Okay so I just noticed that you made Lilah his boss in this and damn if wasn't a kick in the teeth for her when he got promoted. Plus the demon kept calling Lindsay pissant! *giggle* Now that is a beautiful thing.
"Lindsey clasped his hands in front of him on the shiny desk surface creating a smudge from the sweat off of his palms. He could not, no, make that would not allow the demon to pick up on his nervous state." Those two lines just hooked me for the second part. Both prefect in detail and prefect in character. I'm not sure how but that seemed like such a Lindsay thought and the imagery. *applauds*
Oh and one other little request. Would it be possible for you to make an icon out of the yellow-eyed demon in your manip? 'Cause he's equal parts nifty and creepy in it. *puppy eyes*
Comments from author:
MS Word didn't like pissant. I looked it up on my dictionary widget to make sure I was spelling it right. Stupid Word spellchecker.
I thought that Lindsey would be all "look at my new, shiny office" but I had to take him down just a little bit with that smudge.
Well all I can say is that I'm sad Lindsey didn't confess to wanting to off that Yellow-Eyed Demon! Haha.
Seriously, great fic. You did a great job portraying Lindsey, giving him a background and making him seem real, laying the ground work for why he would be willing to do anything he can to be better, to be more successful, to prove his Papa wrong.
And as I mentioned to you when I first read this I really want to kill Lindsey for being responsible for Jessica's death. Evil freakin' Lindsey. But you can't help but love him, unfortunately.
Review love is review love though, right? Plus I think that this deserves reviews all over the net!
Comments from author:
That copy/paste feature is just too tempting, isn't it?
Glad that I got Lindsey in a light that people thought was accurate. I actually didn't watch Angel the Series that much and don't really know his character from the shows as much as I do from other fanfic (mostly Jinni's). I actually stole a bit of his background from wikipedia. ;-)
I needed some way for Lindsey to appease the demon, so Jessica just had to go. Poor girl. Nothing personal though. :-)
Review of chapter "Clause and Effect" from Kiwikatipo
Review:
What a splendid story. I loved your lawyer speak. Most enjoyable short story.
Comments from author:
My lawyer speak? NOOOOO! I never wanted to have anything to do with law.... ;-)
Must have come from all the client contracts I have to write at work for my website clients when I lay out the development scope of work and costs. You have to be wordy on those to cover everything.
Thanks for the review and glad you enjoyed... *low grumble* even my lawyer speak *low grumble*!
;-)
Review By [Kiwikatipo] • Date [10 Mar 07] • Not Rated
Lindsey is such an evil basterd. I really wish he hadn't died. Great story. Really enjoyed it, and there need to be more of these fics.
Comments from author:
Glad you enjoyed it and yes Lindsey is evil. Well, make that ambitious. But sometimes ambition leads to evilness which leads to the dark side, or something like that.
I'm part of Team Hellfire in the weekly challenges at Slaying the Supernatural. More evilness will come.