Review of chapter "Chapter Three" from DeepBlueJoy
Very disappointed to realize that this is all there is of this fascinating idea. I really do hope you will return to it some day. It's got promise and I like the fact that I *can't* tell exactly where it's going.
Review By [DeepBlueJoy
] • Date [19 Mar 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Two" from Emmy
this is very good. I hope you continue it soon.
Review By [Emmy
] • Date [19 May 07] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Two" from Jorrie
Oooh! This is awesome! I cannot wait for an update! I'll be on the look out. ^_^
Review By [Jorrie
] • Date [9 Apr 07] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Two" from fanficfreak
Great Story so far. I love the idea of Angela being a Slayer-- She's one of the more helpless of at the Jeffersonian, and it's always fun to give them power. So, Vampire skull huh? Was it a Master Vamp then? Cuz the only one that I know of whose bones didn't dust was /the/ Master from Season1. ... Anyways. Update soon.
Review By [fanficfreak
] • Date [20 Mar 07] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Two" from RevDorothyL
Okay, this is REALLY intriguing! How did the vampire die, that the skull didn't turn to dust with the rest of him? Plus, I love it that Zack was saved and walked home by a Slayer when he was 13 (I'll bet he was even more cute and misleadingly helpless-looking back then!).
Review By [RevDorothyL
] • Date [4 Feb 07] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Two" from Christy
oooh keep going...it's just starting to get interesting!
Review By [Christy
] • Date [3 Jan 07] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from SpiffydaWonderSheep
The concept intrigues me. I think you've got a good handle on the character's voices. If I can make but one teeny suggestion, too much thinking. Try and get all the exposition out in the dialog.
So, when's the next part gonna be up? :D
Comments from author:
Thanks for the feedback, it's very much appreciated.
I did the exposition in thoughts here -- and a lot in the second chapter as well -- because a lot is past tense and subversive, manipulation and all that. The plot exposition will be done mostly in dialogue. Because I am a self-admitted dialogue whore. :-D
I hope to have the next part up in a day or so. As soon as I can tear myself away from the ol' Xbox to finish writing it. ^__^
Thanks again for taking the time to leave me a comment. It makes me want to write more!
Review By [SpiffydaWonderSheep
] • Date [28 Dec 06] • Not Rated