Gotta say, I am really enjoying this series, however, please run them by a beta. The first sentence in this story is a run on, and it's not the only one. You have several small grammar mistakes in each story, that while not horrible on their own each take away from the overall feel of the series. I think your ideas are fun, and worth reading, just - ya know - let a beta see them.
Dee
Review By [DeeRose] • Date [21 Nov 07] • Not Rated
haha.. love that .. i really don't know which is worse.. lol.. i mean xander is just xander but john is the military commander of an entire city.. hehe.. oh man that was good.. and yeah i can so see that conversation going like that.. lol..