Review of chapter "Epilogue: Universe Three" from Listener
I really enjoyed this story. By putting limits on what Veronica was and wasn't able to do, you removed a lot of the "change for change's sake" that many "drop a character into the Buffyverse" stories do. I also enjoyed your little insertions, such as "out for a walk... bitch". I think you definitely have the character voices down pat, and I love how important you made Backup to everything that went on.
I do think at times that you may have gone TOO big with the story -- bringing in all of Veronica's baggage, letting the "who raped Veronica Mars" angle just die out like that, trying to work all of Veronica's first-season story angles into everything... and then, the ending, with the final reckoning. I'm kind of curious if you started to realize the episode rundown was getting tiring to read (and probably write), or it was planned that way all along to stop after the lack of "The Gift".
Overall, as I said, I found this to be a good piece, nice and long (TWSS, right?) and, most importantly, COMPLETED. I think the final chapter (after we got to Universe Three) was done quite nicely, and I'm certain that Veronica is either going to (a) make things even better or (b) overthink it so much that she makes it worse -- which, of course, plays right into The Adversary's hands, doesn't it?
And, on an unrelated note... your story "Perfect World" was the primary inspiration for this one, which I've been posting for a few weeks now: http://tthf.me/5lDu
Review By [Listener
] • Date [7 Jun 12] • Rating [8 out of 10]