She is acting like a spoiled brat, wanting her own way no matter what anyone else (including Wes!) thinks. I wonder how she will react when it becomes clear (to even her deluded mind) that Wes wants nothing to do with her. I'm picturing a major melt-down.
Comments from author:
"Wow, Fred sure has become unlikable"

Yes, I was surprised no one has accused me of bashing her character. (You aint seen nothing yet btw) The evilness of Fred was necessary for the grand finale 'major melt down' chapter coming up soon, and I had to deal with the statue in Connor's wardrobe.

"And though she doesn't have a soul anymore, it still doesn't excuse her actions. "

I'd agree with you normally, but in Joss Verse it so obviously does. And if you're an adult Willow with a soul you can flay people alive, and never be expected to go to jail for it. (That's so unfair!!)

I figure Fred is emotionally like a demon at the moment. Able to experience love but not empathy. Want, take, have, is her living mantra. She has no blood lust like a vampire or demon, eg she could shoot someone in cold blood because they took the car park space she wanted, but not want to play with their entrails afterwards.
Review By [Cutiepie] • Date [30 Dec 06] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "The Real Player" from (Past Donor)morgyair
Review:
Nicely done twist...I look forward to the next chapter.
Comments from author:
thank you, hope the next chapter lives up to expectations.
Review By [(Past Donor)morgyair] • Date [27 Dec 06] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "New Players" from MrKlortho
Review:
I have to tell you, I've been pleasantly surprised by this story. I think that you've done a great job at characterization, which really is what draws me in as a reader. I'm especially curious to see where you take the whole Xander/Cordelia relationship. At this point, (and maybe I'm far off point myself) I feel Cordelia is acting like a huge bitch. I know that she has issues with the Xander from her world, but so far I'm finding it difficult to feel for her because shes almost becoming a caricature. She's coming off extremely harsh, which means I hope that she either A.) Has a break down/discussion with Xander where they work out most/some of their differences or B.) Xander finally flips out on her, and kind of makes her realize that she isn't in her world anymore.

In case you cant figure it out, I'm a big Xander fan. I think that his character in BtVS had the most possibilities (even if I didn't think they were always properly used). No other characters could go from goofy, to serious, to down right cold blooded on occasion like he could. That said, it seems that when fanfiction authors that don't care about the character write him, they turn him into a buffoon or a weak willed puss who gets run over by everyone. I'm glad to see that so far, that you have done neither...so far. I think your portrayal of Xander is interesting in that right now he isn't so much weak, as he's more of a man in over his head. Because of this, he's sort of letting people push him around to a degree, because he isn't necessarily sure that his suggestions are right. For example, in this chapter, I think he was too tired and shell shocked to really have it out with Wesley.

At the same time though, I like in one of the chapters how you have Darla recognize him and pair up with him, because she respects the fact that he'll tear down heaven and Earth to get Dawn back to his dimension, regardless of the consequences. I always felt that that was a hallmark of a character. He would do whatever was necessary to protect his loved ones, even if it costs him his soul.

What I would like to see his Xander begin to come into his own, and finally show a little more backbone to the other characters. Because when the chips are down, Xander does what other characters cant, or are unwilling to do. Granted, I know hes not a main character in this story, and its your choice as to what to do with him, but please, help a brother out!
Comments from author:
Thank you for such a lengthy considered review.

This story is primarily Wes/Faith. Then it is about Cordelia and who she eventually ends up with. Then it is how the sliding Fang Gang adjust to their new Earth.

Wes, Cordelia, Darla, Lindsey, Doyle and Gunn first off are not their doubles in the Buffy World. They have all had completely different life experiences. Wes never grew up with a domineering father. He and his slayer had a great relationship from the moment they met. He was never tortured by his Faith. Cordelia grew up poor, she never got the visions, she did progress much further in her acting career. Darla doesn't lose her soul if she experiences a moment of total happiness. Lindsey decided to become a paramedic not a lawyer. So only the good, caring side of his personality got to flourish. Doyle remained married and alive.

So Cordelia isn't meant to be a caricature, but she is very defensive. Because she had a horrible childhood. She is a bitch, because she lost the person she loved more that anyone in the world less than four months ago. She is grieving for Groo. Maybe I should feature that more. So the reader can feel more sympathetically towards her.

(See why feedback is great?)

Now onto Xander. I have never written a story with Xander featuring in it prominently before. I have enormous respect for Xander the character. I especially liked the way he always thought Angel and Spike should be staked. It is not a Xander, or a Connor or a Dawn story as such however. This story is not a Xander bash that's for real.

And yes you're right, he's in over his head at the moment with his role as a watcher. Or more accurately 'feels' like he is. But because my story is a soap opera he is going to find happiness by the end of the story. Cordelia is going to see she was wrong about him.
Review By [MrKlortho] • Date [27 Dec 06] • Rating [8 out of 10]
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