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Review of chapter "Chapter Three: Discoveries" from Red
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I hope one day you will write more soon
Review By [Red] • Date [7 Feb 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Three: Discoveries" from firedrakegirl
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Please update this soon!!!! This is an awesome story!
Review By [firedrakegirl] • Date [24 Oct 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Three: Discoveries" from Krysstinia
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I'm really enjoying this so far! Please continue.
Review By [Krysstinia] • Date [10 Mar 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Three: Discoveries" from Red
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I would love to see what you do next
Review By [Red] • Date [15 Feb 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Three: Discoveries" from Red
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I would love to see what you do next
Review By [Red] • Date [27 Apr 08] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Three: Discoveries" from waey
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So far, very good job. I hope you write more soon.
Review By [waey] • Date [22 Apr 08] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Three: Discoveries" from Dragonelf
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::Looks cautiously at the nefarious cliffhanger::

I hope we will see you inspired to post more chapters soon.

::Feeds the plot bunny::
Review By [Dragonelf] • Date [12 Mar 08] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Three: Discoveries" from purrfus
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Willow and Johnny are cousins. How are they related? If the Scoobies had been aware of Johnny then it would probably not require details within the story, because it could be assumed they and everyone else should already know. However, since there were introductions I have to assume that the relationship is not common knowledge, and that means it should be explained however briefly.

Your Kennedy is actually fairly laid back and Buffy isn't much of a bitch - at least as far as actions go. You provided warnings and then gave some details in Willow musing (such as Willow breaking up with Kennedy before Kennedy could break up with her) but neither has done much of the warned against behavior in the context of the story itself. Its kind of a let down.

I haven't read Ghost Rider comic books in a long time, and I only liked parts of the movie, so I can't really tell how well you are doing with Johnny's voice.

You have introduced a lot of original characters in a very short space of time without really providing backgrounds or details - except now there are at least 3 red-heads which while attractive is statistically improbable. At the same time you have mentioned several established BtVS characters and then not done anything with them. Wanting to have action and or move the story along quickly works better when using established characters because then you don't have to make up histories and figure out how to provide that information within the context of the story instead of just doing a data dump. When characters are introduced without some kind of history and or tie-in it leaves holes, and while there might be some expectation that the information could be forthcoming because there are only 4 chapters so far, so many characters with so little information doesn't really provide much reassurance.

There are some spelling and grammar issues along with a few format problems such as spaces between speakers, and then no spaces etc. An example of spelling and grammar is just after the spar between Ace and Faith when Johnny expresses his surprise that they are both awake - the word used 'conscience' should be conscious.

The Willow voice and actions are well done. The babble is good without being crazy. Her birdy comment and the teddy bear attack are great.
Comments from author:
Thanks for the review!

Well, most of the stuff you mentioned is going to be explained in the rest of the story. The Scoobie's didn't know much about Willow's extended family in the series, as far as I can tell, and Willow and Johnny ended up losing touch. I can't get into much now, but it will come out later:) The ball's rolling, but I'm not finished with the intro yet.

Most of the OC's won't have big roles, but they rarely split up in the series. You almost always knew where they all were, no matter how small it was. And all the ones mentioned will have important roles, even if they're not big ones. Giles, Faith, Buffy and Xander are all fairly regular, it wouldn't have made sense not to have them. Kennedy, although I'd have prefered not to have her, was there at the end of the series and I had to explain what happened to her. I will be going into the other characters more in the next few chapters, but this is a Willow and Johnny fic so I needed to get them all figured out:)

Also, the warnings were mainly there for the people who like Kennedy. I said in one of my Author's Notes that I'd be writing Buffy as human. She was never perfect, she was a huge bitch in some of the episodes, but she was an overall good person. Kennedy I really dislike, but she did have some good qualities and I know some people like her. She won't be in the story to much, but I've always hated it when people write stories that have a character as a bitch and don't post warnings. So I decided to, since she will be making a few more appearances and none of them will be pretty. I have a few plans, but this is still a very short story so there hasn't been much of a chance to go into it.

I'm sorry about the spelling. This is my first length-based fic (I'm a drabble writer) and I edit it myself, although my genius sister said she'll help me with my stories:) So hopefully, spelling and grammar will get better, although there are always typos:(

Thanks for the compliment on Willow. I really enjoy doing her:) As for Johnny's, I haven't read the comics in a while either. His is a lot more difficult, so I apologize to you and anyone else if I get it wrong.

Also, as a side note, I'm definitely not done with the relationships and characters. That area's my specialty, but I wanted to get the plot started, both to keep people (including myself) from getting to bored, and to help balance everything out.

I hope I answered all of your questions that I could, and that's again for the review!!
Review By [purrfus] • Date [6 Jan 08] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Three: Discoveries" from magik
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They did the story sharing, yeah! Good job, and I can't wait for the next chapter.
Comments from author:
Thanks! I'll be getting it up ASAP. I'm having trouble writing it, unfortunately:( Loved reading this!
Review By [magik] • Date [6 Jan 08] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One: Skeletons and Birdies" from Psyckosama
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Movie version or no, this really should be moved to Comics/Marvel/Ghost Rider.
Review By [Psyckosama] • Date [8 Nov 07] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One: Skeletons and Birdies" from BlueEyedJedi
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Kennedy is just plan a BITCH in any story, you are not the first to recognize it.
Review By [BlueEyedJedi] • Date [8 Nov 07] • Rating [9 out of 10]
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