A solid little story, you really took huge leaps forward between this story and 'The Surrogate.' It was a great idea though, and I hope you keep writing stories for this pairing :) I really love the two of them together. Love Jack running down to the delivery room in his shorts! Thanks for the fun entertainment!
Review By [AtotheM] • Date [7 Aug 11] • Rating [7 out of 10]
awesome story ... original plot .... nice twists .... ^_^
Comments from author:
Thank you for taking the time to review this work. I am glad someone still reading my work even though I haven't posted a story in 2 yrs. I am trying to work on my other story but most of my work was on a flash drive and its missing so I have to re written several chapters that was already written. Thanks once again, please continue to review my work.
Review By [serenityselena] • Date [9 Feb 11] • Not Rated
aww! that's really cute. That beginning was a bit slow and boring (no offense...) but you really caught me up, and I couldn't take a break while reading the story :)
Review By [veslefrick] • Date [13 Jul 10] • Not Rated
The characterization of Buffy, being so literary and verbose, was so OOC that it threw me out of my comfort zone in reading this. I know sometimes that's what you shoot for, but I get the idea that you were just tryin to set the stage, and it didn't do well for that.
Comments from author:
Thank you for reviewing.
Review By [DeacBlue] • Date [24 Sep 09] • Not Rated
Nice story but I think Alex is a little bit too young for the part about his parents and their sexual joy! XD As Bufy tells him the story you should have let this part out.
~Mamo~
Comments from author:
Sorry for taking so long to answer you. Regarding the story, even though Buffy is telling the story to Alex, I don't believe she tell every single detail like the Love making. I think that part is just a memory of that time--we the readers see it through her eyes, but she probably skipped over that part... at least she did in my head. Which child want to hear about their parents having sex, I don't. And not Buffy especially. Remember how she react to Giles and her mom.
Great, loveable story line here. I'm so happy for Buffy, that she's able to live a common life (yet, still retain her slayer powers), with a husband and children! If the author chose to do a sequel to this story, yes, I would definitely read it.
Comments from author:
Hello! You are not the first person to ask to a sequel to this story. I do have an idea, but I don't write as fast as I use to. But If anyone willing to do this story justice and write a sequel I would love it.
Review By [BrownFinderth] • Date [8 Apr 09] • Not Rated
Great story! I'm glad you took the time to write it. Not only write it, but finish it out as well. I can't wait to read more of your stories :)
Comments from author:
Thank you for taking the time out for reviewing this story. I mean so much to me. As a writer, I look forward to the reviews, be it good or not so good. Thanks once again.
Review By [Fritolays] • Date [30 Nov 07] • Not Rated
It cracked me up that Jack tried to hurry up the wedding! And I loved that the gang came in right when Jack and Buffy were announced as man and wife. I have a feeling that Jack would have immediately verbally and loudly objected to people calling his child a demon ;)
Comments from author:
Objection from Jack...probably, but I think he didn't know what was going on. seeing that Buffy was missing his friends, he of course call them. He had expect them to come to visit, but not at the moment as he was saying his vows.
But as the door bell rang, he just knew that it was Buffy friends.
O’Neill,” he called. “I have brought you the mother of your child.”
Oh, I can't wait to see what Jack says to that! I liked this chapter much better than the first. The first just seemed very out of character for Buffy. And the story a little too complicated for a 6 year old.
The second chapter, I liked better. I thought Buffy's conversation with Thor was funny, but it was kind of stilted.
I look forward to more!
Comments from author:
Wow! another review. Thank you. yes the conversation is way big for a child of 6, but buffy was speaking more to us than the child if that made sense.
That was a very nice ending to your story. I enjoyed seeing Jack and Buffy fall in love and have a family. I'm looking forward to reading more of the New Beginning Series but will be sad that it's the last of the series.
Comments from author:
Thank you for your continious support. Warriors may be the last of the series, but it has 30 odd chapters so far.
DeacBlue
Fritolays
