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Review of chapter "Story Teller" from oldgirllost
Review:
This is a very good beginning to a story I wish you would finish it. You do need a beta however---

for example

it was too much to bare (bear)

bare is naked or uncovered
bear is carrying a burden

Yelling at me will get you no where (nowhere)

Savoir (is the french word for knowledge I think you want savior)

apperated (apparated)

spell check would have caught apparated and Savoir, but the others are that class of word that have different meanings with different spellings but sound the same.
Comments from author:
Heh. This is one of my not-so-favorite stories. Thanks for catching the errors. I might go back and fix it later, but that depends on if I go back to it or not. :) Thanks for the review!
Review By [oldgirllost] • Date [14 Jul 08] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Harry potter and the Watchers Council" from Lin
Review:
Please have a beta read over this story.

"He had tried to fallow"

Should be "follow"

There were more mistakes but copy and paste would be tedious.

Mistakes in the first chapter will often put people off a story and make them unlikely to read further.
If you can't find a beta, run the story through Microsoft word or read it out loud or into a recorder. It will make the mistakes easier to spot.
Keep writing and improving.
Comments from author:
fixed the follow. Sorry for the mistakes! I did put it through microsoft but apparently it didn't catch that one. Oh well, I'll look through it again, later to fix it up some more.
Review By [Lin] • Date [27 Sep 07] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "The Fallen Friend; Found Again" from neverwill
Review:
This was good, but I still can't figure out who Hydra was supposed to be (I'm assuming she either was, or is related to, a Scooby because she knew some of the inside information of the group). I discounted both Dawn and Buffy since the way they were described implied a 3rd person point of view. Anya would have been too old to be Hydra, and I'm assuming it wasn't Tara or Willow since the person "became a muggle" instead of a witch. After reading all three chapters, my impression is 1) Spike is no longer a vampire, 2) Hydra was his child (with who?) who went missing, and 3) either the other parent is a Malfoy, or Spike is a Malfoy.
Comments from author:
Well, I won't give anything away but there will be answers, eventually. ^_^
Review By [neverwill] • Date [26 Sep 07] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "The Fallen Friend; Found Again" from PrincessTai
Review:
Ha. See this is what happens when someone doesn't read the Disclaimer *Sheepish grin* Anyways. This chapter rocked. It was so VERY Spike and so Snape. Damn right they're surprised. What do people know but the face they are shown. Especially Hogwarts people. Love em but it's the truth.
Can't wait for more :-D
Comments from author:
thank you for reading my stories! I think I may work on this some more, later on. Hydra is a really fun character who some of my favorite RP characters are based off of.
Review By [PrincessTai] • Date [26 Sep 07] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "To Go, or Not to Go or Never Leave Me Behind" from PrincessTai
Review:
Awww! That was sooo good!
Great even *grins*
Is it Dawnie?
Comments from author:
Is what Dawnie? Cause' we already adressed who the friend was.
Review By [PrincessTai] • Date [26 Sep 07] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Story Teller" from PrincessTai
Review:
Broody Harry. :-D Hydra Malfoy huh?
Who. Buffy? I mean she knows a lot of brooders and she IS blonde
Comments from author:
XD Nope ain't the Bufster.
Review By [PrincessTai] • Date [26 Sep 07] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "To Go, or Not to Go or Never Leave Me Behind" from MichelleWinchester
Review:
You CAN NOT leave it like this!!!!!! You've got to keep going!!!!!!!
How did Hydra know about the Scoobies? And you soo need to do a chapter on when Harry tells them!
Review By [MichelleWinchester] • Date [4 Sep 07] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "To Go, or Not to Go or Never Leave Me Behind" from Rhyssia
Review:
I feel rather daft....but who's she supposed to be?
Comments from author:
read the first chapter, and you'll find out.
Review By [Rhyssia] • Date [23 Jul 07] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "To Go, or Not to Go or Never Leave Me Behind" from amusewithaview
Review:
*Whines* Aw, you won't continue this? COME ON!

Danke
Comments from author:
sorry, I have two other stories to work on.
Review By [amusewithaview] • Date [23 Jul 07] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Story Teller" from amusewithaview
Review:
*squawks indignantly*

If she KNOWS all of them where are they with the big honkin' rescue?! I like this, tis different and interesting, but will there be a sequel? They have to be found and / or rescued SOMETIME!

Danke
Comments from author:
believe me, the scoobie gang has looked and they haven't stopped. There might be a sequel, but I have other stories I have to work on too. If you'd like, you may write you're own story based on this, I even give you permission to use Hydra!
Review By [amusewithaview] • Date [9 Jul 07] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Story Teller" from CPTSkip
Review:
Very interesting, in a horrible way of course. Thanks for sharing your story.
Comments from author:
Thank you! I might turn this into a sires of drabbles, much like the story "Newt." I don't know though, we'll see.
Review By [CPTSkip] • Date [9 Jul 07] • Not Rated
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