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Review of chapter "Chapter Twelve." from maxthehobbit
Review:
Cthulhu - never heard of it, think I'll check it out, World of Warcraft is getting boring since you need like 9 other players to do the big things.

Good story lots of action/adventure and realistic since here was a death, most stories has everyone living in a big battle, or dying and getting brought back to life.

Thanks again for another entertaining story.
Comments from author:
Call of Cthulhu, an RPG base on the works of HP Lovecraft.

Most of the demon illustrations in Giles' demonology books were actually from CoC books! I use CoC quite often as they're a different type of monster to the usual run of the mill demon. CoC monster are often intelligent and have a plan!

Cheers,
D.
Review By [maxthehobbit] • Date [14 Dec 11] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Two." from Satori
Review:
farnham's freehold? and i thought Ringo was bad about the blatant references.

(I mean this in a good way. gratuitous amounts of reference and in-joke = good)
Comments from author:
Thanks, nice to know there's still some reading this.

Name thing: the truth is, I can think up plot lines 'til the cows come home...think of a name HAH! I'm stumped.

All the best,
DaveT.
Review By [Satori] • Date [27 Feb 08] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Eleven." from (Current Donor)MaxGSandeman
Review:
It was fitting that Buffy was with the fallen slayer, before she died. After all, Buffy was alone when she died.
When Buffy flat lined in the hospital, as the doctors were trying to remove the bullet from Warren's gun, was that her third death?
Comments from author:
I don't think she quite died that time, I think Darth Willow got there just in time!

glad you liked the storry.

All the best.
DaveT.
Review By [(Current Donor)MaxGSandeman] • Date [19 Aug 07] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Eight." from (Current Donor)MaxGSandeman
Review:
Another excellent two chapters. Sam seems to work well with Willow. Could she show up in future stories?
Jack seems a little disturbed about the girls slaughtering the water demons, with smiles on their faces. I can see his point. He just needs to spend more time with them. Of course, they would drive him up the wall.
Oh, do I see a little memory wipe coming up?

Edit. That second sentence doesn't make sense, so I fixed it.
Comments from author:
Glad you liked them, not gonna give anything away, only four more chapters to do!

I think Jack is just getting old...y'know his knee is probably playing up again and well he's just old!

All the best,
DaveT.
Review By [(Current Donor)MaxGSandeman] • Date [19 Aug 07] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Twelve." from Mcspender
Review:
Excellent end for your saga dude=)!.

I liked that Buffy was the one to deliver the final blow to the bad guys, kinda fitting, she's a god killer after all. And the different reactions to the objects of power of Willow and the Pervert Bros, it really showed of much Willow has grown wiser, and how easy is to fall into the darkness; good comment about power and responsibility.
It was cool to see that the SGC and Riley Unit got along, it was a good departure from many other fics where they put the supernatural and the military in conflict.

And the mystery about Ken's family it beginning to grow, and you got me thinking, is she related to the Corleone? 'Cause you denied her relation to the Soprano family.

It was Viv the one who died, poor girl. I remember that in the original version of your spartan fic, you mentioned that the slayers needed to start using body Armour to protect themselves in situations like this.
And I think you're gonna like this http://www.csoonline.com/read/080105/briefing_brief_style.html
and this http://www.mychildspack.com/Home_Page.html ; leather jackets & and bullet proof backpacks.

Once again congratulations for your fic.

See ya!!
Comments from author:
Thankyou for your review.

Getting reviews like this just make me try harder for the next story...where things get darker yet!

Thanks.

All the best,
DaveT.
Review By [Mcspender] • Date [18 Aug 07] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Twelve." from Cutiepie
Review:
An excellent ending to another great installment of the Seattle Slayers Saga. Thank you for writing it. And I'll join Buffy in telling Kennedy, "TMI! Too Much Information!" At least we didn't get a dissertation on her morning sickness, bladder strain, hemorrhoids or whatever else she might have come up with. =]


Oh, and Kiwikatipo, it was the intestines of a female cultist that Tina had just disemboweled that tripped her up, not her own.
Comments from author:
Cheers Cutiepie. Too much information indeed!

You wait to the story she actually gives birth! Full colour that one!

All the best,
DaveT.
Review By [Cutiepie] • Date [18 Aug 07] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Twelve." from (Recent Donor)Kiwikatipo
Review:
1)“All puffy and swollen,” Continued Kennedy, “And I used to have such nice elegant ankles too.” She paused in mid moan, “And you should see the size of my ass and thighs!” She exclaimed.

Buffy really hoped she would not.

Ha - funny.

2)“So, can you explain why so many of the girls have turned gay since they were chosen?” Buffy shook her head in puzzlement, “You know sometimes after a big fight it’s like musical beds at the Cleveland house!.”

Okay Dave, waiting for baited breath for your logical explanation.

No, it's still a crap theory(which even Kennedy admits)and does not explain things biologically and you put Faith with Xander. Bad, bad, bad man - Faith does not deserve Buffy's romantic cast offs.

3)And everyone lived happily ever after, well they saved the world, but you have set things up for next story and Kennedy's hopefully safe delivery of sprog.

A ripping adventure yarn - my challenge to you for the next story for writing improvement, is to double check your possessive apostrophes.

I enjoyed reading the Second Seattle Slayer Camp Out story, thank you for writing it.
Comments from author:
Had to think what Possessive thingys were but I see your point.

And yes it is a crap theory biologically, I'm thinking more Phycologically(I'm sure that's spelt wrong)Psyco? I think that's it. Anyway I'm thinking learnt gayness here. If you've only got one type of sexual partner you eventually go for it! Maybe Buffy isn't letting the Cleveland girls out so they can find boyfriends?

As for Faith and Xander together...sorry another idea I thought was good and got stuck with. It works out quite nicely for the next story. You're going to hate me for what I'm doing to Faith in that one! No she doesn't suddenly turn gay and shag Tru...that would be too weird...no hang on a mo!

All the best,
DaveT.
Review By [(Recent Donor)Kiwikatipo] • Date [17 Aug 07] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Eleven." from (Recent Donor)Kiwikatipo
Review:
1)No, look, hold on, in the previous chapter you said Tina's intestines tripped her up. Was that a typo?

shakes head

2)Everyone with a brain cell should be terrified of Willow.
Comments from author:
In a way...tween you and me I think I just got carried away a bit and didn't make it clear...bloodlust you know?

Dave.
Review By [(Recent Donor)Kiwikatipo] • Date [17 Aug 07] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Ten." from (Recent Donor)Kiwikatipo
Review:
"To herself she said, “I don’t know what it’ll do to me mind!”

My god, has Willow suddenly changed ethnicities?

"A sound like a cry of pleasure escaped the lips of the cultists who stood in ranks around the Altar."

Ugh, yuck, that's genuinely horrific and creepy.

"It would not do to lose her sword because she had been careless and trapped it in some mad mans head."

Amusing.

You killed Tina! That's cruel, but good you made me care enough about Tina to make it seem harsh.
Comments from author:
Maybe a bit of English ism there and I think there should have been a coma between me and mind. Mind used in the 'by the way' meaning.

CofC is horrific and creepy.

Descriptions of the sword fight was based on accounts from the Battle of Waterloo. You'd be amazed how many swords were lost in peoples heads or stuck between ribs! Actually hitting someone like that is bad form. Tina only got away with it due to her Slayer strength.

Dave.
Review By [(Recent Donor)Kiwikatipo] • Date [17 Aug 07] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Nine." from (Recent Donor)Kiwikatipo
Review:
"O’Neill spread the map on the table and was soon surrounded by various Witches, Colonels, Slayers, Bearbots, cats and little girls. They all studied the map closely, some with more comprehension than others, but each gave the problem in hand their full attention."

Highly amusing and gripping opening paragraph.

“You’d be amazed at what the old Watchers Council didn’t know about Slayers.” Explained Willow, “They never used to let them live long enough to find a lot of the stuff out."

That's an interesting and convincing point. What would a slayer be like if allowed to live to thirty, fifty or seventy?
Comments from author:
This has been my feeling all along. Buffy got stronger and more powerful over the seven years we saw her. Like you say what would have she been like later?

All the best,
DaveT.
Review By [(Recent Donor)Kiwikatipo] • Date [17 Aug 07] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Twelve." from (Recent Donor)Kiwikatipo
Review:
Enjoyed Sam explaining the positives and negatives of the cultists arrival.

"While a couple of Slayers dragged the policemen into the cabin and arranged them tastefully on the family room furniture where they would not get in the way."

Cracked me up.

I'm wondering if the body under the floorboards has more significance than it seems, especially moving it.
Comments from author:
Bit of a small scarlet fish that one.

DaveT.
Review By [(Recent Donor)Kiwikatipo] • Date [17 Aug 07] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Seven." from (Recent Donor)Kiwikatipo
Review:
"“More or less.” Replied Norm; “We still need to source some Handmaidens for the Great One.”

“Handmaidens?” Asked Mavis puzzled, “No one said anything about Handmaidens!”"

A-ha, and who will the handmaidens be I wonder?

"They don’t even have to be virgins"

Just as well because virgins are in short supply these days.

Nice family description scene between Kennedy Willow and Tara, but may I say Ma-Ken is a god awful nickname?
Comments from author:
Ma'Ken; Thought up on one of those days you really can't think of anything better...now I'm stuick with it.

All the best,
DaveT.
Review By [(Recent Donor)Kiwikatipo] • Date [17 Aug 07] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Twelve." from avidreader
Review:
Blood. Guts and Gore. (Not Al.) Another good one. The plot thickens as Ken's tummy gets bigger. I think the First Gentleman will have a case of the 'runs' if he ever gets to the bottom of it all.

Regards,

Avidreader.

PS. I think you'll find Yogi's nemesis was Ranger 'John' Smith. (Showing my age now...)
Comments from author:
I couldn't find any hard evidence one way or the other on Ranger Smith's first name. As I say 'I think'.

O-well never watched Yogi bear much!

Anyway thanks for reviewing.

All the best,
DaveT.
Review By [avidreader] • Date [17 Aug 07] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Twelve." from JoeDineen
Review:
One slayer down, they got off light compared to the average CoC party, but there there were more of them and they were slayers and so forth. I enjoyed this.
Review By [JoeDineen] • Date [17 Aug 07] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Twelve." from (Moderator)jrabbit
Review:
See, I had a much simpler solution that wouldn't have gotten any Slayers killed. Two of the girls should have wandered around the cult gathering posing as marketeers for a knife manufacturer, handing out free samples to all the priests. Each one would then stab the next highest priest in the back in order that they become the high priest at the time the ritual completes - it would be a bit like a human version of domino rally. All the slayers would have to do is kill the least high priest at the end! But your way works too :)
Comments from author:
Now that's a trick I never thought of! Darn!

Well better luck next time.

Thanks for reviewing,

All the best,
DaveT.
Review By [(Moderator)jrabbit] • Date [17 Aug 07] • Not Rated
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