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Review of chapter "Sparing" from purrfus
Review:
I know this is marked completed, but it would be nice if you could find a few minutes to look at it again.

This really doesn't do the first chapter justice.
Comments from author:
hm...I might depends on how desperately bored I get!
Review By [purrfus] • Date [26 Sep 07] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "As He Runs; The Dragon Seeks Him" from purrfus
Review:
This is lots of fun to read. Looking forward to more.
Comments from author:
thanks!
Review By [purrfus] • Date [26 Sep 07] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "As He Runs; The Dragon Seeks Him" from PrincessTai
Review:
LMAO!
Oh that wicked cool :-D
Comments from author:
thank you!
Review By [PrincessTai] • Date [26 Sep 07] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "As He Runs; The Dragon Seeks Him" from KnightOwl
Review:
I thought the story was very well done. I really liked it. I'd be happy to see more written in this universe. I can imagine the kids having fun with the game as part of a class.
Comments from author:
thank you! I am very happy you liked! Yes, I thought so, too!
Review By [KnightOwl] • Date [10 Aug 07] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "As He Runs; The Dragon Seeks Him" from Lin
Review:
very amusing. Although you said it was a one shot...if you ever get the urge i would love to read the conversations about the lesson once they get back to the class room.

I really don't think we were allowed to "view" enough of the actual magical education that was going on at Hogwarts.
Comments from author:
well I took you're advice and added more, I hope you like it!
Review By [Lin] • Date [1 Aug 07] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "As He Runs; The Dragon Seeks Him" from spring
Review:
very funny please write more.
Comments from author:
for this story, there won't be anymore however I will write some others. Thanks for reviewing!
Review By [spring] • Date [30 Jul 07] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "As He Runs; The Dragon Seeks Him" from KiryD
Review:
I don't do paint ball (don't have the stamina) and THAT is an extra bonus. They don't really seem to do exercises to stay in shape. Granted students at Hogwarts aren't spending hours on end in front of the telly or video games but they do spend a lot of time doing homework!!

It could be worse - it could have been water balloons!
Comments from author:
Haha, yes well I had a lot of fun writing this- I did make some mistakes but they have been changed.

Anyway, thanks for reviewing.
Review By [KiryD] • Date [30 Jul 07] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "As He Runs; The Dragon Seeks Him" from RavenMorbisk
Review:
short but good. I liked it.
Comments from author:
thanks
Review By [RavenMorbisk] • Date [30 Jul 07] • Rating [7 out of 10]
Review of chapter "As He Runs; The Dragon Seeks Him" from (Current Donor)Hotpoint
Review:
Paintball is one word not two, yes I know it's a touch petty to point that out, but I'm a paintballer and it grated :-p

Oddly enough a paintball marker (they're not called guns) is a *far* more effective device ergonomically, and in rate of fire, than a wand. They're easier to aim than a stick, you don't need to say anything, and the decent ones can fire better than 10-15 rounds per *second*.

If you could put spells contained in .68 calibre spheres you could massacre half of Hogwarts with a good paintball marker ;-)
Comments from author:
There are a couple of things I need to go over in my story to make it actually work- again I published it at 12 after spending the whole day at eliches doing rides and screaming at the top of my lungs. I was tired, but wanted to get this story out.

anyway, thank you for reviewing. I'll make some changes soon.
Review By [(Current Donor)Hotpoint] • Date [30 Jul 07] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "As He Runs; The Dragon Seeks Him" from jupitersdaughter
Review:
Cool! Interesting teaching method
Comments from author:
I thought so too
Review By [jupitersdaughter] • Date [30 Jul 07] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "As He Runs; The Dragon Seeks Him" from ShayneT
Review:
It's a good idea. Wands and paintball probably have similar firing rates and ranges. This story could do with some expansion...maybe 30 more chapters. :)
Comments from author:
Well, I don't think so. As I am working on two other stories (one has yet to be published and the other is called Alone We Stand; Together We Live) it will be difficult to work on a third, however if you'd like you may use this to do a spin off. ^_^ I give you permission to do what ever you want with the story.
Review By [ShayneT] • Date [30 Jul 07] • Not Rated
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