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Review of chapter "Never Climate, Only Weather" from BloodOfAReptile
Review:
I don't normally read slash, but took a chance on this story!

I really enjoyed chapters one and two - they were very well written and compelling. They also seemed very true, and made me want to read on.

However, chapter three kind of seemed to lose focus for me. The breaks in the story didn't make much sense. Was it two different time periods being depicted? I couldn't really tell. If it is, a slight edit to make this clear might help things.

Overall, it was really good!
Comments from author:
I'm glad you liked it, and pleased you took a chance and read outside of your comfort zone but sorry if chapter three was confusing - it was two different time periods. I was trying to compare and draw parallels between their relationship and how it ended the first time they hooked up and what was going on in the present.

I'll look over it again though, once I have finished my current stuff. Thanks for the constructive comments.
Review By [BloodOfAReptile] • Date [5 Jun 08] • Rating [8 out of 10]
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