Before I say anything, let me just say that I really like this story. I really like the backstory and how you weaved Carter and Davis into Buffy canon.

But honestly, chapters 8-12 feel like aimless musing tacked on to a story that is otherwise completely stalled. While I do definitely love character development, and believe it's an integral part of any story, it's not the ONLY integral part. The plot is important too, but that aspect has been entirely neglected for five chapters now. After Major Davis met with Buffy, nothing else has really happened. Nothing much happened at the meeting either, as Major Davis was called away for unexplained reasons before he even told them anything, and nobody from either group has followed up on this yet. None of your central plot threads have advanced at all since then. There hasn't been any interaction at all between the Scoobies and the SGC since then. And you've gone so deep into introspection that you're starting to go in circles. Faith has had more or less the same train of thought about Buffy's past several times. Sam has planned to discover what her teammates are hiding several times.

Your first seven chapters almost seem like an entirely separate story at this point, due to the huge shift in tone and especially pacing starting with chapter 8.

I really want to like this story, and I really love the direction it's going, both in terms of character development as well as the plot itself, but the plot isn't going in any direction at all right now.

This is a very good story and one I hope you don't drop. Please don't wait to long to put the next chapter up

I read the whole work in one sitting. Well, works, as you have almost completely different works. There's one work, from the beginning to approximately when Buffy and Maj. Davis meet. It's a good little start and set-up.

Then there's another two, radiating from that point, dealing with events in the SGC and New Council, respectively. They have nothing to do with each other, and aren't moving the plot even one inch towards what the reader suspects is one of your long-term goals, having the two groups, especially the two sisters, meet. They do nothing but try and develop the characters.

Don't get me wrong, I love well thought out and executed characters. But the time to show them is while they are making progress towards a goal, not when they are wandering around without one. And that's what you have here. Give these poor benighted characters a goal, even if it's the wrong one, so that we can see them trying to get somewhere, rather than feeling angsty for themselves or others.

Take time to make three fics one really good one, that this has the potential to be.

very good.

Good build up. still painful. I may need to read this another time. I'm scrambling to keep my sanity just before graduating university...

Woo hoo! So glad to see you're updating this again and that I'd obviously missed a few updates so had lots of good new chapters to read! Very fun, I love the pace you've set, even as I'm mentally urging them all on to the inevitable meetings coming soonish I hope! LOL Very glad you haven't abandoned this one, please keep writing and I'll look forward to continuing to read this gem! :) Thanks!

Great chapter, I loved Buffy's dream & seeing her snuggled with her family--as well as seeing the same for Jack.

I am sincerely looking forward to seeing Sam and Riley and Paul and Buffy all in the same room. Also, Riley's reaction to Faith's presence. Waiting for more!!!

CT.

Glad to see Buffy is finally awake I was wondering about Kennedy so I am glad you mentioned her. Interesting that it was Buffy's side that was hurt but Faith felt it. Looking forward to more.

Yeah, had to at least say she was ok. Never thought Kennedy was bad per se, just more like she couldn't handle being in someone else's shadow. But that was how her Watcher had trained her so...

AND I'VE BEEN WAITING FOR SOMEONE TO POINT OUT THE CONNECTION BETWEEN FAITH AND BUFFY!!! OMG!!! LOL

Sorry, got excited.

Thanks sticking with me.

OK here's one from the other side of the coin... I happen to love complex plot and character building IF it is good and not redundant, which so far yours are not for the most part. I love action and all the rest as well but frankly I rarely read stories if they are less than 10-20k words unless the I know the author and am pretty sure it'll be worth it.

I like *stories* not just a quick wham bam thank you mam fic, although a lot of those are good too, I really love the longer ones.

I understand some people like the story to *just get on with it* But I think you are doing a fine job so far of letting us see inside their heads and building us up to the eventual meet and greet and smack, personally. I have been following this and other of your stories since you posted em, so don't get too down from some reviews.

I'm very glad you are back writing =)

Katt

Thank you. I couldn't quite tell at the beginning if you liked it and then realized where you were going with it. And I have to say that so much of what's happening now is something that will come into play, even if it's the smallest of things because I love long story.

And I love you.

Really.

it's interesting how far this has gotten,yet the worlds still really haven't collided yet. Buffy's waking up is the key event here, should happen soon. One big problem is the scoobies -they're not going to like Sam, at all... if it was just Sam & Buffy they could talk it out, probably, but the presence of friends around them will make it hard, I think.
Meanwhile, slayer kidnappings --one would think the council would put out orders that they don't go anywhere except in groups from now on...

Buffy's waking up was key. Both figuratively as well as physically.

As for the Scoobies and Sam. They don't have much of a leg to stand on. All of them have repeatedly turned their backs on Buffy where as, much as it sucked at the time, Sam only did it once, and given the fact that Sam honestly believed her sister was troubled it's not too surprising because she lived in a world of fact. As for the Scoobies, they did it because of a lack of faith a lot of the time. Too high of expectations.

The Slayer kidnapping is coming up soon. A new plot twist that will come into play later.

the lowest form of 'entertainment'
is the soap opera

sadly that is what you have made here.

You do realize that when angst is all you have the story pretty much will collapse?

Well ducky, if that's how you feel, it's how you feel. I don't agree but hey. It happens. Granted, the awesome thing about reading is that you find stories you love and stories you don't, and it's just like telly, you can always change the channel till you find something you like, as it were.

it's good to see that Buffy is doing so much better....
it seems that the land of dreams and memories has taken over our heroes...
eagerly awaiting to read more :)

I like to think of it that everyone is closing a chapter so they can get ready for the next one. At least the ones I want. LOL

I suggest that the break between the carter clan eventually be found to be either the council or the PTB. I honestly wouldn't put it past either group especially if they decided that Sam as a potential needed to be military trained and ready for the Stargate program but that Buffy was going to be needed on the hellmouth so they needed to be split up some how....

This is honestly quite painful to read. To much angst for my taste.

It's life. Sometimes you have a parent who just doesn't know how to deal with their children and what happens when they are left as the only parent? Especially one who lives a regimented life style and bases his life on the factual.

Buffy and the others are almost always faced with disbelief when faced with telling people the supernatural exists. The only time they aren't is when it's someone from Sunnydale who already knows something is fishy or someone already involved as it were.

As for Buffy and Sam, Sam always seemed like she would have worked to achieve her dreams and desires, she was very unimaginative in that regards and socially awkward at the beginning to me and she started to warm us and have fun as time passed, not to the extremem degree of Teal'c granted.

But it will be less angsty coming up. Had to get all the duckies in a better frame before they could move on. Besides, Sam had to come to turns with the fact that she had done wrong before, in my 'verse she didn't really allow herself to think on it till she heard about alt!Buffy from Samantha's world. Giles needed to see that Buffy is ready to move on and be willing to let her, even it means moving on without the rest of the gang. And since Faith is tied to Buffy I wanted to establish thier link early on. As it were.

Sorry for the pain, hopefully it will be worth it in the end.

Well, quite a mess. The slayers & SGC need to work together if they're going to make it,probably, but it's going to be very difficult. Sam & Buffy might be able to reconcile if they could just have some time. Dawn will be one strange thing for Sam to absorb.
Jacob is the one who's in real trouble in the long run, I think. Ouch. I doubt he'd accept Dawn was 'his'.
What Cassie will make of all this, I have no idea.

Well, you figure you put the bad guys from Buffy and mix them with the bad guys from SG and the good guys better pull their stuff together or they will get their butts handed to them.

Though some whumpage is definitely coming up.

Dawn is gonna be a surprise for Sam. In more ways than one. And poor Cassie, she just written out of the show and in fandom in a lot of places. Like when Janet died in the series where was Cassie? What happened there?