I found the last few chapters confusing, and I was already confused when I reached the end of chapter 16. The conclusion of your story was not a climax, it feels as if there were several more chapters of material that just haven't been posted. I did set up a tracking on this story, so if the lost chapters are found and posted, I will come to read them.
Review By [purrfus] • Date [9 Nov 06] • Rating [7 out of 10]
Sometimes even when something is clear in your mind its difficult to translate that into the written word in all of its internal complexity. The Ardath / Joyce situation explanation is a little awkward. Basic story is enjoyable, but even after reading a few of the chapters several times some of the internal logic seems to be escaping me. Oh well, maybe it will be clearer when I read the rest.
Review By [purrfus] • Date [31 Oct 06] • Rating [7 out of 10]
Have to stop for now. Joyce/Buffy/Dawn related to AB too? Ok where did the blonde in this group come from - even if they are using the bottle for a lighter shade? Back to read the rest later.
Review By [purrfus] • Date [27 Oct 06] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Red Willow, Red Sands" from purrfus
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Just found this story. I laughed when Alex mentioned wondering about the blonde hair. So, did Sheila marry into a Jewish family and convert or was Evy's mom an Egyptian Jew?
Review By [purrfus] • Date [27 Oct 06] • Rating [8 out of 10]
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