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Review of chapter "Chapter One" from Kateydidnt
Review:
This really is a fantastic story. I wish you would write a continuation.
Review By [Kateydidnt] • Date [28 Apr 11] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from nemogbr
Review:
Good start. Wonder how the other demons would reacy if they find an Old One serving the Key?

Hope the muse jumpstarts a sequel or perhaps a series?
Review By [nemogbr] • Date [10 Sep 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from lyc
Review:
Wow, that was all kind of mind blowing. But in a completely good way, don't worry.

It would've been interesting to see more, but this was fantastic.
Review By [lyc] • Date [15 Feb 09] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from Kirallie
Review:
Poor Dean!!! Why did you end it there? Can't they do anything to make Sam un-evil?
Comments from author:
So I ended the story there because I thought it was a great ending. Dawn finished shopping Dean was sort of safe everything worked out. No one else agreed with me. I suppose that I could try to save Sam but I wanted a world that contained vary little hope. I am working on a part two but it might be a while. Anyway I hope you enjoyed the story and thank you for reviewing. Saren
Review By [Kirallie] • Date [11 Jul 08] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from Melba
Review:
This was a great beginning to what could be an even better story. It has a lot of potential. I hope you will continue with it.
Comments from author:
Glad that you enjoyed it. I wrote this as a one shot, sadly no one but me thought the story seemed finished at this point. I wrote a couple sequels but deleted them as they didn't seem to work with the structure of the original story. so maybe some day I will add to it. maybe. anyway thanks for reading.
Saren
Review By [Melba] • Date [24 May 08] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from Drix
Review:
Please add a sequal, I love the premise.
Comments from author:
Hay thanks for the review. and thanks for reading I am sort of working on a sequel but keep having problems. Saren
Review By [Drix] • Date [4 Jul 07] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from queenevil
Review:
Sequel! I want to see how he readjusts to everything!
Comments from author:
I started writing a sequel and deleted it three time I just can’t get it to feel right; so no promises. Thank for reviewing. Saren
Review By [queenevil] • Date [26 Jun 07] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from PATM
Review:
Although the grammar and spelling weren't the strongest I followed narrative
as a stream of consciousness style of story telling and I quite enjoyed it.
I'm looking forward to more. Thank god for spell check I couldn't live without it.
Comments from author:
Unfortunately the spell check on my computer has weird words programmed into to but yeah thank God for spell check. I am very happy that you enjoyed the story I want to write a sequel but I just can’t get the mood right.
Review By [PATM] • Date [22 May 07] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from zili
Review:
that was really good

sequel? *holds out a cookie*
Comments from author:
I’m happy that you liked it. About the idea of a sequel I’m thinking about it but I don’t know what would happen in a follow up story and it would take a long time (if ever) to finish so maybe. I don’t know at any rate glad you like it and thanks for reading. Saren
Review By [zili] • Date [22 May 07] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from SilverSand
Review:
Interesting. I would read more if you wrote it.

The only thing that jumps out at me as being really off is Blue talking to dawn like she's a Queen. Miss "I ruled over this dimension (or parts of it)", would never treat anyone as her superior.

Other than that, it was an interesting and different read.
Comments from author:
Yes she is a little out of character but this is how I rationalized it. Dawn is the Key and has the power to rip wholes in reality so Blue might respect that power. Plus what I should have made clearer in the story, they are both at work for the council playing specific roles and consequently if anything more was written about this pairing their relationship would be more of one involving friendship. This however would still be out of character. Sorry it bothered you. Saren
Review By [SilverSand] • Date [22 May 07] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from WhiteWolf
Review:
The way you've wrote it, I'm expecting a sequel. oh, by the way. Cool story.
Comments from author:
Happy you liked it but I didn’t plan on a sequel. And thanks for reviewing. Saren
Review By [WhiteWolf] • Date [22 May 07] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from Procrastinata
Review:
Hm, I like the plot, but the fic could use some polishing; there are some things that don't flow that well, like when you repeat what people say in a different POV.
Comments from author:
I didn’t like the repeating either but I wanted to show the same thing happening from different points of view and the repeating is what I came up with. I probably will not write in this style again because it is hard to stay focused on the story line. Saren
Review By [Procrastinata] • Date [22 May 07] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from nicowa
Review:
I second both ideas; you need to get this beta'd and it would be cool if you wrote more. I feel like the story if only starting!
Comments from author:
I need a good beta as you can see selling and grammar, not my strong point so if you know of someone who wants to that would be great. But on to the story I have no sequel planned. I will think about it but no promises that anything will ever be written, the story felt done to me. I know that there are lots of lose ends but it just felt finished. Saren
Review By [nicowa] • Date [22 May 07] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from trouble
Review:
I'm sooo with everybody else! You just can't leave it hanging like that:what happens next? Does Sam come knocking when he finds out Dean is no longer a slave?Does Dean devote himself to Dawn's protection since she saved him? Hmmm? Happy Writing!
Comments from author:
If I had any idea what happened next I would write it but I really don’t know. Sam coming knocking might be fun but I think people would end up dead if that happened. Dean and Dawn becoming friends also has potential but I think any friendship that had would be strained. If I think of a good sequel I’ll let you know. Saren
Review By [trouble] • Date [22 May 07] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from (Past Donor)Mari
Review:
This is a completely new idea to me; I've not read anything quite like it before. However, if you do decide to continue it, you might consider a beta. Sometimes it's hard to spot mistakes like "rote" instead of "wrote", or missed periods.
Comments from author:
I so need a good beta. I have been looking (in my spare time) but the one beta I had suddenly started working extra hours and so shockingly decided he wanted to sleep instead of check my grammar so I badly need a new one. Spelling and grammar are probably my worst talent. Saren
Review By [(Past Donor)Mari] • Date [22 May 07] • Not Rated
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