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Review of chapter "Chapter One" from EgSparks
Review:
really good story, hope you didn't abandonat that one, I want to know what's gonna happend... like who's upstaire, is it Sammy or maybe John... or someone that so totaly does have anything to do with that... ;)
Review By [EgSparks] • Date [18 Dec 08] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from TheEmpressOfJohoho
Review:
Hey again, thanks for changing the whole name thing, it makes sense now xD
Review By [TheEmpressOfJohoho] • Date [15 Nov 07] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from link
Review:
AuereusUna! How could you do this? It's an evil cliffhanger. Post the next chapter fast okay. Love the beginning.
Review By [link] • Date [15 Nov 07] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from CrushedRosez
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That's so not cool with that cliff-hanger! This is really good. I didn't catch the name thing, so it's all good. ;)
Review By [CrushedRosez] • Date [14 Nov 07] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from nannabelle
Review:
I agree, the last name thing was very confusing. But otherwise, good start. I'll look forward to the next chapter.
Comments from author:
Thanks for the review. Yea I know the name thing was confusing. I actually had it fixed on one version on my computer and not on another. I just copied the wrong one.
Review By [nannabelle] • Date [14 Nov 07] • Rating [7 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from AnnOfMidnight
Review:
It's a good mesh, but like the other reviewr says, watch the last names. At first I thought the police officer was privy to Dean's real last name and let it slip, but then Dean said it too and at the end we're back to the original one.

I also doubt a police officer would say they have no idea how to identify the body. They have tons of ideas. I have tons of ideas. Cross-referencing the DB(dead body's)'s stats with missing persons reports, using his cell phone number to get the name it's registered to, check for identifying marks or scars, check dental records...
Comments from author:
I went back and fixed the name thing.

I know there are actually ways to find all that, but this fits in my story better. Creative liscence right? Maybe the cop was lazy.
Review By [AnnOfMidnight] • Date [14 Nov 07] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from TheEmpressOfJohoho
Review:
It’s a good beginning, but I’m a bit confused.
At first Dean introduced himself as Dean Williams, but the officer then called him Mr. Winchester. And then when Dean called the officer again he introduced himself as Dean Winchester, and then when Dean got to the morgue the officer said: I assume you are Dean Williams
The last name changes all the time.
Comments from author:
Hey thanks for the review. I went back and tried to explain the name thing. If you are still confused, let me know.
Review By [TheEmpressOfJohoho] • Date [14 Nov 07] • Not Rated
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