Very disappointed to realize that this is all there is of this fascinating idea. I really do hope you will return to it some day. It's got promise and I like the fact that I *can't* tell exactly where it's going.

Blue

this is very good. I hope you continue it soon.

Oooh! This is awesome! I cannot wait for an update! I'll be on the look out. ^_^

Great Story so far. I love the idea of Angela being a Slayer-- She's one of the more helpless of at the Jeffersonian, and it's always fun to give them power. So, Vampire skull huh? Was it a Master Vamp then? Cuz the only one that I know of whose bones didn't dust was /the/ Master from Season1. ... Anyways. Update soon.

Okay, this is REALLY intriguing! How did the vampire die, that the skull didn't turn to dust with the rest of him? Plus, I love it that Zack was saved and walked home by a Slayer when he was 13 (I'll bet he was even more cute and misleadingly helpless-looking back then!).

oooh keep going...it's just starting to get interesting!

The concept intrigues me. I think you've got a good handle on the character's voices. If I can make but one teeny suggestion, too much thinking. Try and get all the exposition out in the dialog.

So, when's the next part gonna be up? :D

Thanks for the feedback, it's very much appreciated.

I did the exposition in thoughts here -- and a lot in the second chapter as well -- because a lot is past tense and subversive, manipulation and all that. The plot exposition will be done mostly in dialogue. Because I am a self-admitted dialogue whore. :-D

I hope to have the next part up in a day or so. As soon as I can tear myself away from the ol' Xbox to finish writing it. ^__^

Thanks again for taking the time to leave me a comment. It makes me want to write more!