Review of chapter "Blush and chuckle" from Kiwikatipo
Put up a disclaimer.
Okay constructive criticism it's too short. Buffy should not say it's funny, that's for us the reader to think. You could get several more language misunderstanding jokes out of Buffy and Elrond.
Look up an American to British slang explanation page for ideas http://www.peak.org/
Hope this helps. Because your story was a nice little piece otherwise.
Review By [Kiwikatipo
] • Date [28 Feb 07] • Not Rated