This is not a complete story, I'm not sure its even a finished scene, but it could be the first chapter to a good read, if you write more and tell us a few things.
One, who is Meg? Two, what happens to Xander next. Three, what are the names of the children of Meg Harris?
Review By [Rune] • Date [31 Mar 11] • Rating [8 out of 10]
What happened? Did Xander get away? Or did he get a little somethin' somethin' from the feisty Meg? Come on! Dirty inquiring minds want to know. ;)
I loved your characterization of Harmony. She's always such good comic relief and poor Xander got tricked by a succubus. I'm sure while it was happening he felt really bad about.
Go Team:Hellfire! We so rock.
Comments from author:
We do rock, don't we? :-)
I'm not sure if I have any more on this one. That's how my mind ended it. I guess I have a thing for that lady or the tiger story. Does Xander get away? Does Buffy and Willow save him? Do they die? Does Xander have hot bondage sex with Meg while they wait for the others to arrive? Hmmm...
Glad you liked Harmony. I've never used her before and even though it was a short little part I was nervous about doing it.
What!?!? No reviews yet? I'm pretty sure I reviewed this on LJ but let me just add this: You never EVER want to be corned by a bunch of old ladies. Ever. It's a shame that Xander didn't even get a good time out of the deal...well hopefully the succubus at least let him get a little something.
Comments from author:
No corning in this fic. ;-)
At least one non-Team Hellfire person has reviewed. I think the little old slot ladies scared them all away.
Thanks! Don't know if there will be a sequel since I just wrote it with that as the intended ending. If another prompt for the weekly challenge this was for prompts me, I'll do it.
:-)
Review By [Elleria] • Date [11 Apr 07] • Rating [10 out of 10]
So I'm just going to copy the message I left you on LJ...because well I'm not all that creative. But see, extra words here.
****** Great job. I love the summary. It lets the reader know exactly what they are in for, and it's like an inside joke for all the Buffy fans. Because poor Xander never did have any luck with women did he?
Great use of multiple baddies with in the Supernatural/Buffy verses. I was thrilled to see that on his little cruise Xander encountered many problems. And double yay for the use of Meg. I can't seem to find her voice, but I just love reading about her.
Any chance of a sequel to let us know whether Xander is able to be rescued or if he um...winds up being used to make a call.
I'm just sad to see that Xander didn't get **corned** anywhere! *wink*
Comments from author:
Shameless review copying is okay in my book.
There was no corning in this fic. :-)
Hmmm... sequel wise we'll have to wait and see if a weekly challenge fits the bill.