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Review of chapter "Babylon part 2" from tracysgate
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Are you still updating this? I would love to see how its going!
Review By [tracysgate] • Date [7 Sep 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Babylon part 2" from JonnWolfe
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It is so sad that there are a lot of good stories that seem to simply stop. :(

Well written; good ideas; wish there was more.
Review By [JonnWolfe] • Date [24 May 12] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Babylon part 2" from Zyanadryn
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i really hope one day u decide to finish this story off!!!!
Review By [Zyanadryn] • Date [18 May 12] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Prophecy" from maxthehobbit
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I wish there was a rule where people who don't speak English as their native language would have to get someone to proof-read their stories. It is very confusing and annoying to have 20 or so mistakes in spelling, typos etc. in every chapter.
You might want look up the meanings for no-now-know, they are not interchangeable. Also wander and wonder, also knell and kneel.
Obviously you will never finish this story, I mean three years since an update, for all we know you're dead.
I like Dawn/Stargate stories, but this one doesn't characterize Dawn very good.
Review By [maxthehobbit] • Date [2 Dec 11] • Rating [3 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Babylon part 2" from Vickzie
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Wicked story! Nero is a badass villian at the mo, hope you update more soon
Review By [Vickzie] • Date [19 Nov 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Prophecy" from mellusene
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I love this story so far! I just had to stop for a second when I saw who you cast as 'Nero.' Richard Armitage! YUMMY!! If you haven't already you need to watch the BBC production 'North and South' He's in that, and despite the name this show is based in England and has nothing to do with the American Civil War. He has some awesome scenes where his eyes are so intense they are like lasers through the TV, and it's so hot! Okay, back to reading!
Review By [mellusene] • Date [12 Oct 11] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Babylon part 2" from tracysgate
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you have me totally hooked.... please please please tell me theres more where this came from.... you havent even gotten to the juicy bits with daniel and dawn and there are far too few stories for this ship. please post more soon.
Review By [tracysgate] • Date [14 Feb 11] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Babylon part 2" from Zyanadryn
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NOOOO!!!!!!!!!!

You have to finish this story!

I have to know what happens!!
Review By [Zyanadryn] • Date [29 Jul 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Babylon part 2" from nemogbr
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Here's another vote for you updating. Hope your muse comes back for a visit.

Thanks,
Obi
Review By [nemogbr] • Date [30 Sep 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Babylon part 2" from ArinnaBlack
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I really, really love this story. I hope you'll consider updating again.
Review By [ArinnaBlack] • Date [17 Jul 09] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Babylon part 2" from rhiowen
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I've been looking for a good dawn based Stargate crossover and this one is great! It would be even better if you updated :) pretty please with a cherry on top?
Review By [rhiowen] • Date [4 Mar 09] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Babylon part 2" from MarcusSLazarus
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I’ll give you this; the idea is VERY interesting.
The concept of Dawn/the Key being created by the Ancients is certainly an interesting one, and your reasoning about how she went from the Stargate reality to the ‘Buffy’ one makes a certain kind of sense.
And as for her ‘role’ in the Ancient/Ori war…
While I’m still uncertain about what she can do for the Ancients’ side, I can definitely see why the Ori would want HER as the ‘mother’ of the Orici; if the Orici inherits even SOME of her abilities to control energy, she’d most likely be significantly more powerful than she was in the original continuity.
And as for making JACK her father…
I’m not exactly wild about Dawn having Riley (Even if it’s only an alternate Riley) as her brother- I really did NOT like that guy- but having Jack as her father certainly looks interesting so far; I look forward to seeing how it develops on a long-term basis once she returns to Earth.
Unfortunately, there’s just one problem; your story’s chronology- along with a couple of plot details- is a bit confusing at times.
I mean, plot-wise I get that Dawn LANDED in Celestis after jumping into the portal and was subsequently sent to this galaxy by the apparent intervention of Oma Desala and her ‘group’ of like-minded Ascended, but I’m still a bit uncertain about how Oma was able to do that without having the Others come down on her like a ton of bricks for interfering.
On a chronological angle, you seem to jump from Dawn trying to escape from Apophis’s forces while Teal’c’s still his first prime to having her arrive on the Nox homeworld shortly before Teal’c guides SG-1 there rather rapidly; if you’d created the impression of more time passing it would have been more effective.
And don’t even get me STARTED on ‘Ten Years of Waiting’; putting aside the fact that it could only have been EIGHT years at the most- assuming Dawn escaped from Apophis while Sha’re/Amaunet was still pregnant with Shifu-, I still don’t get WHY you had to include the timeline change to make Mitchell a member of SG-1 earlier when you could have just had the original three-man team discover that chamber shortly before they decided to go their separate ways at the beginning of Season Nine.
Still, chronological details aside, the plot DEFINITELY looks interesting so far; keep it up!
Review By [MarcusSLazarus] • Date [13 Nov 08] • Rating [7 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Babylon part 2" from Bunney
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glad your back can't wait to see how it works out !!!

Later and Love
Bunney
Review By [Bunney] • Date [31 Aug 08] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Babylon part 2" from Stranger
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And the curtain falls on a not-quite-a-kiss-but-close-enough-for-now. Very nice, but you might want to watch your past and present tense, I noticed they did a little bit of crossing over in this chapter. Other than that, go hard!
Review By [Stranger] • Date [28 Aug 08] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Babylon part 2" from RevDorothyL
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Glad you're continuing (and that you were able to enjoy some time -- even 'computer-free' time! -- with your grandparents).
Review By [RevDorothyL] • Date [15 Aug 08] • Not Rated
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