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A Gaggle of Red Shirts

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Review of chapter "Chapter One" from (Current Donor)DreamSmith
Review:
Sorry, I wanted to like it, it sounded like a nifty idea, but it's only a collection of fragmentary, nonsensical scenes.
It's not a story in its current form, and even the bits that are here make little sense.
Review By [(Current Donor)DreamSmith] • Date [14 Aug 07] • Rating [2 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from ThunderGod
Review:
and the bad part...I was listening to Warp 11 as I read this....the redshirt song.....the redshirts are dieing......damn it..though I can see this being redone into a bigger story?:} LOL..each indivivdual redshirt....and their deaths....saving a Scoobie...damn..rapid plot bunny..only thing that saves me is I have writers block:}

ThunderGod
Review By [ThunderGod] • Date [14 Aug 07] • Rating [7 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from Bill
Review:
SWEET! Scotty could make them rich!
Review By [Bill] • Date [13 Aug 07] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from JoeDineen
Review:
This might be good or even funny if it was an actual story. It reads like some plot notes and not an actual fic. I know there is no need to rethread the halloween plot but there still needs to be a story and the action flow from scene. Some of the make no sense. What did the cat turn into, what kind of critter did the kid turn into? answering those tow questions could have made a good story, or telling it from the point of view of the mayors people that went as redshirts could have been interesting, no need to mention Willow, Xander, Buffy or Giles
Comments from author:
I'll work on it.

plot notes don't exist for me. The story came out as is. When i do use them, I wind up throwing them away because the story doesn't match them at all.

as for the cat... I've seen a Star Trek red shirt for a dog or cat out there. And was trying for a cats eye of this "Red soft cloth thing" it was put in.
Review By [JoeDineen] • Date [13 Aug 07] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from MerleCorey
Review:
I'll go with.... Huh?

Is part of the story missing? It looks like you took the idea, threw out a couple of disconnected, disjointed scenes, and declared it finished.
Comments from author:
a few of mine write like that.

plus I've been finding a lot of YAHF fics annoying lately, so I left out the parts that can be read in any other halloween fic.
Review By [MerleCorey] • Date [13 Aug 07] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from CPTSkip
Review:
Lol! Well, you made me laugh several times while reading. Well done.
Review By [CPTSkip] • Date [13 Aug 07] • Not Rated
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