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Review of chapter "Epilogue" from jujukittychick
Review:
just re-read this and i still love it. of course i've always liked edward's character, unlike so many of the anita crew that have issues with themselves and their choices, edward's pretty non-apologetic, he is who he is and he's comfortable with that fact. and it was nice seeing xander get a second chance at being kid, or at least getting to do kid things. of course the happy ever after in the house with the white picket fence was pretty cute too. great job with this :D
Review By [jujukittychick] • Date [9 Feb 13] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Epilogue" from HonorLove
Review:
That was absolutely wonderful. And, sad as it was to see it end, the writer in me is glad you knew when to end it. Thanks for sharing!
Review By [HonorLove] • Date [27 Oct 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Epilogue" from Emrys
Review:
This is a great story. A seamless addition of Xander into the Anitaverse.
Review By [Emrys] • Date [13 Mar 12] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Epilogue" from falsegod
Review:
wow a truly awesome story
Review By [falsegod] • Date [11 Jan 12] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Epilogue" from jujukittychick
Review:
awwwwwwww, great job with this. loved getting see a little xander grow up, even if it was only physically, and get to have all the little kid things he missed out on teh first time. liked how you gradually eased edward into things as well, as well as the stuff in the epilogue, which was just awwww. great work :)
Review By [jujukittychick] • Date [15 Oct 11] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Epilogue" from Nuphar
Review:
I've read this story a few times and I have to say even reading it over and over it still is a great story.
Review By [Nuphar] • Date [2 Mar 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Epilogue" from MalificentTheEvilQue
Review:
Aww~ How sweet~
Review By [MalificentTheEvilQue] • Date [30 Apr 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Epilogue" from Obsidian
Review:
Great Wrap up. THanks.
Review By [Obsidian] • Date [7 Dec 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Epilogue" from skrybspryt
Review:
I don't have anything to say, except awesome plot and amazing story.
Review By [skrybspryt] • Date [13 May 09] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Epilogue" from Ansku
Review:
Great fic :)
Review By [Ansku] • Date [17 Jan 09] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Epilogue" from jal
Review:
I'm disgusted.
As in every January, I make it my business to read all the stories nominated for the COA and as this was the first in the list of Anita Blake finished crossovers I started here.
I jus finished reading your story from beginning to end and must say I am crawling with dissatisfation. It was brilliant untill the last chapter where it seems you got too bored, lazy or disinterested to give it the proper ending it needed. A cheats way out to creating an ending without finishing the story. How can you, as an author, feel it's ok to give such a blasse ending to a story that held such promise? There is so much more to be explored and developed and I leave feeling that it was more important for you to get the story into the 'best finished' section than the 'unfinished' of the awards.

A challenge to you then... delete the last chapter... Start again from where Xander and Edward start to interact as more than protector and student and give proper credit to their relationship. Work somehow into the story the temping tasters you dropped about 'the one who sees' and Xanders reaction to the warehyenas. I'd love to see both of those story lines developed. You said Richard was changing... How? Micah leaving with the leopards is also unfinished and set the scene for a new plot line that you just let fizzle and go nowhere.

I appologise if this comes across as cruel. This is NOT me flaming you. You should take it as a compliment that your writing has inspired such a reaction in me. It pains me to see people with talent not making the most of it and taking the easy way out. Take pride in your work and turn this budding outline into something truly memorable.

I would enjoy hearing your response to my review.

Kind regards. Jessalea
Comments from author:
I don't usually respond to reviews that start out this negatively, but I do try to read to the end, so I felt I owed you something for the fact that you explained your problems with the story.

I'm going to be honest - it was partially all three of those things that made me want to wrap up AHYNK quickly. I was getting ready for college, I hadn't updated in a while due to lack of inspiration, and I wanted to make something that could satisfy most people.

And if you want to know how I can do this, as an author, read book seven of Harry Potter. It too has an epilogue that pissed off a lot of people. I'm not saying I'm JK Rowling - hell no - and the comparison bothers me. I don't like to leave people hanging, though, and that's why I wanted to tie up all the loose ends quickly and painlessly, without rambling on for another ten chapters and going into smut that a lot of people wouldn't want to read.

I did this long before the award nominations and without expectation of being nominated again, after getting the nod as best unfinished in '07.

I never intended this story to be long, drawn out slashy explorations; it was always going to be mostly about Xander growing comfortable in Anita's world. I might make a sequel doing many of the things you want me to do instead of the epilogue, but I'm not going to get rid of it. I describe Xander as "The One Who Sees" because Joss Whedon did it and because he has a tendency to see into the heart of people. If you were paying attention, I did work that in a great deal, especially in the earlier chapters, but he has less need of it after analyzing all the people I cared to have him encounter. It's not some mystical power, and it doesn't involve him in prophecies or make him a seer. He's just insightful.

I didn't have real plans for his interaction with the werehyenas. His beast is even less substantial than Anita's, only the ghost of the possession - his body and soul remember feeling the beast, so other lycanthropes can detect it, but he can't really do anything with it.

As for Richard - there's a reason I don't usually write epic-length stories like this. Well, it feels epic to me, at any rate. I tend to have a lot of details that I just forget about after long breaks in writing. Richard was not trying to impress anyone romantically. He had a taste of Anita trusting him again and wanted to get more of that feeling back. He was still unable to accept her having multiple lovers and some of her ruthless nature still bothers him. But, especially after Xander's little pep talk, he feels more secure in his humanity and is prepared to work on some relationships he let go.

Micah did not leave permanently. He loves Anita too much to even threaten to do that. He took the pard to one of the leopards' apartments, and they stayed until she called and said Edward had left. It takes a promise or two from both Edward and Xander, after they are in a relationship, before Micah at least trusts Edward not to kill and pard member who doesn't "thoroughly deserve killing."

I'm sorry you found the ending unsatisfactory. But my life has become very busy with 16 hours of college classes and all the homework that comes with it. I barely have time to write the original and fanfic stories that I find extremely interesting, much less to do more follow up on one I considered essentially finished. I may come back to this some day, but I'm just not ready to do that when I can't give it the time it deserves.

I do thank you for taking the time to read this story and review it. If nothing else, it made me reread all 29 chapters and correct a few typos and make some minor changes - for the best, I hope.
Review By [jal] • Date [16 Jan 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Epilogue" from sabellestarte
Review:
Nicely done. Thank you for sharing your talent.
Review By [sabellestarte] • Date [30 Jul 08] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Epilogue" from AriaDragoncrest
Review:
Excellent story. You may want to mark it as complete though. There are a lot of people who only like to read the finished product.
Comments from author:
Thanks for the review! I thought I did that already, but now I'm positive :D
Review By [AriaDragoncrest] • Date [21 Jun 08] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Epilogue" from Elleria
Review:
Love this.
Review By [Elleria] • Date [11 Jun 08] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Epilogue" from mithrilandtj
Review:
Nice finish!
I always thought the Xan/Ed pairing was a bit weird but you made it work.

BTW: if this is really all to the story then you need to mark it as complete.
Review By [mithrilandtj] • Date [7 Jun 08] • Rating [9 out of 10]
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