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Review of chapter "Postscript/Appendix" from Omegaprime
Review:
Oh man, this story was totaly crazy wicked. You have repeatedly blown my mind with all the surprises in this part of the series from Xander-I-NEVER-Quit-The-Good-Fight actually quitting temperarily to The Mayor turning into freaking FRIEZA of all monsters/demons!!

Well, I hope the good Mayor is enjoying his stay in HFIL(Hell for us common people).

Did Willow just get turned into PolWillow/BelWillow?

Well it's off to #3 and see what changes are in store now the Initiative/NID have the Android parts that I think are going to a new and improved ADAM and the killer androids #16,17,18,19 and 20 that will be comming in soon.

If it wasn't too late I would voted you in for the CoH awards.

I must add that every chapter was a 10/10 and you positivly scare me that you have used elements from four universes and made them work.

Keep up the good work.
Comments from author:
I think I'll just keep Willow Willow, just like Durnik never became Beldurnik.

I'm glad you liked it. It helps to keep me motivated to write new stuff. That part was one of the hardest to write but in the end I'm glad with the way it came out. And it's good that you posted this review, because it reminds me that I forgot to post a new chapter yesterday.
Review By [Omegaprime] • Date [11 Apr 11] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Three" from Omegaprime
Review:
Yowza, that poor alternate world, it got the crap blown out of it.

Good job.

Wow, I am really liking this AU world of pure chaos and how it changes everyone and I'm only on the 2B story.

Keep up the good work on your later chapters of this crazy but uniqe story.
Review By [Omegaprime] • Date [7 Apr 11] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Postscript/Appendix" from LetsRandom
Review:
I really liked this story for the most part that you've crafted. Not sure how I feel with the whole setup to Faith leaving, I thought the Scooby treatment of Faith was a bit OOC. On the other hand, I enjoy the small comedic moments you intersperse throughout your story. All in all it was worth missing some sleep and quite enjoyable. Moving on!
Review By [LetsRandom] • Date [25 Nov 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Eight" from LetsRandom
Review:
I really really enjoyed this segment. I was going to leave one at the end of this, but I loved this chapter for Xander and the other Buffy so I thought I'd let you know.
Comments from author:
Thanks! I really appreciate it. It's one of my favorite parts as well and one I really enjoyed writing at the time.
Review By [LetsRandom] • Date [25 Nov 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Postscript/Appendix" from RafMereC
Review:
Another great story.
Raf.
Review By [RafMereC] • Date [16 Mar 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Postscript/Appendix" from MistofRainbows
Review:
Seems like some of the characters have more personality issues than they did in canon by far. Willow seems particularly off to the bitchy side. Buffy's sort of screwy, and Xander is ... well odd. But understandable. Mostly my complaint after reading through your series other than the last story is that your editor doesn't seem to understand that of isn't off and that to isn't too. I wouldn't normally point such things out except that it happened more than a few times. Over all despite some ooc moments that made me want to glare it's been an interesting story. Maybe not the world's most perfect cross logistics wise but you did a good job. I particularly liked how he changed what he was going to end up as based on the idea that he knew the old idea wasn't going to work.
Comments from author:
Thanks for your honest review. I didn't have a beta for my first two stories and sadly my beta had to leave me after chapter 12. Which makes it hard since English is not my native language. But I'm always open for a little grammar lesson. Or a new beta. (hint hint)

As for the characters behaving a little OOC, please understand I stopped watching BtVS episodes relatively early during the beginning of part 2B. I would like for them to do more of the Buffyspeak, but the average Buffy episode gets worked on by an small army of writers and I'm just poor little me. I didn't have much time to completely immerse myself any more and to be frank, the less you rely on watching episodes and using transcripts, the more freedom you get to stray away from the canon story. At least for me. The downside of course is that the characters start behaving a little less like in canon (or a lot less). But I think that is acceptable in a fanfic as you are trying to spin things differently anyway. As long as it doesn't become a bash fest. The characters develop differently from canon and should therefore start to behave a little different. Of course, they still get dumped a ton of hurt on them, in true Joss Whedian style, plus as they up the ante by becoming stronger, so should the other side.

Willow probably became a little too much bitchy, together with Buffy, but I needed a couple of characters to become bitchy on Faith. The overall execution wasn't much helped as I wrote each chapter and then published it. If I had written the whole story first before publishing I would probably have done things a little different. It wasn't helped that at times I had no clue as where to go. The alt.Buffy story was the water shed in particular. Up to there I had a pretty general idea, after that however.... The only thing I knew for sure from the start was that the Mayor was going to go Freeza instead of going snake on them. That was something I always kept in mind and hinted to from the start. And Willow was going to beat the Freeza out of him again. Something to make good on her for making her so bitchy. ;)

Anyway, on to new stuff! Be sure to check out the new story and let me know what you think of it. ;)
Review By [MistofRainbows] • Date [25 Aug 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Postscript/Appendix" from TheHeartist
Review:
Just badgering you again, when do we get the next part? I check every day (I'm not kidding either!) it's almost as anticipated as when the Z Fighters were waiting for the arrival of Vegeta and Nappa...
Comments from author:
I'm doing my best. I've suffered from a combination of writers block as to where to take the story and a very busy social life. Currently I'm active in no less then four different bands. Now the good thing is that my writers block has been resolved, the story outline has been worked out to my satisfaction and two of the seven chapters are now mostly finished. The bitch is now in finding the spare time to write.
Review By [TheHeartist] • Date [28 Apr 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Postscript/Appendix" from deusexsububi
Review:
if you were to update this series, anytime soon, youd have my divine gratitude and an a great beer waiting for you should you ever pass though eastern canada.

youve not written anything in many months. I hope things are well with you and yours. outstanding work!
Comments from author:
Thanks for your kind and encouraging words. A combination of writers block and extreme busy social life has kept me from writing. The busy social life remains but I think the writers block is gone. O'm excited to work again at this story.
Review By [deusexsububi] • Date [5 Apr 09] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Postscript/Appendix" from TheHeartist
Review:
Nice to see all the power levels up, fills in any blanks so to speak. You've just recieved two nominations from myself for best anime and best O.C, and I'm sure I'm not the only one. Keep it up, let's have the next story soon, I'm hooked!

EDIT: Apologies, apparently, the fic isn't eligable for best anime and instead comes under Best Multiple Crossovers. So you've now got a nomination for that instead!
Comments from author:
Thanks, thanks a lot. It's really inspiring to be nominated. Although so far TtH has only sent me a nomination message for best O.C. I'm not sure what happened to best anime.
Review By [TheHeartist] • Date [3 Jan 09] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Postscript/Appendix" from Ansku
Review:
Awesome, looking forward to the next story :)
Comments from author:
Me too. ;)
Review By [Ansku] • Date [17 Nov 08] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Postscript/Appendix" from Darklight
Review:
Nice ending, liked the power levels overview and Faith surpassing Buffy by a wide margine. So Wes killed the mayor in his human form, I thought Giles was teh one. No one els around would care what happend to the mayor even in his human form. looking forward to see who will point Faith toward Wes and him killing the mayor

So Magie got her hands on whats left of 13? looking forward to see what she can do with it.

Nice touch of getting Freezas hell dimension added to those that have access to the hellmouth and earth, by defeating the Mayor they got themself a even bigger enemy in the future. One that wasn't around last time.

First there was only an android Gero made that destroyed teh world and killed almost all of them. Now he hasn't even appeared yet and they made the Mayor more powerfull ascension, they defeated him but lost Faith for now. And got freezas Demon Grandad back into the game, getting access to universe and hellmouth and Maggie playing around with the remains of 13.

Keep the chapters coming.
Review By [Darklight] • Date [13 Sep 08] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Postscript/Appendix" from APS
Review:
My thought about the storie as a whole.

Great story,
keep up the good work.
Review By [APS] • Date [13 Sep 08] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 15" from TheHeartist
Review:
A killer finish, kudos as usual. Way to crank it up a notch for the finale, and tie everything up. Which leads me to my next question, the solution to the Angela problem: ensouling spell right?
Review By [TheHeartist] • Date [11 Sep 08] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 15" from Darklight
Review:
Great going, Giles is going to get himself and the rest in so much trouble. Even if Faith comes back to their side.

Killing the mayor in he's demon form is one thing, killing him when they turned him human and being defenseless that's something else.

Looking forward to see how Faith is going to find out and maybe wish him back with the dragonballs, or not.

keep teh parts coming,
Comments from author:
I don't know, Giles seems to have gotten away with killing Ben as well. I strongly suspect (that in the series) Buffy and the gang never asked because they didn't want to know.

Thanks for the review!
Review By [Darklight] • Date [9 Sep 08] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 14" from TheHeartist
Review:
You've played yet another blinder with this one! Finally getting some Piccolo in there is always a good thing, and I like #13's inclusion in the upcoming finale, nice way to tie that storyline off too. I could see Faith going off and becoming Piccolo's student after this, much like Giles when he mentored Willow following the end of Buffy Season Six. Overall, good stuff, can't wait for the finale :)

Btw, was the comment about Piccolo 'looking like a William' a nod towards James Marsters playing him in the upcoming Dragonball movie?

Edit: No, I have not changed it. Send me another, and I'll make sure I don't just clear out my junk mail box before I look next time.
Comments from author:
Having Piccolo mentoring Faith has been one of the few things I did have planned for a long, long time before I even got started. The William thing however is just coincidence, didn't even know about James Marsters playing anything in that upcoming movie. But now that I know it seems to good not too. Consider it a retroactive nod.

Did you change your email? I've been trying to contact you about doing some beta work a few times without success.
Review By [TheHeartist] • Date [5 Sep 08] • Rating [10 out of 10]
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