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Review of chapter "Chapter One" from Elleria
Review:
Love this. Sequel please?
Review By [Elleria] • Date [14 Jun 09] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from Izabela
Review:
... lol ... lol ... lol ...I can't breathe [rolling on floor]
Review By [Izabela] • Date [2 Jul 08] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from MavenAlysse
Review:
LOL ROTFL!!!!!
Oh, oh dear. That, that was terrific!
And, yes, only Xander could try to get out of the supernatural business only to end up right back into it. 'Course, the Scoobies didn't deal too much with ghosts so this would be a new experience for him.
I hope you write some more - the reactions (from both sides) would be priceless!

MavenAlysse
Review By [MavenAlysse] • Date [26 Jun 08] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from APS
Review:
Great story,
keep up the good work.
Review By [APS] • Date [4 Jan 08] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from (Past Donor)lucidity
Review:
great fic - hoping there is a sequel somewhere-

thanks for writing,
lucidity
Review By [(Past Donor)lucidity] • Date [16 Dec 07] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from schulyr
Review:
great fic, i only wish it was longer - maybe a sequel with their lives in ny, maybe some s.l.a.s.h. ?
Review By [schulyr] • Date [4 Feb 07] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from JustAteDirt
Review:
Oh, that was awesome! I sure hope you write more in that universe!
Review By [JustAteDirt] • Date [3 Feb 07] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from LNR
Review:
This was excellent, and I'd really love to see more.... Please?
Review By [LNR] • Date [3 Feb 07] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from Dragonhulk
Review:
Okay constructive review time.

First, it's always better to show than tell if you're doing more than a ficlet. Showing a gradual decline of appreciation is better than having every character accuse Xander of being worthless.

My second point ties into the first, character changes. If you want to change a characters personality it is always better to start out with the baseline personality, then put the characters through trials and experiences that would change their would view. What changes am I specifically referring to in your story? Here's a list:

1) Buffy, Willow, and Giles considering Xander worthless and trying to manipulate his life post S3 after he proved how useful he could be when he came up with the plan to take out the Mayor.

2) Buffy, Willow, and Giles wanting to stake Spike while Xander doesn't. To me this seems like a complete role reversal, because in the show Xander was the one who didn't trust Spike but the others said to leave him alone as long as the chip was working.

3) Xander and Spike being friends. Need some more explanation than male bonding on this one.

4) Spike not being upset that people still consider him a threat. Spike was really depressed until he learned that he could hurt demons because no one thought he was a threat.

Like I said, I'm not attacking the changes themselves, I'm pointing out that in any future story you write you should explain how changes like this came about. Stories that do this are much better in my opinion because it feels less like an author slapped a well known name on an original character and more like the logical evolution of a known character given the situations they have been placed in.

Finally you never had Xander mention they were going to New York before Spike asked why they were going to New York, and you should never have "talk""talk." These were probably just some editing errors and are easy enough to fix though.

All in all not bad for your first fic. Not great, but not bad either.
Review By [Dragonhulk] • Date [3 Feb 07] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from Sky
Review:
LOL! Real funny! Can't wait to read more!!
Review By [Sky] • Date [3 Feb 07] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from (Current Donor)drdeth
Review:
Very funny I hope you'll continue this story, I can't wait for the Ghostbusters to meet Spike.
Review By [(Current Donor)drdeth] • Date [3 Feb 07] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from (Recent Donor)MissingAuthor
Review:
I really liked it. Hope you decide to continue it.

Wispr
Review By [(Recent Donor)MissingAuthor] • Date [3 Feb 07] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from WingL
Review:
Funny!! Love this story. Maybe a drabble or follow-up with them working?
Review By [WingL] • Date [3 Feb 07] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from Bumpkin
Review:
Heh, heh... okay the pranks were great and then the ending - priceless! You going to continue this at all? The reactions of the Sunnydalians? the meet and greet with the Ghostbusters and the X and S show? Could be fun is all I'm thinking...

keep penning,
Marns
~pobody's Nerfect
Review By [Bumpkin] • Date [3 Feb 07] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from (Current Donor)SusanAnthony
Review:
I liked this! I loved when Spike and Xander blew up the Sunnydale sign though I wish we'd seen Willow and Buffy's reactions. That stuff in the foundation was just evil. I'd like to see more of this story.
Review By [(Current Donor)SusanAnthony] • Date [2 Feb 07] • Not Rated
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