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Review of chapter "5" from twlight
Grrrr your mean to stop this at this point! I wanted to see the way everyone reacted to Xander and Sabrina at the school! I also have to say that timeline wise this story should have been the first in the series so far that I have seen! I love this oh so extremely wonderful series so far even if you do stop the stories in a cliffhanger type way.
Comments from author:
Glad you enjoyed the story so far. ;-)

I'm trying to get the next chapter finished, but my muse isn't cooperating. ;-(
Review By [twlight] • Date [27 May 14] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "4" from djhardim
Xander, in turn, had discovered a silver-grey falchion, inscribed with what seemed to be constantly shifting runes along its length, from among the many and varied weapons that filled the Corley vault and had immediately claimed both that and a black, wide-bladed throwing knife that appeared to be linked to a silver ring holding an onyx, which he had come across in the course of his initial search.

Is this the kind that you were thinking of?
Comments from author:
It's similar to that one. I have an image of what I was describing, but I can't get it to post.
Review By [djhardim] • Date [9 Feb 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "2" from Difdi
An odd thought struck me while re-reading this series.

The U.N. has a very strange definition of what genocide is. It was obviously designed by a committee, and has odd definitions that make very little sense, but criminalize actions that can be taken for legitimate reasons...but being genocide under international law are flatly illegal, period.

For example, Al Capone is about as famous as organized crime figures get. His gang was rather heavy on Italian Catholics. By present-day U.N. standards, the U.S. government was guilty of genocide for the illegal persecution of Capone and his gang. Seriously. The U.N. definition of genocide makes no distinction or exemption for ethnic-based criminal gangs and almost any degree of harm to such a group is genocide. The cutoff point is at 1,000 people. Below that, it's not genocide even to kill 999 people. Above it, even a mass issuance of parking tickets is legally genocide, under the U.N. standard. The definition of an ethnic group is likewise so loose, you could trip over it by going after the fans of a sports team or rock band (as is apparently happening to Juggalos at the moment in the U.S.). Any group with a common identity meets the U.N. test.

So if Flagg was sending U.N. Peacekeepers after a specific ethnic group, either the U.N. definition of genocide was radically different, or he managed to spin things so the general assembly didn't realize he was doing it. A little sunshine on the matter might have brought him down. Something to think about.
Comments from author:
Since politics is more a matter of trading favors and I.O.U.s between the powerful, simply because one group is looking to exterminate another group would not make it a matter worthy of being addressed before such a distinguished and august body. (Note: Sarcasm mode has most definitely been turned ON for the past several minutes, but is now being turned OFF.)

Politicians do what they want, when they want, and only pay attention to the law when they want to screw someone else over.

I might be somewhat biased, but I truly believe that the current United Nations assembly is a complete and utter waste of the protoplasm used to create the bodies of those arrogant, self-important and completely useless assholes which comprise the group's governing bodies and committees. Flushing them all down the toilet, so that they can be used as nutrient materials for the ecosystem might truly be the only positive effect they could have on our world.

Flagg was doing whatever he wished, because he had the right officials in his pocket, and was paying plenty of money to the ones he didn't already own. The only thing sunshine does is allow you to see the cockroaches you need to step on more easily.

Taking care of Flagg is going to be messy and bloody, and it's something that Ragnarok is going to enjoy immensely. ;-)
Review By [Difdi] • Date [27 Aug 12] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "5" from (Current Donor)vidicon
I see from previouis replies that this will be continued, that pleases me. Apparently someone made them angry after all...

Thanks for writing.
Comments from author:
Yeah, a lot of someones have pissed them off, and they're about to learn why that's a bad idea. ;-)
Review By [(Current Donor)vidicon] • Date [25 Sep 11] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from Oakheart
This really. really needs to be continued. It has some of my favorite memes - powered up, but not overpowered, Xander and Harry. It actually crosses Sabrina with the other two mythos' well, something I haven't seen before. It has people committed to the concept, "Not on _my_ watch." All of which the HP universe benefits from. Well done.

Comments from author:
Not to worry - I've got he next chapter about halfway complete, and am hooping to finish it up very soon, so I can send to out to my extremely helpful and talented beta-readers.

And I haven't even gotten to the point where the gang starts to explain how they're going to change the Wizarding World for the better.

Whether the Wizarding World likes it or not. ;-)
Review By [Oakheart] • Date [23 Sep 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "5" from jgoodman
good story
Comments from author:
Thanks for reviewing.
Review By [jgoodman] • Date [30 Dec 09] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from BlueEyedJedi
A Thought: What if Down the Road, it was Cordelia who got possessed by the Alpha Spirit, maybe then we would have the Xan/Cordie fluff we all love. Will Ragnarok allow Halloween to occur, if so who will then go as?

Comments from author:
Ragnarok has rather extensive plans for the future, but you'll just have to wait to see what they are.
Review By [BlueEyedJedi] • Date [22 Aug 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "5" from VillageOrchid
Cool. The whole story is prologue to something that might move a little more slowly, like an academic school year. And of course they can pop home to the manor whenever they're out of classes. I wonder if they've picked what they want the hat to have as Xander's house. Since he could keep an eye out on certain people.
Comments from author:
Glad you're enjoying the story.

The pace of the story isn't going to be slowing down very much - at least initially - once Ragnarok starts school, since they want their opponents to be wondering what the hell is going on, and exactly who is it that's kicking them in their privates when they're not expecting it. Making your opponent react to your actions is much better than waiting for them to attack you. ;-)

And Xander's and Bree's Houses will be revealed in the next chapter. ;-)
Review By [VillageOrchid] • Date [5 Jul 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "3" from BlueEyedJedi
Hmmm. Harry's with Hermione, Ron is with Sabrina, Xander is with......; The Patel Twins, Susan Bones, Daphne Greengrass, Nymphadora Tonks, Luna Lovegood, or does his heart still belong to Cordie. All the potential pairings would be good. It will be fun when Xan meets Draco if he just laughs and says 'Drusilla make think of me as her kitten, but SHE KNOWS THAT YOU UNCLE William is totally her whipped bitch.' Fun all around. Looking forward to the next update.

Comments from author:
All I will say at this point in time is that Xander will not be pairing up with any of the girls at School, despite the fact that they will be making it obvious that they're interested.

Given his mental age (approximately twenty-seven, since he was born in 1980 in the previous timeline) and his initial reaction to the Angel-Buffy situation the first time around (even before the Scoobies found out that Angel was a vampire), it would hypocritical in the extreme for him to be making time with any of the girls at school.

Once the various problems with Riddle, Dumbledore and the Ministry are dealt with and the guys move to Sunnydale, he'll find some ladies he can relate to on an equal mental and emotional level. ;-)

And I think you'll enjoy seeing what Xander's reactions to Malfoy are going to be.
Review By [BlueEyedJedi] • Date [5 Jul 09] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "4" from VillageOrchid
I enjoyed the additional magic houses and items that you had, and enjoyed how you decided to only on the spur of the moment (and after a declaration of fealty) have the "kids" reveal the truth to the Weasley parents.
Comments from author:
Ragnarok's plans for how to deal with the Wizarding World is somewhat loose at this point in time, since they have stumbled over new information that wasn't available to them in the previous timeline (Harry's being the sole surviving member of Houses other than Potter), and they weren't completely certain as to what the other adults' reactions to their revelations might be.

Arthur and Molly, however, are actually the decent and caring adults that they appeared to be and, thus, are good people to help them form their underground resistance movement.

And the toys that the guys have found will prove to be of use in upcoming chapters. ;-)
Review By [VillageOrchid] • Date [5 Jul 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "3" from VillageOrchid
Ah, extreme actions for an extreme situation. Good filling in some more of the info for the earlier (to me) story that I read.
Comments from author:
Thanks. Glad you're enjoying the story.
Review By [VillageOrchid] • Date [5 Jul 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "2" from VillageOrchid
Harry's complete revenge against the Dursely's was unexpected, but not implausible... and it also "helps" to balance out the "good" that the others are trying to do.
Comments from author:
Well, as I have noted in response to some other questions, considering what all of them have seen and experienced during their fight with Riddle and his Dung Eaters, none of Ragnarok is anything approaching what a psychologist would call completely sane.

Their initial, ingrained, reflexive response to threats now is to destroy them before they can hurt them or their loved ones, and that is basically what he did with the Dursleys, since leaving them alive was simply offering his and Ragnarok's enemies (especially Dumbledore) with a possible way to exert pressure on him by forcing him to remain with them during the summer and limit his actions.

The fact that he finally got to give them what they deserved was simply a bonus. ;-)
Review By [VillageOrchid] • Date [5 Jul 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from VillageOrchid
Therein lies the set up that I was asking about. Cool. Looking forward to seeing what they do as 11 and 12 year olds.
Comments from author:
AS you've probably discovered by this time, they don't go back nearly that far in time.

Glad you enjoyed the setup part of the story.
Review By [VillageOrchid] • Date [5 Jul 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "4" from GreenDragon
Since you've posted the beginning of the third part of this excellent series, I had to go back and re-read the first two. I'm a little surprised that only one other reviewer caught the Amber link, and yeah, I can understand that it may be a little difficult to expound upon that, given the existing crossovers.

Although, shouldn't it be the "House of Corey" instead of "Corley"? In the latter five books, Corwin's son Merlin was known as "Merle Corey" to his mundane Earth collegiate compatriots.

The trumps that Xander found *could* prove to be extremely useful, especially if he (or possibly Harry, since Harry is the one who is the descendant of the House) develops any kind of artistic talent to be able to create new trumps. And the spell rings that Sabrina found should give her quite a boost...

Ya know, since Merlin son of Corwin is a Prince of Chaos, and Janus considers Xander to be *almost* an avatar of the God of Chaos, then maybe it really *is* Xander who is a true Son of Chaos... possibly even a previously unknown half-human son of Merle Corey. Maybe that's why, in canon, Xander seems to be so resistant to magical damage, yet spells seem to go "wonky" around him. Might be worth exploring...

Anyway, thanks for sharing with us, and I'm looking forward to more of Part 3 of the tale, as your muse and RL permit.
Comments from author:
First off, thanks for reviewing and commenting.

I threw the Trumps in as a plot device that will be used later in the story to mitigate accusations of some of the characters being Gary-Stu's or Mary-Sue's, as well as allowing for possible branching off of subsidiary stories. And please note that ALL of the things the group found in the various vaults will be used in the context of the story.

As far as the 'Corey' versus 'Corley' name is concerned, I view this as just another shadow branch off the main trunk, and I changed the name slightly since I think it would have been just too blatant a clue to use the 'Corey' name. ;-)

Anyway, thanks for commenting.
Review By [GreenDragon] • Date [17 May 09] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "5" from Tjin
a decent story, the characters seem a bit to... Uber... and i am honestly tired of the whole 'Dumbledor was a blind/Idiot/Self obsessed/bastard fics so that does grind on me a bit, only the fact that it is a Greywizard fic and excellently written has kept me reading despite my dislike for the plot loops (Which is a compliment By the way.)

I'm glad you don't have Molly being a she-hag and Arthur being a bumbling idiot... it's a nice change of pace from several other stories i've read... in all this is a great story and i will continue to watch ot.

Comments from author:
Thanks for reviewing and commenting, man, I do appreciate hearing your opinions.

As far as the 'Uber-wizards and witches' aspect is concerned, yes, all of the returnees are powered up, but I'm looking at it from the viewpoint of their possessing knowledge that their opponents don't have and using it to the maximum potential possible.

Remember Rules Twenty-seven (Don't be afraid to be the first to resort to violence.) and Thirty-seven (There is no "overkill". There is only "open fire" and "I need to reload.")? Ragnarok does, and they're bound and determined to make sure that their past never happens again, and they figure that the best way to do that is to remove their opponents from existence. Giving your enemy an even break is just begging to be defeated, not to mention stupid.

And with regard to your comment about my presenting Dumbledore as being an evil and manipulative bastard, I honestly don't see how anyone can read the books and not come to that conclusion. If I did half of what he did to someone in our society and claimed that "It was for the greater good", the best thing that I could see happening would be that my lawyer would be able to use that as evidence of mental incompetence and/or insanity on my part.

Molly and Arthur are both intelligent adults who have just believed a little too much of Dumbledore's PR, and now that they've taken a step back and looked at things analytically, they're doing what I would expect any well-meaning and halfway intelligent adult would do in a similar situation.

In any event, I appreciate your commenting and I think you'll like the upcoming developments Ragnarok has planned. ;-)
Review By [Tjin] • Date [17 May 09] • Not Rated
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