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Review of chapter "Chapter One" from BlameyFomorrii
Review:
I really liked this-I haven't seen much of Supernatural, but this is really interesting.
Review By [BlameyFomorrii] • Date [1 Jun 07] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from (Moderator)acs
Review:
Okay. An interesting idea. It feels a little rushed but not too bad.

However, I find this line near the end section kind of confusing:

"Their missing father had sent them some more coordinates."

Their father is waiting in the car in the paragraph before this? Now he's missing? If he isn't missing you should reword that paragraph to say he HAD BEEN missing and isn't now - that they'd met up with him using those coordinates.

If he is missing... how'd he end up in the car/waiting for them in the previous paragraph?

Just wondering.
Comments from author:
Thanks for catching that. I'll edit it.
Review By [(Moderator)acs] • Date [22 May 07] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from lyc
Review:
Tell me there's more...please?
Comments from author:
Check out the sequel, Honey, I'm Alive and Kicking.
Review By [lyc] • Date [26 Jan 07] • Rating [7 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from littleoldme
Review:
This is mind boggling, but fun. Poor Dean. His mother is younger than he is!
Comments from author:
HEHEHE! Thanks for the review, I'm glad you find it interesting.
Review By [littleoldme] • Date [11 Jan 07] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from heathenseyes
Review:
More please? I can't wait to see what's coming and John's reaction. So, what was the sorry for form Whistler?
Comments from author:
I will definitely add a sequel. And yes John's reaction is going to be interesting. As for the sorry from Whistler...well that was because he gave her the rest of the memories (good and bad) all in one shot, as well as having seen what her boys went through for 22 years. Buffy/Mary is his favorite out of all the slayers and he felt bad for forcing her to go through reliving her memories all at once.
Review By [heathenseyes] • Date [11 Jan 07] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from DarkTopaz
Review:
can't wait
Comments from author:
Thanks for the review, nice to see that there are some people reading my writings LOL!
Review By [DarkTopaz] • Date [11 Jan 07] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from shadowMD
Review:
Great start!
Comments from author:
Thanks for the compliment. I'm glad you liked it.
Review By [shadowMD] • Date [11 Jan 07] • Rating [9 out of 10]
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