Great fic, brilliant idea and way to bring Ben into the Winchester family, please continue with it.

Sorry, but this is a one-shot and complete. Glad you liked it though and thank you for taking the time to review.

Really great, so interesting I think it was a truly creative way to save Ben and bring "Dean" into the the Winchester family.
Rory:)

Thank you! I am rather proud of how this particular story turned out.

I'd forgotten how much I loved this little ficlet. You have done a great job with mood and characterization.

Thank you! Ben needed someone who could be a stable influence. Hopefully this time around he doesn't murder people to offer their teeth up to the Blue Lady.

Hopefully you have a continuation in mind for this story.

I can imagine the changes to Poco Loco due to the Winchester influence.

Hope to read it soon.

Dude, if you ever considered taking this further, I would so be there. :D

very nice. Continue this please.

I am glad you saved Ben. I think you did it in a plausible way too. Nice job. :)

I've never really watch Dark Angel, but since you wrote this I'm going to give it a try :)

Hmm, so Ben escaped the compound when he was a child - in your verse? That is interesting. And John picked him up - and I'm assuming kept him.

Very neat. Is there going to be any more to this verse?

Again, your descriptions were just wonderful.

And John! Oh you had John!!

That was marvelous. You left me feeling warmed and full of hope. Thank you.

Oh Ava my sweetie~
I simply loved this. It's like a huge sigh of relief, really. From the network airing of Pollo Loco, I was moved by the tragedy of Ben--one of the saddest victims of Manticore's machinations and a total lack of parental guidance, imho. I'm so glad you've reconciled that for me in this story.

As always, your imagery was mind-blowing. Standouts were:

"His heart pulsed as the sound of gunfire and men swarmed his senses, nostrils flaring he shoved the card back into the waistline of his underwear. Welcomed the slight irritation of its placement before he pushed away from the tree and leapt back into the night."

This was so fantastic! I never would have thought of the irritation being a welcome thing. You amaze me with your cleverness sometimes. Really. You so do.

"Ben’s eyes widened, the pupils forming twin black holes in the center of a delicately boned face and he pressed his back into the rough bark."

With one sentence, I saw him and felt what it was to be him, both senses seemlessly drawing me into the story in different ways. All I can say is... whoa.

"Ben’s lips thinned, eyes darting over his large frame and his shoulders rolled back, weight distributing evenly on the balls of his feet as the man moved toward him. Hazel eyes watched him warily a frown pulling the man’s dark brows down as he stepped forward."

I thought this was the start of something really remarkable, too. Loved the way the two soldiers sized each other up in this section of the story.

As for criticism, all I can come up with is hat it was over far too soon.

Thanks so much for posting this.

Big hugs! sita:)

Excellent way of building on the fact that Jensen Ackles played both Ben (and his clone/twin Alec) and Dean Winchester. Plus, this alternate history would give Ben/Dean a slightly healthier focus for his obsession with the supernatural! Excellent work.

Strangely enough, when reading the description for this story, the reference to the Blue Lady reminded me of a recent episode of ER. It took me quite a while to place the reference with Dark Angel, and even longer for me to connect Jensen Ackles with the poor little boy that turns into a psychopath - as opposed to his quirky twin, Alec. Nonetheless, I liked this little AU - an alternate way for Dean to join up with the Winchesters, in a world vastly different from the one that canon places them in. Nicely done.

Sorry I misread it, but I still loved the story

OMG!
(btw you listed this under Ava centered, i don't know if that was on purpose)