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Review of chapter "thinking" from spring
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Um why haven't you updated/finished this wonderful fic? I love what little you have so far. Please update this wonderful fic.
Review By [spring] • Date [6 Aug 08] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "thinking" from zafaran
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Any possibility of getting more chapters on this story any time soon? You've got an interesting start here, and I'd love to find out what happens in the rest of the story. I hope your muse and schedule will allow you to write and post more chapters sometime soon. Keep up the good work. Zafaran zafaran@fastmail.fm
Review By [zafaran] • Date [16 Sep 06] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "thinking" from Lin
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I like the idea, i don't believe i have read another story where dawn was a "squib relative" and was taken in only because she is the key...so kudos for the idea..
If you KNOW that you have trouble with spelling get someone to help you! If you post a story on the internet its obvious that you wrote it not only for yourself but for others to read as well
You have to realize that if its posted on the net it will be criticized when words like "new" and "Knew" "there" and "their" are confused. If you don't learn to accept criticism then you wont develop into a better writer.
So get together with a friend and exchange ideas..write a story together and read it outloud so you can hear when words don't flow. Or just get a beta..
Either way keep writing and don't let critical readers stop you from improving.
Review By [Lin] • Date [9 Jun 06] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "thinking" from organicmagic
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--I know it sucks. But I was bored and I couldnt think of anything to write. --

Let me first say that this is not really the way to win over readers, let them decide whether they thought the chapter sucked or just quite simply don't update until you know what you are going to write for your plotline. Thinking out the ideas of a plot before putting the proverbial pen to paper is a very good idea as then you can follow the plan, even if its quite a rough idea, its still something to go along.

Your spelling and grammar leave a lot to be desired. That is what spellcheck, proofreading and beta's are for. That will help you a lot. I know I don't like to read stories where character names and places are horribly misspelled. LUCIUS, NARCISSA, they are quite easy to spell - if you have difficulty then keep a copy of one of the HP books to hand, then you can look it up easily.

Also, calling a reviewer "an asshole" is really not the way to get people to help you or read your story, it just makes you seem petty and base.
Review By [organicmagic] • Date [4 Mar 05] • Rating [1 out of 10]
Review of story "Outsider" from Anonymous Reviewer
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hi, i really like the idea of your story. i think it's pretty unique-the whole Malfoy/Summers family connection thing. It's just that you might want to watch some of the grammer stuff; you know 'are' instead of 'our' and 'new' instead of 'knew'. those are tough b/c spell check won't catch them. also details like how banshees actually howl and scream (hyenas laugh) and misspelling character names. that kind of stuff can get confusing and pull the reader out of the story, which would be a shame b/c you have a really good conversational flow to the story. it's just some the technical side could use a tweak. mostly though, thanks for writing the story, and i hope you'll update soon!
Review By [Anonymous Reviewer] • Date [3 Aug 03] • Not Rated • Add Comment
Review of story "Outsider" from Anonymous Reviewer
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If you know your spelling leaves something to be desired, you do something about it before you post. I commonly utilize the... *gasp* spell-checker before I even start formatting my stuff to be uploaded. It's really a brilliant idea. You should try it some time.
Review By [Anonymous Reviewer] • Date [3 Aug 03] • Not Rated • Add Comment
Review of story "Outsider" from Anonymous Reviewer
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u dont have to be so mean. yes, my spelling sucks. i knew that. jeez. u dont have 2 b so rude. just becuz ur a good fanficiton writer, that doesnt mean u should critisize someone cuz they suck. i dont care if ppl like it, i just want ppl to read it. but u dont have 2 b an ass hole about it.
Review By [Anonymous Reviewer] • Date [2 Aug 03] • Not Rated • Add Comment
Review of story "Outsider" from Anonymous Reviewer
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I'll tell you what I've told the last few people. LEARN TO SPELL! Character names are NOT negotiable. Narnissia? NARCISSA!
Review By [Anonymous Reviewer] • Date [2 Aug 03] • Not Rated • Add Comment
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