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Review of chapter "Revenge is a Dish Best Served Looking Innocent" from LordSia
Exquisitely disturbing, especially in how well it fits. Taylor, the True Queen of the Swarm...
Review By [LordSia] • Date [26 May 14] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Revenge is a Dish Best Served Looking Innocent" from Addlcove
Would love to see this developed into its own story!
Comments from author:
Actually I finished it, a three part set. I'll post the rest sooner or later.
If you don't want to wait, its on Spacebattles in the Worm thread in the Index.
Review By [Addlcove] • Date [12 Feb 14] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Offensive Fidelius Charm" from KrisB
I read this and the comments. I had to blink and think what potions, complusions and loyalty charms do they put those kids through? If anything Harry and Hermione should be on the mundanes side in this. Harry was abused far more in the magical world than he ever was in the mundane world.

If Hogwarts was a mundane school with oversight, it would have been shut down in his first year and half the staff jailed for setting up lethal traps in a school for children. The Dursleys were minor hidden abuse that in many fics even if reported hey dumbledore or his minions could just make the reports vanish. I support that opininon and those sort of fanfictions.

Harry was basically abused throughout Hogwarts by Snape, Mcgonall, and Dumbledore. In muggle school, he and Hermione were picked on by some minor bullies and as presented never enough evidence to do anything. Hell, Don't get me started on the Death Trap of a school Hogwarts is.

In the mundane world, Harry just had to put up with one minor neighbor hood giving him looks and suddenly he becomes worse than anything he has fought?

Damn, after reading, this I would have supported it more if Harry, Hermione and his chosen mundane born all were the only ones that were in on the secret that oh magic exists or that various magical locations exist, or wizards or witchs can use magic. That's what I was sort of expecting.

I actually understand and support Greywizards comments. Any Intelgence should basically tag and track all magicalls and setup massive fuel air explosives or worse and just set them off. Esp after something like this. Hermione should actually be one of the ones that understands that enough is enough and that extermitaion is bascaily for the best of Britain. They aren't British citizens that are loyal to the crown or governmnet, they are basically kidnappers that brainwash kids to serve in their little rebel government. And that's a polite way of stating it and looking at it. As far as the British are concerned Hermione and Harry are the worse Dark Lords ever. Plans will be made and wizards will all die as shortly as possible.
Comments from author:
Glad it was thought provoking even if you disagreed with the ideas.

I suppose a lot of it has to do with reader interpretation of the events I set up, the possible events never mentioned that might have led up to the story snippet in question, and interpretations of canon. Not to mention what you might think history is like for the magicals and muggles in the world.

Personally, I see what the Durselys did as far worse then what Snape did. The reason being is family versus strangers. I believe strongly in family, and the Durselys abused Harry simply because he was different, despite the fact he was family. I see that like hating someone simply due to skin color, intelligence, or something like that, and made worse due to the family relations. You can say Snape did that as well, but he wasn't family, and he had a reason beyond 'generic trait A'. Granted, it wasn't a good reason, but it was a personal reason, so it wasn't as bad in my mind. Still horrible and nothing a decent person would ever do, and I wouldn't hesitate to convict him in a second, but not as bad as the Durselys.

I do like your idea of Harry, Hermione, and the muggle borns being the only ones in on the secret, and if I had done a story during the war and without the muggles involved that's probably what I would have chosen to do. Due to the timeframe I picked, including everyone made more sense. After all, like it or not, the Purebloods know more about magic then anyone, they have the family diaries, the family libraries, and the history. I don't see magic like science at all, and I certainly see people as hoarding knowledge. Hoarding knowledge among muggles makes no sense, after all, odds are you'd need more materials and effort than the average person has in order to do something spectacular, like manufacturer perfect diamonds or make biological weapons. In the magical world, any single person, barring power levels, can do anything. So if I had made my own spell that did something spectacular, I'd keep it to myself and my family. Cutting off the purebloods, you'd lose all that potential magical stuff. Maybe they might share it eventually, maybe they won't, but at least it would still be within reachable distance. You cut them out, and who knows what may disappear behind blood wards or hidden areas. Once again, this comes down to interpretation of the Harry Potter World.

For your final bit. Well, once again it comes down to magic versus science, and the question of who was there first, and how they actually interact. Based on the average wizards ability to blend in and dress muggle, see the world cup, do you really think they see muggles frequently, or at all? You can make the argument they were never actually British citizens, after all, they don't pay taxes or receive any kind of benefits from the government, or need the government in any way shape or form. As for tracking them, well, I'm the school of thought that says magic tells science and the laws of physics to bend over and take it; its magic afterall. Tracking magic with science sounds nice, but in reality, not gonna happen. Muggles excel at pure destruction on a wide scale, its what their way of war is built around. Wizards excel at hiding, control, not being there, etc, its been their doctrine since the middle ages. I mean, honestly, given what we're told of wizards powers in the books, just with those things directly told to us, I could destroy a nation by myself. Imperius one or two people, especially in a dictatorship, and start a massive war. Or poison a water supply with something like basilisk venom. Or even just start some Fiendfyre in the middle of a city and laugh as they try to put out dark magical fire with normal water. Point is, muggles can't track wizards without magic of their own, and one wizard can kill a nation if they try, at least in my own mind. It'd be devastation on both sides, with having to bomb everything to guarantee a kill. Like battle ship, except one side has massive battle ships dozens of squares long and can kill several squares at once, but they're only playing on a single map and the enemy can move anywhere, anytime.

Once again, everything comes down to interpretation, and I was glad to hear yours and that my snippet made you think.

Thanks for the review.
Review By [KrisB] • Date [29 Nov 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Mass Effect Snippets" from eriktheviking
Cracking good set of alternatives to the various canons.
Comments from author:
Thanks. Guy started a series of humor snippets, each which ended with a set of paragon/renegade/neutral options for more snippets. These were my contributions.
Review By [eriktheviking] • Date [7 May 12] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Xander Effect" from thsunami
I rather like the idea and the herioc death, What i would have is that garrius xander would need to be biotic as xander has enhanced perception and the heyna power is still in him so a biotic xander/ garrius with a nice touch of fem shepard together does give it a nice story.

Through somehow returning would also be nice especially with that verse's tech he might be able to adapt (maybe?)
Comments from author:
I do plan to continue this at some point. I actually played through the whole first and second Mass Effect games and copied down all of Garruses lines for further use, I just have to get around to it.

And unfortunetely you will never see a fem-Shepard in my stories as I am male and played the game as a male. aving a female shepard would just seem to strange to me.
Review By [thsunami] • Date [25 Nov 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Offensive Fidelius Charm" from enderverse
Oh man, if they would really do something like that they deserve to be exterminated. If I had to pick a group to genocide, normal people of Britain or the wizards of Britain. I would definitely pick wizards.

I think you have a major case of
Comments from author:
Meh, each to their own opinion.
I personally thought I made Harry's actions justifiable, but each person takes it a different way. I honestly don't see whats so bad about the wizarding world anyway, American (where I live) is just as bad.

thanks for the review.
Review By [enderverse] • Date [18 Jun 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "The Only Real Mpreg (Hp/Aliens)- Mock Fic" from djhardim
Then there's the Newcomers from Alien Nation. The males carried the child for the last part of the pregnancy.

This should help. Alien Nation was both a film and a TV series.
Comments from author:
looked at the article, I still stick by my thoughts, chestbusters are still the only acceptable form of mpreg.
Review By [djhardim] • Date [17 Jun 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Bibliophile" from zTiamaTz
Nice job. I particularly like the Edward and Turian stories. If you ever decide to expand on either one, I'll definitely read them.
Comments from author:
no plans for the Edward one, I like it how it is.

I do probably plan on expanding he Turian one. Last time I played through the game I copied down all of Garrus's dialouge for potential story use and I'd hate to see my dozens of pages of notes go to waste.
Review By [zTiamaTz] • Date [17 Jun 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Bibliophile" from (Past Donor)ridert
Honestly I don't see it. Hermione in canon may have been a bit to fond of authority figures, but she was also supposed to be rather briliant and I can't see her of all people falling for the diary without at least doing some kind of research into how it could possibly work.
add to that the fact that there is no way in Hell that I could see Malfoy willingly giving something of his Masters to a muggleborn he simply wouldn't see her as worthy.
Comments from author:
sure I can see her researching it, but I can still see her using it, and she is extremely niave, after all this is only the begining of the second book. She hasn't been exposed to enough bad magic to really shake off the sense of wonder muggleborns get, which when combined with her devotion to books (Evidence is the Lockhart book love and her extreme anger regarding the fact Hogwarts a History never mentioned house elves) I can easily see her getting sucked in.

Also, I see Malfoy not caring about worthy, after all its supposed to kill the person, and his anger at seeing her and her family polluting Diagon made him switch from the political choice of having a Weasley doing the killings, to an emotionally satisfying one of wiping out a mudblood.

Thanks for the review.
Review By [(Past Donor)ridert] • Date [17 Jun 10] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Offensive Fidelius Charm" from JasonBarnett
just found this, and I have to say I agree with the people who say Harry is the villain of the story here.
Comments from author:
Each to their own opinion.

Thanks for the review.
Review By [JasonBarnett] • Date [17 Jun 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Offensive Fidelius Charm" from ChiVayne
Yes, congratulations Harry, you have made those in power in the muggle world fear and hate the wizards even more. I guess he did learn one thing from the Dursleys, how to bully others.
And while Harry insists he has taken care of the ones that killed muggles, I don't see any mention of compensation for the death and destruction in the muggle world caused by wizards.
We muggles have enough problems with hatred, corruption, pollution, etc. that we do to ourselves without the added worry that some future wizard won't take it into his head to finish us off (wizards seem to have as many problems as we do regarding bad apples.)
Comments from author:
Interesting viewpoint, but I don't see it as bullying. I see it as detering the genocide of wizarding Britian. After all, the muggles were going to attack first and then Harry still didn't activate the spell, he gave them a chance to call it off.

There is no compensation, but why should there be? People are greedy and selfish, they blame the war on Voldemort and his followers and then refuse to pay any compensation, after all, it wasn't their fault, it was Voldemorts, why should they have to pay, especially to muggles when they have their own rebuilding? That seems to be the attitude for most people, just change the name of the blamee.

And as for that last line, well, don't you think the wizards have enough to worry about, what with their dark lord and dark creatures, without the added worry of muggles storming their shopping district, town, and school?

Thanks for the review.
Review By [ChiVayne] • Date [15 Feb 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Offensive Fidelius Charm" from Greywizard
Congratulations. You have made me completely despise Harry, Hermione and everyone else who supported Harry and/or who's a member of the Wizarding World.

Harry's actions are exactly equivalent to those of any group of cowardly terrorists who threaten to explode car bombs or unleash biological attacks on an unsuspecting populace if their demands aren't met, and they are just as contemptible.

His statement that all of Riddle's followers have been taken care of completely ignores the fact that the majority of the Wizarding World sees nothing wrong with muggle-baiting, simply because of the fact that muggles are not wizards or witches, and therefore by definition, are inferior to wizards, and further, who think that any being who is not a member of their own tightly regulated group can be considered as a plaything, a toy to be used and abused as the wizard or witch in question desires, without any consequences for their actions to be considered.

Based on the mindset of the British Ministry you've showed us, and taking into consideration basic human nature, all Harry has done is now ensure that the British segment of the Wizarding world (and by extension, the rest of Wizarding society until they can conclusively prove otherwise to the mundane world) is slated for complete and total extermination.

Threatening the mundane world the way they've done, Harry has merely forced the various intelligence agencies to go into the deepest levels of secrecy possible and initiate schemes which will NOT be able to be stopped, which will be helmed by who those think that the best and only way to deal with such fanatics is to eliminate them from the gene pool as expeditiously as possible. Unless the Wizarding world has a great many deep-cover operatives who have successfully infiltrated the mundane world, harry and his cohorts will never be able to locate and neutralize all of the people tasked with such a responsibility before they begin to implement their plans.

And all of the above is based on the supposition that any potentially rabid members of the Prime Minister's office don't disregard the PM's orders to step down from the plans and, on their own initiative, order immediate air strikes against Hogwarts, Hogsmeade and every other already identified Wizarding enclave, with the intent to make Harry's threat meaningless by killing him and/or everyone else capable of initiating such an action.

I rather doubt that any sort of shield the WW has developed will do much good against fuel-air bombs or nuclear weapons.
Comments from author:
I wondered if that was you on CaerAzkaban when I saw the writers name and now that I finally get around to checking my reviews it confirms it.

we'll have to disagree on viewpoints, I already answered on the message board over there.

Thanks for the Review
Review By [Greywizard] • Date [15 Feb 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Offensive Fidelius Charm" from Bobboky
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Review By [Bobboky] • Date [15 Feb 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Offensive Fidelius Charm" from Corris
You know, this chapter makes me think of something I've been meaning to put down for sometime: Wizards basically have the long end of the stick in the relationship with muggles. They can more or less dictate the terms and the muggles can only accept, or have heir memories changed and accept, or be compelled into accepting. So I've got to wonder, is there some sort of third party that keeps such things from happening? Another force to counterbalance the wizards? Some sort of anti-magic group?

It'd make for an interesting story or at least part of one.
Comments from author:
maybe the Wizards have the long stick in cannon, but part of the inspiration for this story comes from all of those stories where the Muggle world is glorified by Harry or Hermione and they start using rifles and shotguns and stuff instead of magic.
And if there was a third group or your thinking about writing a story with one, I suggest the Church, any or all religion, and make that the third group, with Faith having a power of its own.
Review By [Corris] • Date [15 Feb 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Offensive Fidelius Charm" from Jearom
Excellent, I specially like the idea of Harry blaming the Muggle's for missing the abuse from the Dursleys. I have for a long time felt angry at fics that try to drop all the blame on Dumbledore.
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Review By [Jearom] • Date [15 Feb 10] • Rating [10 out of 10]
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