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Review of chapter "Chapter Three" from (Current Donor)DeepBlueJoy
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Very disappointed to realize that this is all there is of this fascinating idea. I really do hope you will return to it some day. It's got promise and I like the fact that I *can't* tell exactly where it's going.

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Review By [(Current Donor)DeepBlueJoy] • Date [19 Mar 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Two" from Emmy
Review:
this is very good. I hope you continue it soon.
Review By [Emmy] • Date [19 May 07] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Two" from Jorrie
Review:
Oooh! This is awesome! I cannot wait for an update! I'll be on the look out. ^_^
Review By [Jorrie] • Date [9 Apr 07] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Two" from fanficfreak
Review:
Great Story so far. I love the idea of Angela being a Slayer-- She's one of the more helpless of at the Jeffersonian, and it's always fun to give them power. So, Vampire skull huh? Was it a Master Vamp then? Cuz the only one that I know of whose bones didn't dust was /the/ Master from Season1. ... Anyways. Update soon.
Review By [fanficfreak] • Date [20 Mar 07] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Two" from RevDorothyL
Review:
Okay, this is REALLY intriguing! How did the vampire die, that the skull didn't turn to dust with the rest of him? Plus, I love it that Zack was saved and walked home by a Slayer when he was 13 (I'll bet he was even more cute and misleadingly helpless-looking back then!).
Review By [RevDorothyL] • Date [4 Feb 07] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Two" from Christy
Review:
oooh keep going...it's just starting to get interesting!
Review By [Christy] • Date [3 Jan 07] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from SpiffydaWonderSheep
Review:
The concept intrigues me. I think you've got a good handle on the character's voices. If I can make but one teeny suggestion, too much thinking. Try and get all the exposition out in the dialog.

So, when's the next part gonna be up? :D
Comments from author:
Thanks for the feedback, it's very much appreciated.

I did the exposition in thoughts here -- and a lot in the second chapter as well -- because a lot is past tense and subversive, manipulation and all that. The plot exposition will be done mostly in dialogue. Because I am a self-admitted dialogue whore. :-D

I hope to have the next part up in a day or so. As soon as I can tear myself away from the ol' Xbox to finish writing it. ^__^

Thanks again for taking the time to leave me a comment. It makes me want to write more!
Review By [SpiffydaWonderSheep] • Date [28 Dec 06] • Not Rated
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