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The White Knight and the Devil's Rider

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Review of chapter "Conversations and Explanations, pt 2" from TheKnightofFaerie
Review:
I'm liking this one. My only real complaint is it's not updating very fast, if at all anymore. The idea that Xander is unknowingly a Power is interesting. Does that tie into his 'White Knight' and 'One who Sees' titles gained later in the series?
Review By [TheKnightofFaerie] • Date [18 Aug 12] • Rating [7 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Conversations and Explanations, pt 2" from Silver
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I think I read the first chapter or two a very long time ago... and just now came across this again. I very much like the way you portrayed Ripper! Giles in this fic. Love Xan's line about the Indian making up for the trouble with Ethan. Also seems as if Giles & Ripper are really protective of Willow - as he calls her "daughter tree". Unsure what this Call is that Mephi , Zar and Ripper are concerned about - unless this has to do with the Mayor trying to ascend? or does this story take place prior to that? Also, if it turns out to be slash, so what? As one of the other reviewers said, there are plenty of het stories out there for those who only like those pairings. Hey you don't even have to write a full on slash sex scene if you don't want to; sometimes the set up and implication are enough. It makes for an interesting "family" - Johnny/Zar, Xander, Willow, and Ripper/Giles. I hope you find the inspiration to update this soonest! It's great! Just, please don't make Xan into a Ghost Rider. I think there are more interesting possibilites with him staying the same and Zar/Johnny's attraction to him. Keep up the good work. * feeds the plot bunnies chocolate* Oh, by the way, a little something to help with writer's block: * gives author a sledgehammer... and some C-4*
Comments from author:
Thank you very much for reviewing. I'm glad you like most of where I was going with it. To be truthful, I have lost all notes and ideas with this and my other one. I have a vague idea for a plot but I am very stuck. My inspiration for writing comes and goes and its hard to tell what it will pop in my head for. It has also been years since I have started this and both my style and my personality have matured so much. It is difficult to continue. every once in a while i do become inspired and will sit down and add to this one (sometimes one sentence sometimes an entire chapter.
Unfortunately, it is safe to say I will not be updating soon.

...Though can I use the sledgehammer and C-4 for another fic I'm writing?
Review By [Silver] • Date [19 Jul 12] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Conversations and Explanations, pt 2" from Faery
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*sighs happily and rolls around on the story with a smile* I have missed this pretty story. I really have. I hope you can figure things out in regards to where it heads. :3
Review By [Faery] • Date [19 Feb 12] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Conversations and Explanations, pt 2" from ianquest
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Interesting. Good to see more of this.

One thing I'd like to point out is that, according to the movie (and in line with mythology), the devil's name was 'Mephistopheles' (pronounced meff-ih-stoff-eh-lees), not 'Mephistoles'.

Otherwise, an interesting and unusual approach. I look forward to seeing new chapters as you add them!

If the story veers to slash (not surprising, since that was the original artwork inspiration), then so be it - don't let people try to dictate the direction of your story based on their own prejudices & bigotry. If they only want to read het, there's plenty of it out there!

Keep up the good work!
Comments from author:
Thank you very much for the lovely review and words of encouragement. I spelled Mephi's name that way because that was the way I could find. I've been using it trough the entire story so I'll stick with it for now.
Again I will say that I'm just now getting back into writing after a two year dry spell and I have several projects I'm working it. It will be a while before i can get another chapter of this written. However, I look forward to reading your reviews in the future.
Review By [ianquest] • Date [30 Jan 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Conversations and Explanations, pt 2" from firedrakegirl
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First off, I love this story. Secondly, if you still need help figuring out where to go, let me know. I can come up with ideas.
Comments from author:
I do. I started this story with only a picture and just ran with it at the time. Now, I have forgotten where I was going and have had a lot of holes pointed out. Any ideas would be welcome- even if I don't use them.
Review By [firedrakegirl] • Date [28 Jan 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Conversations and Explanations, pt 2" from LadyFoxFire
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How about why Ripper hasn't gone Ghost Rider before? And why Johnny felt that Buffy wasn't an innocent aside the fact she was a Slayer. Wonder if there are any demons who think they can take out a Ghost Rider
Comments from author:
The question about Ripper is a very good one. I have added it to my list of plot holes and will try to answer it in the coming chapters. I hadn't even thought of Zar's judgement of Buffy..... hmmm, maybe because she has a demon in her already?....
As for demon who think they can- I'm sure there are. The way I see it is that demons themselves have a ranking system- 'devils' being the highest ranked with various other levels below them. This will be another thing I will flesh out and work on explaining in the story.
Thanks for reviewing and pointing out important holes for me!
Review By [LadyFoxFire] • Date [28 Jan 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Conversations and Explanations, pt 2" from michaelangelo
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I can detect a definite climb in the story quality. To be honest I was iffy with the first few chapters and worried I was getting obvious slash undertones. Despite that I persevered and was pleasantly surprised with chapter six and seven. Giles as a Ghost rider doesn't ring true to me as he would have changed way before now with the amount of evil he has had to deal with IE: Janna and Angelus, the Master etc. Keep improving and I'll send you cookies, toodles.
Comments from author:
The first half of this story was written back in 2007. I was just starting my undergraduate then, still at home. Now I live a state away and have completed my undergraduate. I took a big step back from writing for a few years and I feel it has improved. However, I hate rewriting what I've already written so I refuse to go back and write the whole thing again. It's like pulling teeth for me.
That being said- thank you for sticking with this story and preserving up that point. I don't know what I was thinking then, but after rereading the story too- it doesn't sit well with me either. I want to keep the idea because it is unique but I do realize I need to explain some of the particulars.
As to the slash- I keep going back and forth. Part of me wants to make it slash but I don't think I have the ability to. I think I'll keep it at implied and let people take it where they will. But again not yet decided.
If you have any ideas or further comments, please drop me a line. I enjoy getting input from my readers.
Review By [michaelangelo] • Date [27 Jan 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Conversations and Explanations, pt 2" from brokenangel
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Eyghon more powerful than Mephistoles.....No...sorry...that would be BS. Nice try but I think I'll pass on this story.
Comments from author:
I don't recall ever saying that Eyghon was more powerful. I'm using the idea that the term 'devil' is a class of demon which holds a specific level of power. Mephistoles and Eyghon are supposed to be about equal power- just two different entities.
Review By [brokenangel] • Date [27 Jan 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Conversations and Explanations, pt 2" from kayron
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I've never read the comics. What I know about Johnny Blaze aka Ghost Rider is based on the movie. Johnny refused to work for Mephistopholese. He chose to fight evil. Johnny said that he came to the hellmouth because he felt like he was being drawn toward power, toward Xander. What is this power? Why didn't Ripper sense it? Now that Mephistopheles is aware of Xander, will he be rying to take control of Xander? Xar seemed a bit...protective(?) of Xander. What does this mean? The Ghost Rider(s) seem to have issues with Buffy and Spike. I'm wondering what that means.
Comments from author:
I don't know much about the comics either- f its a comic reference I got it from a wiki somewhere. Though the questions you pose are all very good ones that need to be answered. I will be considering them while brainstorming. Thank you for putting them to words to remind me!
Review By [kayron] • Date [27 Jan 12] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Conversations and Explanations, pt 2" from Harry
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So, the G-Man made a deal with a devi as well. It makes this tale more interesting. Now, PLEASE continue it!
Review By [Harry] • Date [27 Jan 12] • Rating [6 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Conversations and Explanations, pt 2" from Harry
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So, the G-Man made a deal with a devi as well. It makes this tale more interesting. Now, PLEASE continue it!
Comments from author:
I don't plan on letting it slide. It may be a while for an update because I'm just now getting back into the swing of writing and its not steady. I also don't remember where I was originally going with this story. If you've got any ideas, I'm open to suggestions!
Review By [Harry] • Date [27 Jan 12] • Rating [6 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Conversations and Explanations, pt 1" from Harry
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OH DEAR! If this demon is loose in Sunndyale, this means trouble! No wonder the Rider has come to Sunnydale. This is going to mean BIG trouble!
Comments from author:
WOW! I take it you really like this story, huh? I've gotten really backlogged in my stories and life but knowing that there are people who still read these inspire me. I'm going to try to get some more of this out but it may be a while in coming.
Review By [Harry] • Date [24 Aug 11] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Late Night Dusting" from Harry
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I think the Demons of Sunnydale are going to be hitting the road if they know that the Rider is in town! They DO NOT want to mess with him!
Review By [Harry] • Date [24 Aug 11] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Let's Ride" from Harry
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Sounds like the Scooby Gang is getting along well with the Ghost Rider and the Ripper! Now, lets see what trouble these people are going to get into tonight.
Review By [Harry] • Date [24 Aug 11] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "What the Hell Are You?" from Harry
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So, Giles KNOWS the Demon that forms the Ghost Rider! It makes sense if he was able to call his own form of the Ghost Rider's ride. Now, lets see what these three (Giles, Xander and Blaze) have to do here in Sunnydale.
Review By [Harry] • Date [24 Aug 11] • Rating [10 out of 10]
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