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Review of chapter "Chapter Thirteen" from Knightmare
Review:
Are you ever going to finish this story? This has been a pleasure to read so far. Please Update This! Take care!
Comments from author:
Thank you very much for reviewing! I do want to finish this story, but I have encountered an offensive amount of writer's block regarding it. Every time I sit to write a chapter, what's in my head and what appears on the screen is vastly different in terms of quality. As soon as I write something I'm happy with, I'll update. Thanks again!
Review By [Knightmare] • Date [2 Jan 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Thirteen" from rylanaj
Review:
Ooooo. MJ as a potential. If all goes according to canon, we've got a Spider Slayer!
Comments from author:
Thank you very much for the comment, but weren't Spider Slayers always trying to slay our favorite arachnid? Ah, I'm just teasing. I understand what your saying, and you're right. In fact, it was one of the main reasons I took up the challenge of writing this fic.

I'm flattered your enjoying my story. Or a least interested enough to make the "Ooooo" noise. I honestly can think of nothing better to say about a story. Again, I thank you for your wonderful comment.
Review By [rylanaj] • Date [18 Feb 09] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Thirteen" from Dragonelf
Review:
::Gives the plot bunny some carrot shortcake::

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The trouble with the rat race is that
even if you win, you're still a rat.
- Lily Tomlin
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Comments from author:
Thanks for that, Dragonelf. I hope the plot bunny enjoys it!
Review By [Dragonelf] • Date [12 Jan 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Twelve" from MarcusSLazarus
Review:
Ah yes... it's all beginning to come together.

Of course, the First trying to drive Peter away is a BIT of a problem, but I somehow doubt it'll last that long; Peter might be fooled a bit, but he's never fooled for long (Plus, of course, the fact that the First seems to think he's enough of a threat that it wants him out of the way is a DEFINITE point in his favour; why get rid of him if he can't contribute anything?)

Personally, I particularly look forward to seeing how Xander and Dawn react to the news that they've got Spider-Man on their team for this little showdown; I picture Xander thinking that it's cool and Dawn getting kinda grossed out by the bug thing.

Of course, then there's the whole 'Nick Fury looking for Peter' thing to take into account; I have to wonder whether having the Ultimates dropping in to look for Peter and running into the Scoobies would be a good thing or a bad thing.

I mean, OK, they COULD do some serious damage against the Bringers, but given what happened the LAST time the military tried to do anything on that scale in Sunnydale I somehow doubt the Scoobies would be happy to have a bunch of super-soldiers hanging around.

Nah, all in all, I just hope the Ultimates stay where they are; besides, I've never really liked Fury's whole 'You join the team when you're eighteen or you're officially classified as a threat' thing.

If the one-eyed man DOES drop in, I just hope somebody hits him before he starts trying to assert his authority in the situation.

Anyway, update soon!

(Oh, by the way, any chance Peter could see about whipping up a new batch of webbing at some point? Maybe Willow and Anya could contribute some stuff from the Magic Shop to make it more effective or something...)
Comments from author:
Peter is a very smart little Spider-Man. I have the utmost confidence that he can match wits with most of the scientific big wigs in the Ultimate Universe (Reed Richards and Tony Stark excluded of course.). But when it comes to the supernatural, I'm under the opinion that he's just as susceptible as can be. After all, he's only had one encounter with the supernatural in actual Ultimate continuity, and he spent most of that time wonder what the heck was going on.

As for Fury, he may be a bastard, but he's a bastard that think he's doing the right thing. Regardless of the fairness of forcing Peter to join the Ultimates, can you honestly say that a Spider-Man who's been trained by Captain America is anything but unbeatable?

And I absolutely love the idea of Peter trying to make webbing with stuff from the Magic Shop! Oh dear lord, the wackiness that could ensue!

Thank you very much for another fantastic and insightful review!

Huh. It's some months later since writing this response to your comment, and I'm struck with the sudden realization that the last two sentences rhymed. I'm, uh, I'm not too sure on how to feel about this fact.
Review By [MarcusSLazarus] • Date [30 Nov 08] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Twelve" from TweedWizz
Review:
Really creative use of the First, better than the show actually.

While I'm not keen on Xander's death, at least it makes more sense than having Xander forced to take Spike in without there being any consequences.

Like the bits with SHIELD, Cap etc too.
Comments from author:
Well thank you very much! I'm very happy you like what I'm doing with this. I love Spider-Man and Buffy, and combing the two in any way, shape, or form, is just awesomely fun. And reading that other folks out there in the web actually like it? Well that makes it all the more worthwhile.

As far as the First on the show goes, try not to be too hard on the writers . They had crap like budget constraints and worrying about if an actor was available. I have the luxury of free imagination and not having to pay anybody! Woo!

And you're right. There should have been more consequences regarding Spike. Maybe not as far as I've taken it, but there definitely should've been some. Buffy was pretty wacked for trusting Spike as much she did, considering his trigger and what not. I also found it somewhat out of character for her to treat the Scoobies as she did. The only way I can think to rationalize it, stems from her conversation with that vamp psych major she dusted in "Conversations With Dead People". Buffy has that superiority complex, and she feels, deep down, that Spike's her equal in ways the others aren't. I think that, coupled with her strong feelings for the guy, was why she relied on him as much.

Again, thank you very much for your wonderful review!
Review By [TweedWizz] • Date [12 Nov 08] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Twelve" from (Past Donor)lucidity
Review:
Good job so far on the story - looking forward to more!

'lucidity
Comments from author:
Thank you very much. And I'm looking forward to hearing more from you as I post more chapters!
Review By [(Past Donor)lucidity] • Date [5 Apr 08] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Twelve" from Dragonelf
Review:
::Feeds the plot bunny::
Comments from author:
Is... Is that good? It sounds like it's good. So thank you very much! And even if it isn't, I still appreciate your review!
Review By [Dragonelf] • Date [28 Mar 08] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Twelve" from (Current Donor)Shieldage
Review:
Huh, same message as Joyce. Weird, but maybe they know something's up...

Cool, and the scene with Xander - interesting hint of things to come :)
Comments from author:
They might at that. And definitely keep an eye on Xander. He is most assuredly no longer fray adjacent.
Review By [(Current Donor)Shieldage] • Date [28 Mar 08] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Twelve" from arkeus
Review:
ahah, the first playing game, uh?

good work.
Comments from author:
Thank you. It's funny though. May was able to touch Peter. Weird. I'm smirking evilly right now by the way. Thanks again for leaving me another wonderful review! I'm really looking forwards to reading what you have to say about what's coming next!
Review By [arkeus] • Date [28 Mar 08] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Eleven" from arkeus
Review:
argh...i had forgotten that you had vampified Xander.

Bad you!
Comments from author:
Sorry.
Review By [arkeus] • Date [18 Oct 07] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Eleven" from DevJannz
Review:
Great chapter. I love how well you wrote everybody especially Anya. She was right on. ;)

Good work.
Comments from author:
Thanks. That Anya. She's a pistol, and surprisingly difficult to write believable dialog for.
Review By [DevJannz] • Date [17 Oct 07] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Eleven" from GaboonViper
Review:
very nice!

I'm not sure if I reviewed this story before, but you're really doing a good job with the characters. I loved the interactions between Peter and Buffy, and I always love a well-written Anya.

I thought the start of the story was a little stiff, but I guess you can't really expect otherwise from the characters under those circumstances. But now I'm really looking forward to more.

So shoo! Stop being flattered by reviews and write!:)
Comments from author:
I'm so glad you found Anya to be well written. The main reason this chapter took so long was because I was having such a hard time putting words into her mouth. It's very gratifying to see that at least one other person thought I did well.

Thanks a lot for the awesome review, and I will absolutely get out another chapter.

Just as soon as my ego decreases to a manageable size, that is.
Review By [GaboonViper] • Date [17 Oct 07] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Ten" from arkeus
Review:
This is one hell of a ride. Poor xander :/
Comments from author:
It's not Xander you've got to be worried about. At least not right now. Pity everyone else once Buffy realizes her sister is missing. Not to mention how Willow would react.
Review By [arkeus] • Date [21 Jul 07] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Two" from arkeus
Review:
Nice, though i don't udnerstand, as in the marvel_verse, the slayer would be quite weak.... What's her use?
I so want super!willow it isn't funny :p
Comments from author:
Buffy is very strong. Unfortunately, Peter Parker is stronger. The Slayer was created to fight supernatural forces, and is powered accordingly. What the Shadowmen couldn't take into account, was the evolution of mankind, from homo-sapiens to homo-superior, and to unlicensed genetic mutations. Those things have the potential to be stronger than Buffy.

As for the Slayer's purpose, only supernatural beings can truly understand and battle supernatural beings. Unless others, like the original Scoobies for example, are lead, or instructed, by a supernatural being. Otherwise, we'd have Initiative scale disasters all over the place.

And don't worry about Willow. Things are happening.
Review By [arkeus] • Date [21 Jul 07] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Ten" from metatwisted
Review:
Fantastic When I made the challenge I never was expecting the author to write it this well or in this detail! Keep up the good work!
Comments from author:
Wow man, thanks for the serious compliments. I hope I can continue to live up to your expectations. The fun's definitely about to begin.
Review By [metatwisted] • Date [15 Jul 07] • Rating [10 out of 10]
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