interesting so far, i am curious as to how and why Xander is woman, how he (or is it she now?) and Faith are still alive and why Xander wants to rescue Spike so bad seeing as Xander hates him. looking forward to seeing where this goes
Review By [Blackguard] • Date [9 Jul 07] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Oh my, a million and one questions are just racing through my head. Can't focus on just one. So I will just have to wait until you update and find out the long and scenic way. Great and very intriguing start.
Review By [feekh] • Date [11 Mar 07] • Rating [10 out of 10]
You really need to run this through spell/grammar check. If you take the time to read this outloud to yourself you will notice that there are missing words, misused words, missing apostrophes, misused apostrophes, spaces inbetween the dialogue marks and the beginning of the dialogue, random spaces in the middle of words, run-on and fragment sentences, and switching tenses littered throughout.
Seriously, please take the time to just read this outloud to yourself. You'd be amazed at just how many mistakes there are within this story.
Interesting, though some of the writing could use a proofreader. Lots of "your" when you mean "you're", missing commas, strange dialogue, "stubble" when you mean "stumble", etc.
Review By [Rakeesh] • Date [15 Jan 07] • Rating [6 out of 10]
Sword fights! I just love them specially when one would think that the future didn't need them. Really interesting to see who the original enforcement would be. Wondered if you will write more of how Xander turns immortal(?) with Faith. And the consort got to know about that =)
Review By [Alterian] • Date [15 Jan 07] • Not Rated
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