Interesting idea. Has a lot of potential. However I get annoyed when I reach a new section - using words as a demarcation line between section is confusing; I'm just wondering why it suddenly says "ConnorAngel" instead use ----- or *-*-*- or ~~~~~ or :::::: or whatever else you find aesthaetically pleasing.
I really like this so far, i like how Connor is having to deal with many ascepts of himself, and the way The Destroyer part of him is brought into it makes me think that if Anita did go up against Connor she would loose. Big time. LOL! I really would like to see Dean, Nina and Sam come into this at some point and we can see their thoughts on Connor, Dean's would be very funny and insightful. Please update soon, it would be a shame not to continue this story.
Review By [TouchoftheWind] • Date [1 Sep 08] • Rating [10 out of 10]
interesting concept, but it's WAY off base plot wise when it comes to Anita. A little advice- let the story explain what's going on instead of going the easy way out and explaining it all away in an author's note...and as for Richard- he can always transfer to a different school, ya know.
Comments from author:
Thanks for the advice. Yeah i realized that after i posted the author's note. If you're willing could you beta for me? It would help me a lot.
Review By [Christy] • Date [29 Apr 07] • Rating [3 out of 10]
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