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Review of chapter "Chapter One" from Amai
Review:
Interesting concept. I don't really see how the Smallville cross was really utilized. Apart from Martha and the farm comment, there didn't seem to be anything that distinguished Clark from any other guy. On a technical note, your dialoge when she gets her voice back, is staggered so the discription (with the character name in it) comes on the same line with the last spoken words, rather than with the words that character says, which is a little confusing.

“Hey, you talked!” Buffy smiled up at him.

“That’s handy.” Clark looked at her, slight confusion written on his face.

“What is?”

instead of the more traditional

“Hey, you talked!”

Buffy smiled up at him. “That’s handy.”

Clark looked at her, slight confusion written on his face. “What is?”

(or even restructured - “What is?” Clark asked, looking at her with slight confusion written on his face)

That said, it was a cute light story, and I liked Buffy yelling up at Dawn (presumably about the homework she couldn't mention before) after the sweeter moment. It was a very Buffyish thing to do.
Review By [Amai] • Date [13 Jul 08] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Capter 3" from Harpie
Review:
Awe, I loved it! I loved how you made Buffy & Clark dating. ♥ Great job!
Review By [Harpie] • Date [14 Jun 08] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Capter 3" from spring
Review:
^_^ I love this wonderful fic!
Review By [spring] • Date [22 Nov 07] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Capter 3" from KnightOwl
Review:
That was a cute story! I like that Clark's kiss brought her voice back.
Review By [KnightOwl] • Date [20 Apr 07] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Capter 3" from (Past Donor)FireDragon
Review:
LOL how sweet. That was a delightfull little story. very cute.
Review By [(Past Donor)FireDragon] • Date [19 Apr 07] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from TGirl
Review:
LOL i love it. its so cute. update soon
Review By [TGirl] • Date [17 Apr 07] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from BlameyFomorrii
Review:
Pretty cool. Dawn is such a brat, thought.

It will be interesting to see how this story pans out.
Review By [BlameyFomorrii] • Date [16 Apr 07] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from (Past Donor)Methos
Review:
ohhh.... buffy singing the little mermaid and on a date with someone from smallville? clark?

definitely want to see more of this... if just to answer the question of who sang Sebastians part in "under the sea"... Xander? Giles? either of them attempting a jamacan accent could just be hysterical :)

can't wait for more of this one.

M
Comments from author:
Giles and Xander are in England trying to rebuild the Watcher's Council. If i forgot to mention, this is post season 7. The someone from Smallville would most asuredly be Clark.
Review By [(Past Donor)Methos] • Date [15 Apr 07] • Rating [10 out of 10]
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