Honestly, you rush far too much; a number of what are single or double paragraph 'scenes' could easily be entire 2000+ word chapters. Also, Willow the Wonder Witch, more powerful than everyone including ancient Nox? It's clichéd and it wasn't even that great the first time.
Review By [JoeHundredaire] • Date [24 Oct 09] • Not Rated
Lovely universe you've created here. I like how you manage to blend in sg1, bsg, heroes and btvs/ats, and have it make sense. Great storytelling; the characters are well-written and complex, the story has a nice flow to it, and the plot, as well as the overarching mythology of this universe, has stirred my interest. Thanks for sharing your story(-ies).
I'm of two minds, I'm hoping that Illya stays "good" .. or at least Neutral towards humanity (after all, we're slime ... maybe less than that to her) ... I can see where she'd want to smack the ancients and company around a bit, but I also think she's of the mind to - let bygones be bygones, ... you leave me alone and I won't come back and destroy you ..... after smacking them around a bit.
Review By [LordCorwin] • Date [12 Feb 08] • Not Rated