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Review of chapter "Epilogue" from Elleria
Review:
Love this.
Review By [Elleria] • Date [25 Jun 10] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Two" from Vassago
Review:
Without the emotional, psychological, and physical abuse Xander would be a completely different person than he was in canon.

Really, despite my own dislike of it, you can't just go around changing the background of characters without also changing who and what they are later in life.
Review By [Vassago] • Date [5 May 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Three" from Vassago
Review:
I'm not getting why anyone would automatically be able to tell he wasn't among the living anymore.

Did I miss something? Because it feels like you left out that he's supposedly dead.
Review By [Vassago] • Date [5 May 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Epilogue" from Obsidian
Review:
Good story. I like it, thanks.
Comments from author:
Thank you very much for saying so. Surprising to get a review after all this time. Thanks!
Review By [Obsidian] • Date [17 Aug 08] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Three" from Intermundia
Review:
Haha! Not running in to one of the Scoobies would have been impossible and Xander just set himsef up for running in to Spike. I'm actually looking forward to it.

Nice with the talking to the demon and the shocked attendant.
Comments from author:
I kind of had fun with this story...especially with Spike. Some people didn't like the talk with the demon, but its nice to hear that someone did. Thank you very much.
Review By [Intermundia] • Date [9 Dec 07] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from Intermundia
Review:
Only a small note for this one. Why would Xander hit the send button when answering his phone?
Good start.
Comments from author:
I was confused for a second and then checked your profile. I don't know what your cell phones are like in Sweden, but at least mine (and all of the ones I've had prior/destroyed) the button to hit to answer a call or dial a number is labled send.
Review By [Intermundia] • Date [9 Dec 07] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Epilogue" from Ansku
Review:
Lovely interlude :)
Comments from author:
Thank you very much!
Review By [Ansku] • Date [10 Oct 07] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Epilogue" from Bobboky
Review:
cool
Comments from author:
=)
Review By [Bobboky] • Date [28 Aug 07] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Epilogue" from NaiveGhost
Review:
Very good. I like getting the background information.
I would have been nice to read in order with the others (I got so excited when I found this story I just kinda skipped this one until now), maybe you should rename it NLtZ 1.1 ?

;-)

Keep writing!
Comments from author:
I'm glad to hear that you like it. I wrote this one after NLTZ 2 to shut up a noisy plot bunny that was making itself known. Anyway, thanks for the encouragement and support. I appreciate it.
Review By [NaiveGhost] • Date [20 Aug 07] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Epilogue" from Yojo
Review:
Very nice progression plot-wise, and superb job on dialogue. You have really improved in that matter, but I did notice a few times that you slipped into first person and then immediately into third person when dealing with a character's thoughts. You need to be consistent on this matter: Either use first person in single quotes (ex: 'I think that Giles has a good point' ) or stick to traditional third person (ex: Xander considered Giles' words and found himself agreeing with them wholeheartedly ). You have a great deal of talent, but you need to work on details sometimes. While it is very possible and honestly quite easy to write a story with first person thoughts, often you can show a greater understanding of a character's motivations to the reader through third person (not always, but often).

Overall, you have done very well. Keep up the good work and original storyline.
Comments from author:
Yeah, its an issue with me. I think I was (if I understand where you were talking about) was trying to add on to the dialogue with the person's thoughts to expand upon it or let the audience know what they were really thinking. I hope that makes sense. I will have to pay attention to it in the future. Thank you for the constructive critique. I appreciate it.
Review By [Yojo] • Date [31 Jul 07] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Epilogue" from APS
Review:
My thought about the fic as a whole.

Great story,
keep up the good work.
Comments from author:
Thank you!
Review By [APS] • Date [18 Jun 07] • Rating [7 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Epilogue" from mithrilandtj
Review:
Good story!
I noticed the chapter title was Epilogue but this is still listed as unfinshed.
Is it complete or isn't it?
Comments from author:
oops! Thanks for catching that. I totally forgot to change whether or not the story was finished. My bad!

Thank you very much for reading and reviewing. It is appreciated!
Review By [mithrilandtj] • Date [8 Jun 07] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Seven" from Ame
Review:
Nice scene with nutso i mean Glory... I wonder how much different the encounters with the Intiative and Adam and Glory herself where without Xander there...
If you get stuck for other things to write you may try a flashback scene..
i unno..
Comments from author:
Like I said with TAO, I could have been a bit more random with Glory's ramblings and dialogue, but hey, it worked and I am glad that you thought it was nice. You are right, things would have been different without Xander. I could do a flashback or two, but alas, I am a pathetic Buffy fan and I only have the first two episodes on DVD and the first 3 or 4 seasons are on tape and burried in a tote somewhere in my garage. It would be hard for me to accurately reference a specific scene...but there could be ways around it....damn it! Another plot bunny! Thanks...*grumbles*

Anyhoo, seriously here, thanks for reading and reviewing. I do appreciate it. Take care!
Review By [Ame] • Date [4 Jun 07] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Seven" from TAO
Review:
Okay...I didn't see this coming, but bringing Glory in for a brief cameo appearance made a lot of sense. I particularly like how you wrote...completely in character and amusing (as well as badass!scary). And I do agree...the Talking Heads probably should be demanding restitution from Alex for destroying their song :-D


Anyway, it's good to see that Alex is getting his mum outta' town, but why do I get the feeling you got something really ugly for us around the corner before this fic ends?
Comments from author:
I wasn't planning on bringing Glory into the story, it never made its way into my notebook, but the idea popped into my head and I went with it. I could have been a bit more random and bizzare rambling with Glory, but it seemed to work. As for the Talking Heads...i was listening to Psycho Killer when I wrote that. I am constantly listening to music (my co-workers threaten to take away my Ipod) and I will throw in stuff that I am currently into if it fits in with the story.

Yep, they're getting the hell out of Dodge. But as for something massively ugly, probably not. I am saving that for NLTZ 3. That will be ugly as a fat man in a Speedo (or at least I hope so). Take care and thanks as always for reading and reviewing!
Review By [TAO] • Date [4 Jun 07] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Seven" from RafMereC
Review:
Fantastic

Raf
Comments from author:
Thank you very much!
Review By [RafMereC] • Date [4 Jun 07] • Not Rated
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