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Review of chapter "Chapter One" from Dapsy
Review:
Hello there,

interesting story... hope you will continue it someday... :D
Review By [Dapsy] • Date [7 Feb 10] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from (Current Donor)DeepBlueJoy
Review:
This is worth finishing. So the tone changes. Let's see what you got! I think many of us would enjoy reading it.

The combo of Willow and Spike in a platonic pairing is not one I've seen explored much or at all, and I find I like their interaction. You've got his voice quite well. I'd love to see what else develops if you continue.

Blue
Comments from author:
Thanks I'll try and pluck up the courage in the not too distant future, maybe after just one more tweak.... :0)
Review By [(Current Donor)DeepBlueJoy] • Date [9 Oct 08] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from Mwhahahaha
Review:
I really hope you come back to this story...I'd really like to keep reading on...it's a great beginning!
Comments from author:
Thanks. There is more but never really finished it and the tone changes massively. Never was happy with it so never got round to posting.... maybe one day!
Review By [Mwhahahaha] • Date [28 Aug 08] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from Keshkreature
Review:
Wow, I love it! I'm really glad Willow's got some issues of the magical kind, and I love her interactions with everyone. Having Spike along is just double the fun =)
Comments from author:
Thanks.
There is more but the tone so different unsure whether to post. Plus the end evades me.....
Review By [Keshkreature] • Date [4 Jul 08] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from azulkan
Review:
This is a great story so far. I really hope you haven't decided to abandon it. More soon please.
Comments from author:
Got more but the tone really changed and not sure if it works. Plus have no idea how to finish it!
Review By [azulkan] • Date [4 Apr 08] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from Wormbait
Review:
This is good, everyone is perfectly in character and the plot is cool.

Hoping to see more soon and thanks for sharing.
Comments from author:
Thanks
Review By [Wormbait] • Date [27 Nov 07] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from chajalive
Review:
wow, such a long chapter, you must have written ages at this. Hope you feel like writing some more!
Chaja
Comments from author:
more to come but clearly needs some tweaking :o)
Review By [chajalive] • Date [1 Sep 07] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from RoiDanton
Review:
A few errors here and there, but I do like the fic.

Please continue.

Bye
Comments from author:
Thanks
Review By [RoiDanton] • Date [1 Sep 07] • Rating [7 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from (Recent Donor)MissingAuthor
Review:
This is really good, hope you continue it!

Wispr
Review By [(Recent Donor)MissingAuthor] • Date [31 Aug 07] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from pezgirl
Review:
i love Willow-Stargate fics!
great start, please update (:
Comments from author:
more to come I promise!
Review By [pezgirl] • Date [31 Aug 07] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from Bobboky
Review:
cool
Review By [Bobboky] • Date [31 Aug 07] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from MistofRainbows
Review:
Mhh some things were smoother than others. Willow and spike's relationship was weird. The whole binding aura's was off... There were a few other minor points that seemed strange as well.
Review By [MistofRainbows] • Date [31 Aug 07] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from mithrilandtj
Review:
I love it!

Have you posted this part before? It seems familiar.
Especially Willow binding her aura part.
Comments from author:
Posted some time ago on Heliopolis.....
Review By [mithrilandtj] • Date [31 Aug 07] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from (Moderator)JoeHundredaire
Review:
Couple of problems:

1. Your punctuation skills are balls. There are missing commas and question marks, although thankfully it doesn't get quite bad enough to make it unreadable. Close.
2. Stargate only rotates in one direction. If it locks one symbol and wants the one just before it, it needs to do a full rotation to bring that symbol around to lock the next.
3. The symbols look about as much like hieroglyphics as Norse runs or Japanese kana do. They're all based off of constellations, as made even more evident in Stargate Atlantis, where the Ancients stop stylizing the glyphs and they're just dots connected by lines.
4. The Rosetta stone was discovered in 1799 and translated in 1822-1824. The first publishing of an English translation was in 1858. Spike was turned by Drusilla in 1880.

That's about where I stopped reading.
Comments from author:
Ah maybe I shoulda made a note about dodgy history & grammar, too....
Poetic license man, poetic license :0)
Review By [(Moderator)JoeHundredaire] • Date [31 Aug 07] • Rating [3 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from VillageOrchid
Review:
Nice. Your first chapter was worth 4 or 5 chapter breaks. Thanks for sharing.
Comments from author:
Never know where to break things up, will consider this for further updates. Thanks
Review By [VillageOrchid] • Date [30 Aug 07] • Not Rated
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