You have done a very nice job on this story.


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It's not that I'm so smart, it's just
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wow. your buffy's a complete psychopath! it kinda turns me on...

I just had to read this yet again. And it's still really dang good. Now, on to the sequel, and hopefully that one will get it's own someday. Well, thanks for writing this, bye for now.

Intriguing.

Your alternative mythology of the creation of the Slayers is well thought out and vividly described. Giles's sin of omission is a good parallel for his betrayal of Buffy during the cruiciamentum. I've mentioned a Buffy/Anita/JC triumvirate before, the revelations contained in this chapter would seem to create the need for something like it. If the Slayer is capable of accepting vampire marks perhaps that and whatever strange connection Buffy shares with Anita would be enough to give the resulting gestalt a chance to keep the Slayer from shattering Buffy's sanity. On the other hand perhaps all it would accomplish would be to drag Anita and Jean Claude into the same abyss. I would have like more of an exploration into Buffy's reaction to these awful truths, but I guess that will be addressed in the sequel. Oh, and what does meurtier mean? I'm guessing slayer because it's similar to death.

The juxtaposition between the bubbly teenager and the sociopathic demon, which is at the heart of the appeal of this story in general and your interpretation of Buffy in particular reaches a climax in this chapter. Buffy letting the Slayer out to play, before Buffy bits rain down, is my favourite part of this story. Anita gets it wrong Buffy's got Nikolaos beat in the scariness stakes, and the scariest bit is her high after killing Nikolaos, in that terrible moment when you think not she might not be able to stop herself, but that she won't want to. Moments like Buffy starting blowing bubbles and then worrying about her hair are why I read this story. Nikolaos's incredulity is just plain funny. A song of ruin is a nice phrase. Jean-Claude seems understandably freaked out by Buffy. i can't wait to see what they'll make of each other in the next chapter.

I've no idea who Pat and Vanna are, although i surmise from the context they're game show hosts. I wish you'd gone a little bit more into what letting the Slayer take control felt like for Buffy. Coupled with Anita's speculation at the the beginning of the chapter, I would guess giving the Slayer control like that isn't good in the long term for Buffy's sanity or her life expectancy. Buffy's differing reactions over ghouls and vamps was an interesting tangent. The most interesting development in the chapter is obviously Anita and Buffy's mutual power spikes. What is the connection between Slayers and Necromancers. Was it a necromancer who created the Slayer line. Was this the first step to a JC/Anita/Buffy triumvirate? Buffy eating Edward out of house and home was a great moment. I don't want to jump on the slightest pretext, but are you considering a Buffy Raphael pairing or were you just emphasizing Buffy's post slay cravings?

Buffy really should give lessons on how to get what you want. She employs the classic strategy of giving up something she knows she doesn't have a chance of getting for something she does. I am feeling nostalgic for my first reading of this story at this point I was busy speculating about why Giles thought he would have to use those weapons on Buffy. That aside, you give the reader just enough info to leave us begging for more. Just like Edward it doesn't take much to keep me happy. In this case a new Buffy based coinage is more than sufficient: Buffyquisition. Good One.

Insulting Edward's fashion sense was a fantastic way for Buffy to make the opening conversational gambit. He is a really unfathomable guy. He finally meets someone who gets the better of him and he starts having violence fantasies about her. I do have to admit I have a weakness for crazy female characters. River Tam and Luna Lovegood to name but two, so I'm really enjoying the direction your taking Buffy. Besides being creepy as hell, the juxtaposition between the perky teenage and the I-torture-vampires-so-bad-normal-people-throw-up persona is really fascinating. And she sure is scary. Edward is just one of those unflappable characters, if he's scared everybody should be terrified.

Smoking Mice. Hilarious. i was pleasantly surprised about how well thought out your insertion, not only of Buffy, but also the Slayer line into the Anitaverse is. Imprisonment is a very believable response by the vampire council to the existence of Slayers. of course they would see it as the better option. When will Giles be letting Buffy in on this handy piece of information? If the rest of this story was just Buffy and Anita sitting around talking I'd still read it. The characterisation was spot on. Having Edward come in at the end was a wonderful way to finish the chapter. It really makes me want to jump straight into the next one.

The way this chapter elucidates all the different facets of Buffy's character is wonderful. You start with the bubbly teen who has Foodgasms and worries about running in Jimmy Choos. And build through mentions of Buffy's need to slay until we get to see her kill.It was an interesting first meeting between Buffy and Anita. Having Buffy annoy Anita then follow her was a good choice structurally allowing Buffy to witness the events without participating. I liked the inside joke about Buffy lamenting the lack of a world where she could kill vampires without worrying about the cops. Again I loved your use of language when you described Buffy's feelings in the buildup to the kill. The predator and prey refrain worked thematically. Watching Buffy satisfy her hunger, and well her hunger was just riveting.

I love the interaction between Buffy and Giles in this chapter. Highlights for me include Buffy's internal monologue on how to get rid of Giles, his cowardice over the Pout of Doom and the Animator thing. Suspicioned is a great word. Your take on Buffy reminds me of a comedian called Eddie Izzard. He displays the same ability to start talking about a perfectly rational topic and take it to a really surreal place. Going from zombies to cartoon vampire frogs in one paragraph was inspired. Your comments about Princess Diana bring up timeline issues is this story set in the same time as Buffy series one or not?

I feel I've got to start by apologising. I've had this story on my recommended list for months and it's only now I've gotten round to reviewing it. I love the comic touches in this chapter: the land of tweedom, Lothos so paying for ruining her social life and hey I think you've coined a new word. At least I've never come across Buffyfication before. I really enjoy the way you've integrated Buffy into the Anita verse. I hate stories where people try and shoehorn canon Buffy into the Anita verse by saying the rules somehow do not apply on the hellmouth, and Buffy falls through a portal stories can be fun but your way is so much more satisfying. I haven't watched the movie in ages so I don't know how far you've pushed the time line, but I approve of you drawing out the conflict between Buffy and Lothos for a longer period to give Buffy the time to develop as the Slayer, as well as the cracks to start appearing in her parents marriage. I really enjoyed your prose style especially in the passage dealing with Buffy's killing Lothos. The bits about her feeling his power beating against her mind like butterfly wings is a great use of simile and the line about her awakening to vermillions etc really blew me away. The parallels between Anita and Buffy are made explicitly stated. Anita's bottomless pit of rage has always been the defining attribute of her character and it's going to be very interesting to see how she interacts with Buffy. The students watching Buffy like a demon escaped from Hell was a nice piece of foreshadowing. The pacing of the exposition of the house was ok, but did you really need to tell us all the dimensions? Oh, and before I forget, is the snake woman Lothos sent after Buffy Melanie the Lamia? If not are Lamia's more prevalent in this verse than the Anita books?

Spot on.

Thanks :)

Thanks for the review. And you're welcome. 8)

This fic is so great! What a unique BtVS/AB crossover. No alternate universe stuff, just Buffy in Anita'verse.

Thanks for the review. I wanted to do a "What if Buffy was born a Slayer in the Anitaverse". How would that change things"