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Review of chapter "Epilogue" from Elleria
Love this.
Review By [Elleria] • Date [25 Jun 10] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 8" from Kethric
In hindsight, I can see how it appears that my first review was simply telling you how horrible you're doing, and that wasn't my intention. My intention is simply to point out what happens to be my biggest pet peeve in writing, fics or otherwise. You're doing a pretty good job with the series. I wouldn't have read as far, otherwise. You may be well served to find a decent beta reader who'll notice that kind of thing. You, as the author, will most likely be too close to the story to notice some of the less obvious errors, like lose instead of loose, because your mind will see what you expect to see, instead of what's actually written. Another option is to proofread the story backwards, word by word. That technique supposedly forces you to evaluate each word individually. I've tried it, and it doesn't make much difference for me. And yes, I've been on the other side of reviews, not on this site, and nothing irritated me more than having it pointed out to me that I used the wrong word (not because it was pointed out, but because I failed to catch in my proofreading).
Comments from author:
I didn't take your review as an opportunity to roast me over an open fire like a marshmellow. You were just expressing your opinion and you offered constructive feedback, which I appreciate.

Your points were valid, though I don't think my errors were that big of a deal. It's just something that I will look out for in the future, though I am probably am not going to go back and make corrections in the stories that I have completed (work and life in general gives me limited free time, so I have to prioritize). I do have someone that checks my stuff, though she hasn't checked this series for me. I know all about the benefits of having a beta. Your suggestions on how to proofread are good, but they aren't helpful to me (also, I use to teach high school English - and currently teach math - so I am aware of techniques for proofing).

Overall, there are errors. However, as long as they aren't massive or interfer with the storytelling itself, I'll keep plugging away and try to improve upon my writing abilities.

Thanks once again for the review. It is appreciated. Cheers!
Review By [Kethric] • Date [20 Aug 08] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 4" from Kethric
My biggest complaint? As ever, (as you'll see if you read some of my other reviews) is the use of the incorrect word. You've frequently used esperanza, when I'm fairly certain you're actually referring to Esperanto. Esperanza is Spanish for, if I recall correctly, hope. Esperanto is an essentially stillborn language, one that was supposed to combine elements of several different languages into a kind of pidgin everything so it's fairly universal. I remember it being mentioned a lot when I was in elementary school, but it died out pretty quickly due to lack of support. There are also several instances of loose where lose should be used, and a few others that I can't think of off hand right now. I noted that you celebrated the use of spellcheck in one of your chapters; spellcheck doesn't notice the difference between "apparition" (when you were referring to the portals for Glory) and whatever word you intended, or who's and whose, or lose, loose, or loss.

That said, this is a decent series. Frankly, I feel about Buffy, Willow and Xander pretty much the same way you do. I'm not sure where the whole "Hellmouth inteferes with magical ability thing" came from, but, in my opinion, it's a nice bit of AU for your story, if it's not canon that I just didn't notice before. Xander as a vampire? Interesting concept. You've drawn it up nicely. I'm not terribly familiar with the Masquerade, but from what little I know, you've drawn it up very nicely, indeed.
Comments from author:
Okay, first off, ouch! But yes, you are right and unfortunately spell check doesn't catch everything. Also, I know I can't spell to save my life (as my students will tell you while laughing themselves sick). I do my best and if I screw up...well, I guess I can't be perfect all the time. I do try though. In my defense, I am a whole word reader and I have problems sounding out words (reading out loud is torture for me), therefore my spelling is a weak area for me. I am doing better than I use to do.

I am glad that you like the series *needs to get the lead out and work on #4*. The show short-changed Xander and Buffy and Willow annoyed me by the end of the show's run. Also, my knowledge of Kindred and the White Wolf is limited. I know the show and have a general idea about the game. I played it years ago and have benefited from a kind person who sent me a VtM for Dummies file, looking at some of the books, and a few internet searches.

I hope, despite the flaws you found, that you enjoyed the story-telling. Thank you very much for reading and reviewing. It is appreciated. Have a wonderful and blessed day. Cheers!
Review By [Kethric] • Date [19 Aug 08] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Epilogue" from Obsidian
Very Good story, Thanks.

But one thing I would like to know.
WHY do you call the slayers 'witch hunters'?
Comments from author:
Thank you once again!
Review By [Obsidian] • Date [19 Aug 08] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Epilogue" from MistieMossflower
Another excellent story. ^_^
Review By [MistieMossflower] • Date [1 Mar 08] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Epilogue" from slightlyeccentric
This is a really great series. I really hope you continue this soon. It's also way unfair to leave us on a cliffhanger like that! I cant wait for the next part.
Comments from author:
I have a 4th one in mind and it is basically outlined, but I need to work things out and still work on my SG1 story. Thanks for reading and reviewing. It is appreciated!
Review By [slightlyeccentric] • Date [20 Dec 07] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Epilogue" from Kirallie
Wow! Excellent series!!! Though it is sad that Willow, Buffy and Giles can't accept what Alex has become. Is Alex there to kill Giles? At least the girls accepted after they were dead I suppose. Hope there's more to the series!!!!
Comments from author:
I am glad to hear that you liked it. Willow and Buffy have accepted it - besides they have better things to do than get upset over Alex's life choices. As for Giles - know what happened. What do you think happened *evil grin*? Might I recommend TAO's NLTZ: Hunted? Its a part of this universe and is hysterically funny. I have another story in the works, but as for when it will be ready, I don't know. I need to focus on my other stories for a bit. In the mean time, know that there is another story coming, so heads up.

Thanks for reading and reviewing. I do appreciate it. Take care!
Review By [Kirallie] • Date [12 Oct 07] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Epilogue" from Ansku
Awesome series :) I'm looking forward to the next part! Meanwhile I'll just go and read that story by TAO you recommended, thanks for the hint :) Where do you host your other writing, btw? I'd like to see if there's anything else I'd enjoy - that SG-1 story for example sounded promising :)
Comments from author:
Thank you very much for reading my stuff. I do appreciate it. I am sort of slowly putting the next story together, but I won't say when it will be ready. Take care!
Review By [Ansku] • Date [11 Oct 07] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Epilogue" from APS
My thought about the fic as a whole.

Great story,
keep up the good work.

PS. where is the SG1 story?
Comments from author:
Thank you for the review and continuing to read my stuff. I will be back to the NLTZ universe, but I need a break. I hope to "hear" from you again. Take care and again thank you!
Review By [APS] • Date [6 Oct 07] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Epilogue" from michaelangelo
Err uh, in my defense, all I will say is ohmygodihavebeenplayingtoomuchbloodlines!. *Embarrassed foot shuffle*. I meant Luna, but the vacant lot that is my noggin inserted LaCroix from Vampire the Masquerade Bloodlines.
Comments from author:
Hey! I was thinking you were thinking Forever Knight. Don't worry =) My head is pretty much emptied out at 3:30 every day - no rational thoughts for me outside of work. *hugs*
Review By [michaelangelo] • Date [27 Sep 07] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Epilogue" from Dragonelf
::Feeds the NLTZ plot bunny with high energy plot bunny food::

I hope that the plot bunnies inspires you to continue this series SOON.

Comments from author:
Great! Like I don't have enough problems with them already. You had to go and feed them. Thanks!

Seriously, thank you for the read and review. I will return to the series, but I need a break. I've been screwing around with this universe for about a year or longer I think. I need to recharge and work out some ideas before I want to put anything out there. Take care!
Review By [Dragonelf] • Date [27 Sep 07] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Epilogue" from michaelangelo
Hmm well ok, my theory on whats happening?. Well, you would ASSUME that Alex was going to kill Giles because of all the cloak and dagger stuff, and he didn't want to kick the door down and leave evidence, plus I wouldn't put it past Giles to leave an executive order 'just in case' he turned up dead ... besides that none of the girls would forgive him if he ever did it.

Now my theory, which could be right or wrong, is that Alex went there to make Giles an offer, maybe an offer he couldn't refuse. to Join them, or get a memory wipe.

The reason I think this is because Giles now knows about the Kindred, and LaCroix would be constantly worried about the Slayer threat.
Comments from author:
First off...LaCroix??? Wrong genre. It would be Luna and with him, the heirarchy within the Masquerade that would be worried about the Slayer threat.

As for your theories....they are good theories. I will say no to Giles joining the ranks of the Kindred. That won't happen. As for the girls' reactions...heh.

Anways, thanks for the review!
Review By [michaelangelo] • Date [27 Sep 07] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Epilogue" from MamaLadyWolf
No A Cliffhanger. * cries * mean wonderful lady writer Now I have to wait or bang my head until you write more of this. Please More I beg of thee. Please. I will cry and bother you until you save me from the torment of the cliffhanger. Whats going to happen to G-man? I love the man Xander has become please leave me not hanging for too long. I really have had fun reading this series. I would love to read more. Thanks for posting it and have fun.
Comments from author:
Hahahaha! Yes, a cliffhanger!!! Now you have to ask yourself, did he kill him, did he wipe his memory, did he have a nice chat with him. It will bug you to no end...I would like to resolve the question, but how and when is another story. Hahahaha! God I amuse myself!

Thank you for reading and reviewing. I do appreciate it. You take care of yourself and I will catch you later!
Review By [MamaLadyWolf] • Date [26 Sep 07] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Epilogue" from NaiveGhost
Yeah! More! Thanks!

Awesome (and totally mean cliff-hanger!) as usual!!!!

Comments from author:
Yep - that's what I do =)

There will be more, but off in the near future - I need a break. But in the meantime, bug TAO to get his NLTZ story written and finished. I will catch you later and thank you as always for reading and reviewing. You can be assured that it is appreciated!
Review By [NaiveGhost] • Date [26 Sep 07] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Epilogue" from TAO
Oh come on!!! That was an evil way to end the story.

Then again, I shouldn't be one to talk. Overall...a cool story, but to be honest, I'm kind of glad you're taking some time off from NLTZ to focus on your other I can work on Hunted and not worry too much about trashing your continuity.

Personally, however, I would have liked to heard this little "conversation" with Giles.
Comments from author:
Yep - I'm evil. But in the meantime *taps fingers impatiently* there is always Hunted. Get on it!!!

As for the "conversation" between Alex and Giles - *does the Snoopy dance* - we'll talk.
Review By [TAO] • Date [26 Sep 07] • Not Rated
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